Reviews For They Don't Know Me
Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX
Date: 07/04/07 20:30
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wow, this was different. I really like the repitition. It gave it a cool flow. Good job.

Author's Response: Thanks! ^_^ Glad you liked it.

Reviewer: Euphrates
Date: 07/04/07 9:42
Chapter: Chapter 1

(The format is < blockquote > [text] < / blockquote >, but that makes huge gaps in the poem, too. There might be a different way, but I'm not sure.)

This is an amazing poem. I was just...shocked by how powerful it was. It's just amazing.

My favorite part:

They watch you fight-
But they don't see my struggle.
They believe in your power-
But they don't believe in my heart.

That part was amazingly well done. *applauds*

My only nitpick would be the rhythm is some places, especially this line:

But they see me as just another loss.

To me, it was a bit off with the rhythm of the rest of the poem. Otherwise, amazing job!


Author's Response: That one line you mentioned was actually one I considered changing, but didn't know how to reword. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: MissyQuill
Date: 07/04/07 7:33
Chapter: Chapter 1

Good! Is it from Ron's POV, bless the poor lad.=Sammy

Author's Response: Actually, it was meant to be Harry's. Thanks for reviewing! ^^

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