He swore loudly when the elevator doors opened, revealing a packed compartment. I don't usually, really ever, read Marauder Era stories, so reading James and Lily is new for me. Your summary stuck out to me, so I decided that this would be the one I would read. I really like your characterization of James thus far through the story. The image of a near-father cursing ever few seconds is quite funny.
She’d insisted on waiting for you to arrive, but…well,” Sirius shrugged, “She could only hold out for so long.” Ha ha, this is hilarious!
I wasn’t blind the past nine months, you know. I’ve watched you love that baby when it was still in the womb. Sometimes, I see you just staring at Lily’s belly with such love, it made me wish I was that baby. Even Lily’s exasperated because of how much you rub her tummy and how many times you’ve insisted on feeling the baby kick. And don’t tell me you spent so long fussing over the wallpaper of the nursery to duck out at the last minute, Prongs.” Sirius winked. I like how you've told the story of Lily and James' past nine months concerning Lily's pregnancy and summed it all up in one paragraph. You've portrayed the emotion and love that James has for Harry perfectly, just how a real father should. Nice work.
James couldn’t but smile. I think that you forgot to place a 'help' after 'couldn't'.
Here you go, James. Don’t panic. Just like you’d practiced.
Lily held out her arms.
Baby’s head in the crook. It's extremely sweet how you have James talking inwardly to himself to better remember how to hold his son. I also love how you've allowed Lily to name the baby. It was a very sweet moment. And the ending was wonderful. For James to blatantly state that he was going to protect his baby son with his life was a very nice touch to a great story. Nice work.
Oh, that was so sweet! What a great fic, especially for Father’s Day, but for any day, really. It leaves me all warm and fuzzy inside.
I love that you start it out with some lame receptionist and James just completely in a rush. He’s so adorable, and stupid elevator for being full, and go James for not stopping to be reprimanded by a lame old nurse. And I love that he runs into Sirius, mostly because I love whenever Sirius appears, but also because the fact that Sirius is outside the room is in-character for him. He would be waiting for James.
I was sort of sad that we missed the actual birth, though, just like James is sad. It would have been a nice thing to see, but I guess it also probably would have been a slightly weird scene to write. Not that you couldn’t have done it, but…yeah. -shrug- But, there’s a hint of how the war is affecting everyone’s lives. I mean, James almost starts to explain about Moody something or other, and it just barely brings in the war. It’s enough to remind us, though, so that was a nice addition.
I really loved Sirius’s character in this. I thought you did a great job with him, and his little pep talk was so sweet and heartfelt and exactly like what Sirius would say to James. Plus, yay for godfather moment. -wink- This made me laugh: “How long have you been out here canoodling with Sirius and not with your own wife?” I heart the Marauders indeed.
The ending is great, even if it is a little sad because we know what eventually happens to the Potters. Again, there’s just that small reminder of the war and all the terrible things that it brings. But, this fic is so lovely. I read so much angsty stuff that it’s nice to read something warm for once. Great job!
okay um well it was a sweet idea but i totally think james wouldve been there y'know?
i really liked your style of writing and i thought it was really cute just not my fave
this is awesome once again!! I love the dialouge between James and Sirius, but I think Lily would have more of a fit.. I know I would :P Very well written! This was a one-shot, right? Seems like it...
Aw, that was really sweet. I especially liked the talk between Sirius and James. Good job.
aw... thats so sweet
Awww. Too sweet!
it loved it x x
This was so sweet. I love it!
"Images flashed through his mind. A bullied little boy. A flashy teenage girl smiling flirtatiously. A young man swathed in black with sunken, blank eyes." I like the foreshadowing.
awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwe! that's so sweet! and i like the “James Harold Potter.” Both men looked up. The third and fourth of the gang formerly known as the Marauders stuck their heads out the room. “How long have you been out here canoodling with Sirius and not with your own wife?”
thing! LOL funny! love this! can't wit to read more of your storys! and if i already had, KOOL!