That was very good! One thing though, at the beginning you start out on having him as a six year old then you move onto him having feelings for Hermione (right?). It just confused me a little bit.
You are an awesome writer!
Author's Response: Well, the thing is the memories were progressing with age as they went along. Yes, he was having feelings for Hermione at one point. Thanks for the review!
Wow. This one-shot is extremely powerful. It justifies everything Draco has been through, and his reactions to all those times at Hogwarts.
The ennunciation of his emotions was one of my favourite parts of this one-shot. It added your own style of writing into it, and made it a more interesting read. Yet, even with you telling the reader his emotions flat out, you still went about putting them into his actions and dialogues. So, editing the phrase slightly, you showed the reader and told them how he felt. It was truly unique.
I really like how the nightmares started young, and gradually worked their way until he was older, and the arguments seemed to be more brutal and the consequences more dire. It helped the reader to sympathize with what he had gone through.
One of my favourite banters between Lucius and Draco was, “The Dark Lord is not my destiny.” Only to be replied with, "THE HELL HE IS!" by Lucius. I just love the characterization you put into the arguments. It really showed the different aspects of the pure-blood pair, especially with Draco. Although he still carried that Draco-like cold atmosphere about him and the verbal attacks that strike below the belt; he finally stood up for himself. The different nightmares also helped make his characterization more believable.
You just couldn’t help but hint at the Draco/Hermione pairing, could you? (lol) =]
Overall, fantastic one-shot. I thought it was simply amazing. I think you made a very wise choice to turn this from a drabble to the one-shot.
Author's Response: It's funny, because the ennunciation of the emotions, as you said, only came as an afterthought while making it a one-shot. I was able to add an extra dream in order to write an emotion I wanted to show, and made the very ending words tie up like I wanted. =]
Of *course* I had to hint Dramione. ;) You know me!
Thank you so much for your wonderful review, and for betaing this story, too! *huggles* If you are not in SPEW, I think you should really look into it, Danielle!
Wow, This was so powerful, and emotional. I loved the way you showed their relationship. I truly feel as though Draco has been somewhat abused by his Father, mentally speaking, but possibly physically as well and you showed that wonderfully. My favorite part was the ending. Very good job on this, I hope you did well in your class.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review, Haylee! I'm glad you liked it.