Very good...I don't normally read stories with Draco as the main charecter as I don't like him that much, but this is very good.
Author's Response: Thanks!
Lindsey, you're amazing. I think you like making me cry, because pretty much all of your stories have made me cry (: Oh! I noticed one little nitpicky thing... She pulled her hair down from her bun, allowing blonde, stringy wisps to tangle in her face. If you're talking about Pansy, in canon it's dark, not blonde. Just thought I'd point that out for you. *hugs* xxvictoria
Author's Response: *smacks head on table* I knew that. I don't know, I've always envisioned Pansy as a blonde. Thanks so much for the review, dear! ~Lindsey :)
An interesting perspective in the mind of draco malfoy
and it was a cool story too =P
Author's Response: Thanks! ~Lindsey :)
Hey, Ron x Hermione! Iíve read a couple of things of yours and I have to say that this is one of the better ones. Personally, I donít like Draco Malfoy much, and like it less when the attempt is made to portray him in a sympathetic fashion. Despite that, I still thought your story was good. I thought your descriptions of Azkaban, while graphic in places Ė deposits Ė where very effective. You definitely left me with a sense that the wizard prison is an awful place.
I havenít read all of your stories, but it seems like you really worked hard on your descriptions in this one when compared against the others. I think it paid off for you, overall. One thing that jumped out at me is the word emaciated. I think you used it like three times in your story. The problem is you donít run into word often. So, when you do use it, itís going to stick it readersí minds. It isnít as though you thoroughly abused it (like every other paragraph). Still, it seemed like maybe you could be more creative in describing that state, if it even needed to be described again. Sometimes, if you make a powerful enough impression the first time through, I donít think you need to go back over it. It just sounds repetitive.
Hey, take that with a grain of salt, though. Itís very nit-picky. And, no one is handing me any awards for writing any time soon. Itís just an opinion.
Good look in the contest and keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Um, Skipper, honey? You need to have an award for 'The Curse'. *hugs* *giggles* Thanks so much for your nitpicks . . . but, wow, you don't even know how many times this was sent in and out in and out . . . it went through some major redoing and must have gotten messed up when I went back through and didn't remember I had already used things. Thanks so much for your wonderful nitpicks, Lindsey likes them. ~Lindsey :)
oh, it was so sad! It was a wonderful story, but still so sad! the girl was Pansy, right? ooooh, I was the first to review!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! ~Lindsey :)