As promised, here's a review from pulitz over at H_E *waves*
That fic was incredibly cute and fluffy and Percy, oh Pretentious Perfect Prefect Percy. I loved how he went back an forth between not viewing Penelope as girl but rather as a "regular person" and then suddenly viewing her as a girl in spite of it all when he suddenly realises she's a girl and she's lovely.
I was always disappointed at the lack of Penelope in canon but this little fic here was so lovely it makes me forget there's almost no canon!Penny. ;)
"After all, Percy had no time for girls. He viewed them as a necessary but unfortunate part of life"
is SO Percy. Well done!
i really like penny/percy fics but this is the only one i have found
this fic is so sweet it is my amongst my favorites, i loooovvveeee iiiitttt ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !
woah babyyyy! its really sweet and cute!
woah babyyyy! its really sweet and cute!
It's great! I love the way you showed how Percy actually started liking Penelope instead of just diving into into the story. It added a lot to it. We actually see Percy's feelings for her devoloping and that's important. Again, it's great!
Oh! This is so cute! Its hard to imagine Percy with a nice, funny, romantic side, even if only slightly so.
*huggles SPEW buddy*
I clicked on this story because I’ve never read this particular missing moment before, and I was interested to see how you portrayed it. I really like the characterisation of Percy in this story. I feel that here we see small elements of the character that we know in canon, but we also see someone who is much more real than we know, i.e. we see the side of him that his family would never see, which is fantastic.
Percy had glanced up to ask Penelope a question and was caught off guard when he saw the way the sun was filtered through her hair, looking like a golden halo around her head.
I like the way that this line portrays Percy like a real boy, and not just the pompous study orientated character that we see in canon. It shows that he can be distracted just like anyone else can be distracted.
So Penelope wasn’t just a regular person any more. Oh, no. She was a girl.
Hehee. *giggle* Here, I felt that there was a ‘Weasley’ sense of humour seeping in somehow. This stating the obvious is really nice, and lightens the atmosphere up. In a way it reminds me of the type of denial that we saw with Ron/Hermione.
Prefect rounds were important, of course, but he was a teenaged boy.
Again, I love your style of writing here! I love the serious tones mingled with the humour. I especially also like the way that Percy handles the situation with Ginny. I like how you portray his embarrassment and then the idea that he begins to care less and loosen up. It shows the effect that Penelope must have on him really well. :)
This is very well written Abi, well done!
aww! so sweet and funny at the same time! loved it!
I love this story! *grins*
Let's see. To start -- Percy. I love your characterisation of him. He viewed them as a necessary but unfortunate part of life That line made me laugh, right off the bat. Poor Percy.
I really like how you showed how his relationship with Penny had come about. The platonic connection first, how he felt more comfortable with her and how he didn't think of her as a "girl" because of how she treated him. (And it makes me so curious as to what Penny was feeling about Percy throughout their relationship.) The way you described her on the day in the greenhouse was beautiful -- the imagery was fabulous, and I could definitely picture her. And then, Penny was a girl again ;) I really like that. And the bit about his "well-reglated heart" skipping a beat. It just... makes so much sense. And I think it's a great idea, the way you chose to frame the development of Percy's feelings, and it's also very suited to his character. :)
And, the bit with him sending off the letter? Oh my goodness, I most definitely related to him in that part. I know what that feels like. The waiting. And it not being alright until you get the reply. And then how everything is just instantly fixed when you do get the reply.
Also, great to see Percy doing something a little bit naughty instead of being the uptight Prefect we're used to. The justification was simple but perfect -- he was a teenaged boy.
I'm horrified for Percy with Ginny's walking in, but also immensely amused. Now we know where Ginny picked up her habit of kissing in hidden corners of Hogwarts. *cough* Who'd have guessed?
And, the last bit is just adorable. It really gives a good idea of the relationship, and I think it's very very sweet.*ships Percy/Penelope.
This is a terrible review. Oops. Well, I just think this is a very well done, very sweet little story. It's also very realistic of love and relationships, I think. And it's rare to see good Percy fic, where we get to see a good side of his character prior to OOTP when he leaves his family. Good job, dear :)
Abi! *hugs SPEW-buddy*
You know how hard it is to find a story on your Author’s page that hasn’t been reviewed by three dozen SPEWers? You are certainly blessed with getting some amazing reviews. I know why, though, now that I’ve read one of your stories. You’re an amazing writer!
I love these missing moments stories and you did a good job characterising Penelope Clearwater, a character that we never really see in the books. Percy, too, was very well done. I especially liked the way he reminded me of Ron at times, while still being his own character. For example the distinction he made between girls and Penelope, who he saw as he person, not a girl, until that one class when he realised she was actually a girl as well as a person. That reminded me of Ron and the way he sees Hermione a lot.
Percy’s shyness was also an adorable character trait. I liked how it took him a while to be comfortable around Penelope, but then during the scene in the empty classroom you describe he was again self-assured, like we know him to be around his family.
Although Penelope’s reaction to being seen was nice as it showed a more light-hearted side of both her and Percy, I would have liked to know what she was feeling, because she was the one who wanted to keep their relationship a secret. Would they simply trust Ginny not to tell anyone, or would Penelope ask Percy to talk to his sister and make sure their secret was safe with her? Your story left these questions unanswered and I would have really liked to know how this affected the relationship of Percy and Penelope, or if it didn’t affect it at all.
‘What —’ Percy began, but that was all her could get out before Penelope pushed him back against the door and pressed her mouth to his. I caught a small typo here, this should be ‘he’ not ‘her’.
You’ve got a really lovely story here, Abi, I enjoyed reading it very much.
Oh this is so cute.
I love it.
i don't think ive ever read a percy/penny fic before! its good!
I think 'aww' describes this excellently. I love Percy, and I thought he was well characterized here. This is going onto my favorites!
that was so cute :] good job.
i loved this! i definitely enjoyed how you displayed a 'softer side' of Percy, and a lot of insight on his point of view. great writing, and very creative =D i love when people do the missing scenes thing.
This is so funny and fluffy. Fluffy funny story. Loved it so much. You really got Percy very well, the whole thing about girls being a 'necessary but unfortunate part of life'. And then, of course, he wanted to kiss Penny as much as possible because he had been denying himself the pleasures of kissing a girl for so long. Makes complete sense. Although, I think Ginny might have handled herself a little differently, but that was the CoS her, and not HBP her. Great job! :D