amazing but sad
Author's Response: That's what I was trying to go for! Thanks!
Actually, yeah, there is a right way. It's called grammar. There are rules. You wouldn't say "Me is going to the supermarket today." Whom is a form of the word who, you can't just use whichever one you feel like.
Author's Response: Okay, well thanks for your help. ~Lindsey :)
Wait... "fred cheated on her with Lavender"??? Did I just completely miss the story? --Ananya
Author's Response: No . . . Ron cheated on her with Lavender! *giggles*
I liked the story, the grammar kind of threw me off though. I think you're confused about 'whom'. You use it in cases like "To whom am I speaking?" but if you flip the sentence around, you say "who am I speaking to?" Does that make sense?
Hermione, the girlfriend, had been woken up by her red-haired friend [no comma] Ginny, who had told her what her boyfriend had done.
There wereMr. and Mrs. Weasley[no comma] who, proud to see her, had ruined the picture by coming too close.
She thought of her friends, of her teachers[no comma] and of her family who[no comma] even through those tough times had loved her.
It's is a great story, very imaginative, but I think your grammar is dragging you down something awful. The plotline is great though, keep writing!
Author's Response: Hmm . . I may follow through with a few of your nitpicks, but I may just end up keping them the same. The way some of it is worded . . . well, the way you nit-picked through it. . . it could have been done either way, yours or mine, really. There's no right way, it could have gone either, I'm fairly sure. Thanks for your thorough help, though! ~Lindsey :)
it wonderful! but you had a few things that were worded weird that made it confusing for a few sentences. but other than that it was perfect! did Ron cheat on her with Lavender?
Author's Response: Thanks so much! Yes, Fred cheated on her with Lavender. ~Lindsey :)
I got a little confused about halfway, but I thought it was great! Ron did... what did Ron do? Why do you always kill Ginny? Was Hermione married to Ron? Why am I asking so many questions? What is the meaning of life?
Author's Response: LOL, Jess! If you read the others in this series of one shots (A Time to Fall, Seven, Livid, and Calculating) you'll see the storyline that I put behind this. It's just a bunch of seperate stories on Ron and Hermione. All of your questions will be answered there. Jess, when am I getting the next chapter to your lovely story? I want it. *grins* ~Lindsey :)
Ooo, lovely story Lindsey! This was very unique, I can't say I've read a story quite like it. Great job!
Author's Response: Thanks so much, Ashley! ~Lindsey :)
Awww. I knew the old lady was hermione when u mentioned chocolate eyes. So ron cheated on her or something? If so who with. Let me kno will ya? Good job tho.
Author's Response: LOL, your screen name is great. *giggles* Anyway, this story is ina kind of series, and if you read Livid another one shot I have, you'll find out. :) Also, the other series with it are A Time to Fall, Calculating, Seven, and Livid. There will be two more coming, and hopefully soon because there is a deadline. :) And, yes, Ron cheated on her. I'm glad you liked it! ~Lindsey :)
that was a really good story
Author's Response: Aw, thanks! ~Lindsey :)
Wow Lindsey! That was a very good story!
First off, I would have never knew that that the Great-Grandmother was Hermione. To think that the final Battle was in her 20's - 30's. is . . . interesting.
I have a question though. Can you pretty please tell me what Ron did to be put in prision? I don't know if it was in the story, but the part with Ginny telling Hermione what happend confused me.
Overall, I thought it was a perfect story. I give it a 100/10!
(And before you post this in the Hufflepuff Library, I was wondering if you'd like to help me set all of the stories up.)
Author's Response: Hi Michelle! To answer your question . . . what? Draco was put into Azkaban, not Ron! *giggles* Draco was a Death Eater, and eventually got caught. This is kind of like a series for a challenge for SPEW on the forums, and I have five other ones up detailing a small portion of Hermione and Ron's lives in their seventh years. This one was supposed to be last because it's WAY later, but I decided it could go ahead and get up. Also, Ron and Hermione did go out in seventh year, but Ron . . . well, read Livid, and you'll know what I'm talking about. /rambles. I'm so glad that you liked it, Michelle! PM me and we can get this added to the Library and figure some things out. :) ~Lindsey :)
wow...i would have neverknown it was hermione..but thatz ok cuz this story is amzing...it waz soo sadd but good...sorry im not very good when i write a review cuz i never tell people what theyre good at..but i rarely write a review so whenever i write one the whole story is just fab..keep up the amzing work hun
Author's Response: Aw, thanks so much! That really makes me feel special that you liked it so much! *huggles first reviewer* ~Lindsey :)