so Sad! another great one as too leave a "proper review" I thought that the use of the poem was genius. Robert Frost is so amazing! please do more like these
It really mirrors your thoughts. You know, what would you think if someone you loved dearly died?
Author's Response: :D Good, that's nice to hear that I wrote it well! >.<
That really was beautiful! The poem fit perfectly, and I am disapointed that it wasn't yours, because the writing of the poem is very much like your own writing in this fic. It fits flawlessly.
I was touched by Ginny's view of the world, and the golden dawn was just so serene.
You captured her greif and mourning so well. It wasn't loud, but just a longing sadness, one that, like you said, has hope to soon dull a little. She has reason for life...
Anyway, great oneshot! It was truly magical and I really enjoyed it. Take care xx Chicklepea
Author's Response: Aw, thanks! :D I'd love that poem to be mine too! :p Glad you liked it, and glad that you understood it so well!rnrn~Evie
This brought tears to my eyes, it was really good! This is one of my favourite poems, and this fic matched it perfectly. The only thing I didn't like was that it was set at Hogwarts(right?) because I think it would be more plausible for her to be outside in her pyjamas if she was at the Burrow. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Well, when I wrote it, I was assuming that Harry had died in seventh year, and this was a year later, meaning that she'd be in her seventh year then and, really, it's so early in the morning, and she's so depressed... I can understand what you mean though, and thank you for pointing it out! **huggles** ~Evie
You know, whenever I beta read a story for other people, the one thing I find myself preaching about is the lack of descriptive details and how easy it is to just write something that contains nothing but dialogue. Obviously, written in the way that you have yours done, dialogue really isn't an issue but, my gosh Evie, the first few paragraphs BLEW me away. It was so beautifully written, I couldn't felp but reread them several times. Your writing style in this fanfic is like a drug - very easy to get drawn into and you just can't seem to get enough once you have experienced it.
It was just an added bonus that you used my absolute favorite poem of all time! *grins* (I memorized it in the 8th grade)
I love how you took each stanza of the poem and made it into something so totally yours and very unique. It was great how one who is familiar with the poem could see it throughout your story. I think one of the coolest parts was the way that, in the beginning everything was so serene and peaceful. As the story concluded, the scenery was still there (and still beautiful in its own ways) but it was not as majestic as it was before the "gold" was gone.
Incredible work, my dear. Absolutely amazing.
*was very tempted to leave a 'It's great. I love it' review, just for laughs*
Author's Response: Nicole!! **Loveth** What did I do to deserve so many lovely reviews from you? :D **huggles** Thank you so much - I love this poem to, I have it written all over my school books and stuff. ;) Thank you again!!! ~Evie
Wow, Evie. This is so amazingly well written. I have no nitpicks (which is a shock for me- my one friend once called me the Grammar Queen and told me I was way too strict with my ‘subjects’, so pat yourself on the back for that one), but I must say I love the contrast in here. You have all these images in the beginning, where the world is quiet and perfect, but the moment is fleeting and all those images come back in the opposite of what they were. Even Ginny’s point of view changes- from seeing the day as something to get through to looking forward to it. You really did a wonderful job with this.
Author's Response: Thank you! :D ~Evie
wow. just wow. i delayed reading this for some weird reason, i dont know why but i thought id read it now, particulary since i was studyin this same poem in english today and have to write an essay about it!
'But, good things never last. The world is always changing, a constant cycle of happiness and suffering. No one can escape it; it’s a fact of life. However, like the golden glow of the dawn, moments of happiness can be brief. '
Those lines perfectly describe the ideas in Frosts poem and its true. Its really a sad piece of writing, i could feel the tears welling up...poor Ginny! I loved the flashback, as well. this poem is bittersweet (an oxymoron if u wanna get technical, lol) and youve also captured that essence in this one-shot. I can tell that you spent a lot of time on this and worked really hard because its truly amazing...i loved it.....
Author's Response: SQUEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE! Thank you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :D **Is overjoyed at compliments** I did spend a long time on it - weeks, in fact! ;) ~Evie
I've always loved that Robert Frost poem, too, since it was featured in a 1980's movie called 'The outsiders'.
While I'm sorry Harry died, the story is plausible for Ginny to reminisce about the happy times they had together - would have liked more detail of those memories, though.
Author's Response: Yes - I got the poem from the book The Outsiders. I watched the film too, but, I didn't like it much. >.< Not as good as the book. ;) I wanted to keep the memories kinda vague, so people can make their own idea's about it all. :) Thanks for reviewing. ~Evie
What attracted me to this story was the poem; it is one of my absolute favorites. Frost just has a way with words, but so do you. I have to say your imagery is amazing. The first three paragraphs were beautiful.
What really touches me with this story is the message at the end. You take the message in the poem and have it go both ways, which is always a good reminder for us all. Good things will fade, but so will the bad. A great message of hope.
I'm sorry I don't have anything to critic, but was truly a touching story.
Author's Response: **huggles** Thank you! I love Frost's poem as well (obviously) and I get really excited whenever I see it anywhere. ~Evie
I know you don't want to hear this, but I love it. You are a really great descriptive writer, and I could visualize the scenes, especially in the beginning really well. Your vocabulary is one of your strengths, it really adds power to your story when you use longer words (ex. instead of saying "she walked" you said "her bare feet padded". It was a great fic though, to say the least...
Author's Response: Aw, thank you! :D ~Evie
beautiful, very sad but beautiful
Author's Response: thnx
It's a beautiful story. You're right the poem is beautiful. You described the scene so well. I'd love to read more from you.
Author's Response: Thank you! Then read more! I have more stories in my authors page! :D ~Evie
that was so sad but i like the poem i cant right poetry either but it was good
Author's Response: I didn't write that poem, remember. If I'd tried, it wouldn't have got accepted! Glad you liked it! ~Evie
your descriptions were beautiful, and the whole thing was just wonderfully written, i also love that poem!
Author's Response: **huggles** :D ~Evie
owwww!!!!gosh!!!your descriptions are very...very very!!!deep...but still you could understand it...i was about to cry...then it finished!!!awwwww...its a sad fic..but you'll be satisfied..after reading it..!!!excellent job!!exceeds expectations!,,,outstanding!
Author's Response: WHEEEEEEEE! Thank you! ~Evie
oh that was lovely! your descriptions were breathtaking. it was just amazing.
Author's Response: thank you... again. :p ~Evie
oh that was lovely! your descriptions were breathtaking. it was just amazing.
Author's Response: Thank you! :D
Love the poem...and the story
Author's Response: good.
i really really loved it your such a talented wrter i look forward to reading more of your fabulous fics xXxBabyBxXx
Author's Response: thank you! I have five others and more coming! :D ~Evie
you are an amazing writer! this was very beautiful. it really was the imagery was very storng and i felt like i could reach out and touch it. i didnt realize he was dead until the end when u said he was i thought tha this was the day after he had broken upwith her. but yeah i am crazy i will go back and read it again. the story really was beautiful. you protrayed her sadness extremely well and you incoperateed every detail of the grounds i really enjoyed this and yes i have to say i loved it! i look forward toreading other works by you in the future!
Author's Response: SQUEE! :D lol, I suppose it could be the day he broke up with her... ~Evie