Nicely written. I can definitely feel his despair.
Wow, so sad. I'm guessing this is H/G? It fits the pair quite well. Hopefully they will get together in DH and then Harry won't be so lonely. Anyways, excellent job!
Author's Response: Thanks. I'm glad that Harry gets to be happy for once (even if I didn't write it:))
Whoa - this poem is amazing. *is awed* I love the idea behind it, and I love the way it is portrayed. The beat and rhythm is superb. It's just...astounding. I cn't believe how well it flows. I also love the word choice and rhyming. It made the entire poem very easy to read, and it all flowed so well.
My favorite part:
As the storm finally breaks,
And the darkness kills the light,
I wish that I were not alone,
As I enter the final fight.
*loves* That part is amazing. Just...wow. I love the imagery and the emotions portrayed. So well done.
I hope there's some way that I will,
But for her my life I'd give.
The first line in that part just seems a little off-beat (I could be wrong)...I think it'd be fine if you just deleted 'that' from it.
Otherwise, fantastic job.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing, and what a lovely review it was. I am very grateful for your imput.
Fabu, keep writing!!!
Author's Response: Thanks!