That was good I so did not expect Sirius to act like that! Great Job!!
Author's Response: That's really good to hear! I'm glad that it's not too predictable. Thanks for the review!
Great chapter! Beautiful imagery and painful reuinons. Good job!
Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked it! I really wanted this one to be good. Thanks for the review!
Nice job, I can't wait for the next one.
Eep! I feel so famous! Lol. For once, though, I don't have any corrections to make. -winker- I'm glad you added that a/n at the end, though. It made me at least a little more forgiving of your shortness and also excited about the chapters to come. I hope you get lots more reviews m'dear because (I'm not sure if I've said this before) but you deserve them! Thanks for your beta work on my story as well. So far the reviews have all been great! *thumbs up*
~Beauty Fades [the 'mazing new beta]
Aw. It was very refreshing to finally get a look at some cannon characters and also from their POV. You portrayed Sirius very well, and everything seemed to flow together very smoothly. It's nice to wonder how he will react when she shows up, since you have clarified that he thinks she's dead.
I sent you an email asking you a few questions, but besides that rather random note I enjoyed this chapter probably more than the other two. Probably because Sirius is cannon and Erika isn't, I was more comfortable with him.
Hmm... I don't think I have any negative comments other than that Harry seemed slightly immature but nothing big or TOO horrible. Lol.
Hope you get lots more reviews. You deserve them, dear.
Beauty Fades XD
Author's Response: I agree with you about Harry. I've tried to make him as true-to-character as I could, but he's been much harder to write than I expected. I thought he would be the easiest because we all know him so well, but I guess that's what's made it harder. You sent me an e-mail? I never got anything. If you want, you can try re-sending it. I'd love to hear what you have to say. Thanks again for the review!
wow :D i love it.... can you please update :D.. haha I love story's about sirius .. and even more when its after azkaban ;)
Author's Response: Those are always my favorite too...probably why I decided to write one myself! Thanks for the review!
Aww, I feel sorry for Erika. She seems so lonely! Good descriptions and I hope we get to find out more about Erika in the following chapters. This one seemed kind of vague. :)
Author's Response: There will be a lot more info about Erika in the future, but I wanted to keep her a little ambiguous at the beginning. Thanks for the review!
Wow. That was extremely long but still very good. I was mad at myself after I reviewed to it last time and totally forgot to remember the title. -headbang-
Once again, your millions of paragraphs are all filled with amazing discriptions and worthy of the extremly... longness... (o.0 Yes I do write stories, why do you ask? hehe...) of each one.
I am indeed anxious of what will happen when Sirius and -checks strange name- Erika meet. Be sure not to rush it though! Keep us and the millions of fan that just haven't shown up yet waiting! Sometimes that's an author's biggest mistake: rushing things. >_>
Anyhoo... LOVED the second chapter and shall be waiting for more. As for the negative things (because we can't live without those) I didn't like how you portrayed Dumbledore in that last scene. You expressed Erika being surprised and irritated by his understanding but isn't that his usual personality? And it kind of freaked me out when he hugged her. Dunno if that sounds stupid or not but for me, that was just a little too forward, even for Dumby. He just usual keeps his space with people and studies them over those stupid half-moon glasses.
All in all, I give you an 8/10 for this chapter. ;) Hope you get more reviews because from the longness of this chapter, you've earned them. -pokes-
Author's Response: I totally understand what you mean about Dumbledore. I know he seemed a little out of character, but I guess I kind of did that on purpose. I pictured the members of the old Order to be very close and I thought Dumbledore would be more friendly and familiar with them. I can definitely see where your coming from though. Thanks for the great review! I really appreciate the criticism, it was definitely helpful. I'm so glad you like it so far. Hopefully I can get the next one up soon.
I am very interested to see how Sirius reacts to Erika when they meet. I see him as being intolerant of her self pity and moping though!
Author's Response: I'm glad you like it so far! I'm hoping I'll be able to get the next chapter up soon.
Aww. No one's reviewed so far.
I think it's very good so far though I can't tell if this is suppose to be in the magical or the muggle world. If it's magical then things might be just a tad too muggle-like in my opinion.
Your discriptions are very well written and don't seem to drone too much without having a point. I'm anxious to see the next chapter and I hope more people review for you! :)
Author's Response: Thanks a lot for the review, I'm glad you were the first! This first chapter is set in the muggle world, but that won't be the case for all the chapters. Erika's been cut off from the magical community for 13 years; I maybe should have made that more clear, but there'll be more about it in later chapters. Thanks again!