I was looking around for an alternative to the common topics and I'm glad I found it. Refreshing POV. It was very well done and you clearly expressed Padma's pain over Seamus. I think there was one spot where you put "Padma" but I think it should have been "Parvati." It was about 2/3 of the the way down.
Thanks for the nice read.
This is really good! I've added you to my favourite authors! You rock!
Author's Response: Wow, thanks!
:] This was really cute. I've never really read a story about Padma before or read a Padma/Seamus story. I have to say, I like the pair. You sometimes forget, since HP is so focused on Harry, Ron, and Hermione, that there are other people in their grade (and dorms) growing up and seeing each other.
It was very good. I liked the way you portrayed Padma and how you connected her to Ron's situation. Great job!
"I seriously hoped I wasn’t going to the Ball with a cross-dresser."
:D :D Favorite line!
Author's Response: When I came up with this story, I was actually at Disneyland (weird, I know) and without access to GoF. So when I was playing it out in my mind, I was actually expecting it to be Padma/Dean. There is that line Parvati gives Harry about Lavender going with Seamus, but I thought she was going with Dean, and Dean later asks how Harry and Ron got the best-looking girls in their year. (Sorry if this all sounds really weird. I'm about to go get my wisdom teeth out, so I'm a little loopy right now.) Anyway, I'm so glad you liked it! I was a little afraid I made Padma seem too...whiny when in the book she seems more annoyed than distraught. It's also nice to learn that the stuff about Ron and Hermione worked. I'm such a big Ron/Hermione shipper that I just couldn't pass up the opportunity to slip them in.
I love how you’re showing us Padma’s feelings during the events of GoF. She’s often overlooked, and her somewhat bitter assessment of the situation, especially as compared to her own twin, Parvarti is refreshing.
This is an unusual pairing. I have to admit, I clicked on this story rather randomly, based solely upon the fact that Seamus is one of my favourite, oft-ignored characters, and the pairing intrigued me. I like how you’ve handed the relationship between the two twins – we of course see more of Parvarti, as readers, as she is actually in Gryffindor, and therefore interacts with Harry more frequently; but you’ve taken it a step further, using this as a basis for Padma’s somewhat over-shadowed personality.
The build-up is a tad weak, though I was glad with how you addressed the obvious problem inherent in the fact that they are in completely different houses who share very few common classes.
“No, I’m Padma, Parvati’s sister.”
I find it interesting, how she would feel the need to point out that she is Parvarti’s sister; as if there were many completely unrelated people wandering around who just happened to look identical to the two of them. Perhaps she just babbles under pressure. *sniggers*
When I looked back at my eggs, I realized that they had been arranged like his face.
*sniggers* Okay, I have to wonder now, how one can arrange scrambled eggs into such a Picasso-esq portrait *grins*
You do a good job of arousing your readers’ sympathy – Padma is a very real character, and you’ve portrayed her sympathetically, and without the rather overdone and heavy-handed drama that can bear down a cute little story like this, like an albatross around the neck.
You’re grammar and spelling are quite good, with no real errors jumping out to distract from your writing (which is well done, as I tend to catch a lot of them *lol*)
All in all. a very cute read, and one I’m glad to have found.
Author's Response: First off, thank you so much for this really long review! Reviews that simply say, "I liked it a lot," are nice to get, but they don't really say what the reader liked and disliked. I just wanted to make a comment about the eggs thing. I thought since Padma has quite a little crush on your hands, she can't escape him. It only looked like Seamus to her because he is what was floating around in her head. Does that make any sense? Sorry for that long explanation. I'm glad you thought I portrayed Padma well. I wasn't sure if I was overdoing everything.