Wow, this was different. I really like the repitition. It gave it a cool flow. Good job.
Author's Response: Thanks! ^_^ Glad you liked it.
(The format is < blockquote > [text] < / blockquote >, but that makes huge gaps in the poem, too. There might be a different way, but I'm not sure.)
This is an amazing poem. I was just...shocked by how powerful it was. It's just amazing.
My favorite part:
They watch you fight-
But they don't see my struggle.
They believe in your power-
But they don't believe in my heart.
That part was amazingly well done. *applauds*
My only nitpick would be the rhythm is some places, especially this line:
But they see me as just another loss.
To me, it was a bit off with the rhythm of the rest of the poem. Otherwise, amazing job!
Author's Response: That one line you mentioned was actually one I considered changing, but didn't know how to reword. Thanks for the review!
Good! Is it from Ron's POV, bless the poor lad.=Sammy
Author's Response: Actually, it was meant to be Harry's. Thanks for reviewing! ^^