MuggleNet Fan Fiction
Harry Potter stories written by fans!
Reviews For February the 14th

Name: Rene4hp (Signed) · Date: 08/16/11 11:09 · For: February the 14th
HAHAHA!!! Amazing
Lots of Love,
Rene Luna Smith

Name: chattyswimmer (Signed) · Date: 10/24/10 17:59 · For: February the 14th
LOVE LOVE LOVE haha...so cute :):)

Name: miss ginny1 (Signed) · Date: 12/27/09 12:45 · For: February the 14th
OH my god! I love this story!

Name: A H (Signed) · Date: 04/24/09 11:26 · For: February the 14th
First of all, you've completely baffled me by making me enjoy romance. I don't know how you did it, but you did, and here I am, unable to wipe the smile off my face from the ending of this story. It's so… Lily and James. I mean, we don't know much about them, but I think you've really caught a moment in time that could totally be passed off as canon. The idea of an annual February 14th prank is completely believable, but more than that, undeniably adorable.

The way Lily acted at the beginning of the story plastered a smile on my face with super-glue. Right off the bat you pull the reader in with the mystery of the coming prank, the anxiety of Lily, the complete unawareness of James—it all flowed together so well, and there wasn't a single boring passage. I especially liked the exchange between James and Sirius'—totally canonical, and more so just amusing. :D Basically, what I'm trying to say, is that you built up the suspense very well.

And it built and it built and it built and them… no bam. :p But the little BAM more than sufficed for my reading pleasure. :D

I don't know what else I can say other than I loved reading this (although I hate admitting it :D The closet fluff-lover is coming out…). Now if only I could quit smiling…

Author's Response: Yay! I converted someone! ;) Hee. I'm very glad you enjoyed it, dear. This fic is terribly old now, and I'm not fond of the writing much at all - but to get such lovely praise for it just warms my heart. Thank you so much, my darling Ari!

Name: PheonixFlamesForever (Signed) · Date: 02/08/09 10:58 · For: February the 14th
Alright darling? I’ve never reviewed this, your earliest story, but I’m glad I came across it :D Firstly, this is very cute, a cute little romance which is just lovely.
“she still had another seventeen hours to get through before Valentines Day was over.” I love this. It shows me Lily’s meticulous side, the attention to detail that I think only she would do. The use of ‘Potter’ to address James as well, shows the apparent disparaging feelings she has for him. Feelings which hopefully change as we read through the story? I hope so. Actually, I know so, this is canon compliant. Why not call him James? Aren’t they ‘intimate’ enough, so to speak?

‘‘Remember we have to patrol the corridors tonight. Don’t be late,’ he said, and grinned.’ Is this my feminine intuition which suggests to me this line come in handy later? Is this for people to pick up on, I don’t know.

Your characterisation of Sirius, short though it might be seems perfect for me, in this little snippet. I like how you’ve captured the friendship which James and Sirius have, an ongoing sibling rivalry sort of thing. It’s very cute. If anything, they might seem a little too juvenile here. This is set in seventh year, I think, and perhaps they’d be a little more mature. The same can be said about Lily as well, she seems to be dealing with James’ previous advances quite immaturely. But then, I suppose James was never the most mature of creatures...

I like Lily’s conscience, or whatever it is. It’s a non-perfect Lily – I like it. I always thought Lily seemed far too perfect, and I was always way too jealous of her. She seems humanized here – she’s confused, finally an emotion other than flipping perfection! She’s suppressing them though- which is never good. They’ll explode.

I can see how much you’ve improved even in this short story. At times, the language used seems quite simplistic. As Lily read it, her heart filled with a million different emotions. But mostly one. I know how much you’ve improved and matured as a writer and I think this line now could be written in a million different ways now.

The end bit seems a little, simplistic. It’s been built up so much, but it ends sort of... flatly? It’s sweet and cute and fluffy, but it could be more. However, I must admit, the fairies are a lovely touch... I wish I’d done that. And as for the concluding sentence. Perfect. The cynicism is totally apt. ‘It was corny. It was overdone. It was so totally unoriginal; Lily couldn’t help but kiss him again.’ If I just had to nitpick, I’d say that the ‘totally’ in the final line seems slightly American.

But, my god, this is so cute. It’s such a lovely piece of fluff, and perfect for it. Don’t ever delete this, please Jen, it’s so cute. Your writing has improved so much, but this is a lovely piece. I really enjoyed this, darl.

Author's Response: Omg, I'm so embarrassed you reviewed this. I've been meaning to delete it, actually. >.> That said, I'm glad you seemed to enjoy it anyway. :) I understand all the nitpicks you've pointed out, really, but I'm going to ignore them because if I fixed everything wrong with this fic I would have to rewrite it. :P I'm so overjoyed by the comment that you think I'm a better writer now, though - at least all the fanfic was good for something, then. Thank you, dearie! <3

Name: LilyflowernProngs (Signed) · Date: 09/08/08 22:09 · For: February the 14th
Another great one!!! Not overlydone! But plenty of fluff
Your LOYAL fan,

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)

Name: Seer_Witch (Signed) · Date: 06/29/08 21:11 · For: February the 14th
Ohh...FLUFF! Heehee, I love fluff! I'm a sucker for fluff, James/Lily fics, and detailed kissing scenes ;D And you had all three! Well, the kissing wasn't that detailed but CUTE!!!

Author's Response: Thank you! If you like Lily/James, then I have another, soon-to-be chaptered fic up as well that you might like. *blatantselfadvertising*

Name: lucilla_pauie (Signed) · Date: 02/25/08 7:43 · For: February the 14th

What were you talking about and what were you thinking, planning to take this gem down, Jen?

It's sweet and funny and sweet. I love how Lily seemed unsure and confused with her feelings for awhile. Her inner argument strikes as in-character, too. Fiery and fierce. It made me giggle. I also loved James's perseverance and the 'sincere fluff' of the note. Lily is such a denial queen, isn't she? I'm glad she finally acted on what she is denying. Contrary to what she thinks, the note did woo her. There will undoubtedly Lily fans who will frown at her display in the Great Hall, but for me, it suits her just fine. I think it's a fitting reward to James, to have a public kiss after years of his very public valentines.


Author's Response: I still can't believe you like this. I can't believe anyone likes this, actually. *grins* Thanks for the lovely comments, Joanna.

Name: Indigoenigma (Signed) · Date: 01/15/08 22:36 · For: February the 14th
Jennifer ~

That was very, very sweet and fluffy. James/Lily is one of my very favorities and you pulled it off very well. I liked how James actually did an over-the-top thing at the very end. I kind of wanted to see a little bit more description in the beginning. Why did Lily take those precautions? What were those other Valentines? But, anyways, I really liked it. Great job!


Author's Response: Thanks, Kelly! I was going to put in some of the previous Valentines, but in the end I decided against it. Maybe I'll add it in one day. Thanks again for the lovely review!

Name: hogwartsismydrug (Signed) · Date: 01/14/08 15:22 · For: February the 14th
sweetness! I usually hate one-shots, but this one was pretty good!

Author's Response: Thanks again!

Name: hogwartsismydrug (Signed) · Date: 01/14/08 15:22 · For: February the 14th
sweetness! I usually hate one-shots, but this one was pretty good!

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad I've changed your opinion!

Name: electronicquillster (Signed) · Date: 12/31/07 20:34 · For: February the 14th
What a fun story you have here, SPEW buddy. Lily had quite the personality, and it was very tangible to the reader. It is, as you say in the beginning, quite fluffy. A little more sugary and fluffy than I typically read.

There were a couple of things that I wanted to point out, though. In the very beginning of the story, the first paragraph details a list of things Lily does to prepare for the day of horror, and then the second paragraph begins with "She did that now," and continues on. I was confused as to just what it was that she was doing. Was she redoing the charms? But she had already done them. I think this could be less confusing if the curtains were mentioned in the last half of the last sentence of the first paragraph, or if you mentioned precisely (though not in an obvious/annoying way) what she was doing in the beginning of that second paragraph. Maybe something along the lines of, "She slowly pulled the curtains back now, carefully looking around..."

The second thing was that you said James and Lily had been working together as Head Boy and Girl for almost a year at this point. However, since it's only February, that puts them at only half a year: February till September. Just something that irks people like me who are very detail oriented, most people probably aren't as insane as me.

Last was a canon error about fairies. They are lights unto themselves, so they don't need to hold lights. They usually hold other things when we see them in the books - garland or ornaments or whatnot.

Anyway, thank you for the fun read, and happy new year!

Author's Response: :D Thanks, Marie! You pointed out a lot of things I never thought of or noticed. I didn't actually have a beta for this story, though ... *hangs head in shame* I'll get around to fixing this and possibly getting a beta one day. Thanks so much for your lovely review! Happy new year to you too!

Author's Response: :D Thanks, Marie! You pointed out a lot of things I never thought of or noticed. I didn't actually have a beta for this story, though ... *hangs head in shame* I'll get around to fixing this and possibly getting a beta for it one day. Thanks so much for your lovely review! Happy new year to you too!

Name: SIRIUS WILL NOT DIE (Anonymous) · Date: 10/01/07 3:31 · For: February the 14th
I remembered what else I wanted to say!

I really liked how you had Lily make her friend stun the air, it made me laugh! Overall, very funny.

So was James and his stupid, corny display of affection for dear Lily.

Oh, and I don't know if you have already or not, but I think you might want report the review from Kelc, because I think you could get in to trouble for leaving it there.

Not to overstep my boundaries or anything, just thought I'd point that out!


Author's Response: Thanks again! I'm still shocked people find this funny. Oh, and I have reported the reveiw, don't worry.

Name: SIRIUS WILL NOT DIE (Anonymous) · Date: 10/01/07 3:25 · For: February the 14th
Aw. That was cute. Very well written. I loved Sirius and James' Valentine competition thing. Very Sirius. All the characters were very well written.

Great story!


Author's Response: Thanks!

Name: Abelinda Malfoy (Anonymous) · Date: 09/30/07 15:31 · For: February the 14th

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm actually quite surprised that people think this is funny, because I didn't think I was very good at humor! :)

Name: x_lily_evans_x (Signed) · Date: 09/09/07 8:47 · For: February the 14th
AWWWWW! That was just so sweet! (:

Author's Response: Thanks!

Name: Love_is_4ever (Signed) · Date: 09/06/07 8:22 · For: February the 14th
This was a GREAT, little, fluffy one-shot!!

I really loved it.. One can really connect with Lily's thoughts. I think we've all gone through a time when we think we "hate" someone, but then somebody makes a comment taht gets you thinking, "What if-?"

I absolutely lvoed the way you did it!! 10/10

~ Samarie

Author's Response: Awww! Thanks so much! Iím really glad you liked it.

Name: Pussycat123 (Signed) · Date: 08/22/07 7:43 · For: February the 14th

That was so cute! Okay, I'll admit. I was so overcome with emotion over that last review you left (me? overreact about something? are you kidding?) that I went to see if you had any fics up, and would probably have read it and said I liked it no matter what it was. But this was so cute! So unbelievably ... ARGH! It was so ridiculously JAMES that I couldn't help but like it.

I read in your profile that you're in love with James. Well, if that's the case, we have a hell of a lot in common! Except I can't decide if my close second is Sirius or Remus, because I love them both too much to choose.

But anyway. This was really fun and fluffy! I loved all of Lily's long winded precautions, and that final scene with the fairies, and then that last line that just made me grin all over my face. Sometimes I scare myself with just how in love with a fictional character I can get. Some people (i.e. the also fictional Lily) get all the luck ...

Author's Response: Thankyou thankyou thankyou! How kind. I'm so thrilled! *dances around manically* Because I don't overreact either. I'm so glad you liked it. But seriously, how could anyone NOT love James? He's the perfect guy. I adore Remus too, but Sirius just gets over the line at second. Thanks so much for reviewing! *Goes off to dance some more*

Name: luvbug518 (Signed) · Date: 08/17/07 17:36 · For: February the 14th
THat's soooo sweet!!! I really liked it. :)

Author's Response: Thanks so much!

Name: cairyangel (Signed) · Date: 08/10/07 4:43 · For: February the 14th
nice one shot! wouldn't have thought lily would kissed him, when she said Annoying, :P so uncalled for. maybe you should've specified how she grabbed it. like grabbed it, pulled his face down so that it leveled with hers or something. maybe tip toe kiss. so romantic... *giggles* okay, won't say any more things, may make you guys puke with my corniess. thinks it's a worth-to-be-read one shot fanfic!

Author's Response: Thanks again!

You must login (register) to review.