Reviewer: i_love_ginny
Date: 12/01/07 1:00
Chapter: Reborn from the Ashes

it was a really nice story,i hope u will write a sequel.

Author's Response: i wasn't, but then i had an idea, so maybe i will :-P

Reviewer: i_love_ginny
Date: 11/30/07 0:27
Chapter: Reborn from the Ashes

i really like the plot of this story.
how many more chapters have you planned to write.

Reviewer: sophiewalpole
Date: 11/28/07 13:00
Chapter: Reborn from the Ashes

that was brilliant i have read the whole 21 chapters in just a few hours,the only thing i didnt like was the ending, it seemed like you just wanted to get it finished, but to me it feels like there should be more, the story was amaing, i commend you to being like JKR with regards to description and feelings in the magical world. hope your next fanfic is the same.

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 11/25/07 20:49
Chapter: Reborn from the Ashes

Absolutely wonderful fan fic! Guess everything did work out in the end :)

Reviewer: jessip
Date: 11/24/07 20:36
Chapter: Reborn from the Ashes

since that was the last chapter, I must say it was an excellent story. The chapters were very exciting and I always looked forward to updates.
Well done on a great story.

Reviewer: jessip
Date: 11/24/07 0:38
Chapter: Reborn from the Ashes

Was that the last chapter???

Author's Response: yes

Reviewer: Carma Godsun
Date: 11/23/07 9:28
Chapter: Reborn from the Ashes

No offense, but you desperately need a beta reader. I'd be happy to offer my services, seeing as the storyline is excellent. Kudos!

Author's Response: It was good enough for Mugglenet, and therefore good enough for me ^^. However, if you read through and find mistakes let me know and I'll fix them.

Reviewer: Carma Godsun
Date: 11/23/07 9:28
Chapter: Reborn from the Ashes

No offense, but you desperately need a beta reader. I'd be happy to offer my services, seeing as the storyline is excellent. Kudos!

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 11/19/07 11:29
Chapter: Phoenix Rising

Absolutely amazing chapter! Belle seems to be up to something with that smile though :)

Author's Response: you guys cant see past her evil. bella likes dave. dont forget, she was married once, she is capable of love, though you wouldn't know it from the way she acts. she's smiling cause dave is thanking her and giving her a hug and she feels happy knowing that she's helping him out.

Reviewer: DMTAT003
Date: 11/18/07 14:04
Chapter: The Revelation and The Final Mission

I am not sure what I think of David. He is a complex character though.

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 11/18/07 11:12
Chapter: The Revelation and The Final Mission

I love these quick updates! Fantastic chapter also

Reviewer: jessip
Date: 11/17/07 19:49
Chapter: Fire in the Sky

That was a great chapter, I couldn't stop reading!!!!

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 11/17/07 12:31
Chapter: Fire in the Sky

Well that was exciting! Well written chapter also. :)

Reviewer: Ghoul In Pajamas
Date: 11/14/07 16:03
Chapter: Azkaban

That was really exciting! The reactions of the prisoners were very good and very believable. I have a question though, how did Snape die?

Author's Response: we don't know if he's alive or dead. its never addressed. as far as we know he took draco and disappeared, hiding from both the dark lord and from the order

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 11/08/07 6:43
Chapter: Azkaban

Exciting and wonderful chapter! I love the fairly quick updates! Great job with this fic

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 11/05/07 16:07
Chapter: Focus and Purebloods

Bad boy Dave!!! This is really getting interesting!!! Keep up the good work :)

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 11/02/07 17:40
Chapter: Prisoner and Immortality

Oh bad bad bad!!!! That is aweful! Good chapter though

Reviewer: rambkowalczyk
Date: 11/02/07 7:01
Chapter: Prisoner and Immortality

Not sure if I like the 'good guys' being the high Inquisition but I see how it shapes David's choices. I'm assuming the 5 are Shacklebolt, Tonks, Moody, Bill, and Lupin (the one at Bill's wedding?). Were you being deliberately vague as to what face Dave saw in the foe-glass? I'm guessing it was Moody or Lupin.

Speaking of foe glass, I think it should have been introduced earlier in the story and not having it appear out of the blue. Since it was Pansy who showed Dave the existance of the ROR, she could have suggested that the room come equippped with a foe glass so Dave could have some advance warning.

Dave's reasoning for joining the Dark Lord is enigmatic though I 'm sure this is intentional.

Author's Response: It's hazy reasoning that gets clarified later. I tried to build up the fact that Dave is a Slytherin, and though he's a nice guy, he's also quite ambitious and this gets amplified as he becomes more and more powerful. The 'good guys' are actually the antagonists in this story, because something I always like to talk about is how good and evil are relative to point of view. the foe glass is just meant to be ominous, it has no real meaning per say and it never comes up again. The five on the panel were in fact the 5 you've named, it was moody that Dave saw in the foe-glass since only one of his eyes is real the foe-glass portrays a guy with one eye.

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 10/28/07 17:03
Chapter: Professor Dumbledore and the Glass Wall

Hmm, Very interesting! Kinda sounds like Dave is a Phoenix. Great chapter!

Author's Response: he's something alright

Reviewer: MaraudingMarauders
Date: 10/24/07 15:44
Chapter: The Room of Requirement

Very interesting! Nice fan fic

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