This is a very sweet story :)
She’d once thought it was the snow; so many had found love after touching those flakes that seemed to fall from nowhere. That line was simply gorgeous. I really truly adore it. *sigh* People are always complaining about snow, but I love it. It's beautiful and magical.
The only thing I didn't like was the choice of name for Minerva's friend. The second I read 'Oliver Underwood' I thought "Why did she pick a name that was so close to 'Oliver Wood'?"
I think the description of him through Minerva's eyes was amazing. I don't remember the last time I read such a thorough, unique, realistic description of someone's physical features. It was incredible. I felt like you must have looked at an actual person and described him in the most perfect words. And I also really like how much character there is in his physical description - the dark shade at the tip on his nose, his meal skipping (tsk tsk). I think it's remarkable how well you developed this complete stranger of a character just within this one-shot.
I — I…d-d-don’t f-f-feel ligh..ter,” she muttered through clenched teeth. That also amused me greatly. Hee.
And the ending was wonderful. I suddenly feel all excited for her. Oh. How sweet. *imagines reunion* I hope he's still single *cough*
What a beautiful story. You've captured the subtle magic of the winter season. I adore the slight touch of a Dickensy 'Bah, Humbug!' from Minerva on the idea of snowball fights.
I have an endearing image of Minerva, hopping towards the door pulling on her boot, not even realizing that she really is delighted to be going on a walk with Oliver. I can see the youthful faces, with their spectacles sliding down their noses as they study in the library, and I can see Minerva nudging a plate of food closer to her skinny friend. You have given me a special treat!
~ The Order of Ravenclaw House Elves
i liked this.
possibly because mcgonagall is my favorite character...
but also because the writing is fierce. i liked it. :]
I loved this story! If you ever feel like writing a sequel, it would be great! I hadn't realized this was a one shot, and was looking forward to another chapter. I loved the characters, and another story with them would be great too.
I agree with Indigoenigma. This is one of the few fan-ficks that I enjoyed where the author didn't portray McGonagal wrong. I've also never been a big fan of one-shots but this was indeed a very cute story line.
I don't think a sequel would be good. It's just one of those stories that was meant to be short and to the point. Your last note kind of confused me since you said all the other characters were made up but the last book, Deathly Hallows, might prove some of your information false?
Either way, very cute story. Very enjoyable one-shot.
that was a very nice story. But i don't understand what went wrong. Why didnt they get together?
That was really well done. I haven't read very many romances with McGonagall that actually seem believeable. She just isn't all that suited to fluffy moments....:)
I also really liked the fact that there wasn't a romance between Dumbledore and McGonagall. Those never quite strike me as right, no matter how well they're written.
I think the dialogue between Oliver and Minerva was very well written. Very sweet, rather innocent, and very IC (especially MInerva). She does seem like the type to refuse to go outside in the cold.
Would you consider writing a sequel? This is brilliant and I think that it would be really interesting to see if she hires him or not - or what happens during the interview!!
Author's Response: Thank you very much for your kind comments. This story was intended to be merely a one-shot, so I'm not sure if I want to write a sequel. I think it'll be fun to just let you readers come up with the conclusion yourself =)
that story is sooo cute! will she hire him?!! you have to continue with a sequel! :-)