Also, 'frère ou non' rather than 'ne'
If you're interested, there are a couple of French corrections I could make. Otherwise, please feel free to ignore them and get on with the story, which is perfectly comprehensible as it is. Ordinarily you's just say 'Bonjour' rather than 'bien le bonjour', 'ma soeur' rather than 'soeur' (although that one's really picky), you'd generally say 'je m'appelle' rather than 'je suis' for a name ('I am called' rather than 'I am'), and 'suivre' is the infinitive form of 'to follow', the correct form for the sentence would be 'suivez'. Also, 'vingt-et-un' rather than 'vingt-un' generally, numbers ending in 1 are exceptions to the general rule. Still, I'm not actually French, I just studied it all through school, and you're already doing a lot better than Babelfish!
Author's Response: Gem, if you'll look back at the chapter, I have credited your kind help! Thank you, hon! ^_^ I used some, left some. But you are appreciated!
so r they officaly together? If not make it soon
Intersting, but I had trouble figuring out where Draco went suring lunch.
pls dont keep us hanging....i love ur story...pls hurry and update!!!
awwww thats is just tooo sweet. tori is adorable. :D
Author's Response: yeah, isn't she? ^_^
Oh my god,
That was such an awesome update,I love the HG/DM action.I'm such a sick person,But The way they fit together just,...amuses me.
You are a gifted goddess Lucilla_Pauie!
I bow down to you!
Ginny
Author's Response: Thank you, Angelique! *blushes* Oh, no bow called for, sweetie! ^_^ You're not sick at all! HG/DM has its attractions, that's why I write it!
Author's Response: Eep, is it me, or did you change your name in your bio? Ehehe.
This was a great chapter! I especially loved how Hermione was around Tori. That will be important when Draco does take Lucie home...if he gets the chance.
The romance in this chapter was very nice! Great kiss in front of the convent!!!
My favorite line in this chapter was,.."It was just the two them, clinging to each other,sharing each other's breaths, heartbeats and souls." **sigh**
Author's Response: Wow, thanks! You also made me sigh with your review, hon! I love it when readers cite lines they loved. Writers are needy that way, you know! ^_^ *hugs*
Author's Response: I loved writing Hermione with Tori! Of course Draco will have a chance! *wink* That's not a spoiler, but a teaser...
Loved it -- worth the wait. I especially liked Hermione's interaction with Tori.
Author's Response: You guys waited more than necessary--there's been a backlog in the queue! Phew! I waited right along with you! Thanks, Jen! ^_^
I think it is terribly awful for you to make us wait for what looks like am amazing spin off. and the way you explaine draco's coming to england makes a lot more sence w the news paper because cunfundus charms only last so long. hurry up and memorize DH cuz i don't know how ong i can wait to meet the sister
Author's Response: Hermione used the Confundus on her parents to make them forget about her and believe they were other people. They CAN last long. I'm so sorry for making you wait, dear, just hang in there, the cliffhanger is not intentional, I have this Challenge entry I had to finish first and I also have a real life, too, hehe. ^_^ The next chapter is coming! Sorry again, and thanks for the review!
I love TLLA and im fairly sad that I've been waiting awhile to get a forth chapter out of such a good story.When are you planning to continue? If that sounds like criticism It's not.I adore the way you write.And yes the DH made me cry so so hard and in TLLA when chrookshanks (thats not how you spell it is it?)died i was crying.I've grown really attached to that smart,pesky,ginger cat.***sniff sniff***
Anyway please try and find the time in your ever-so-busy schedule to E-mail me,
Jenna
Author's Response: Hi Jenna, the fourth chapter will come along soon! So sorry for the wait, dear, and thank you for reading AND waiting AND telling me so. It heartened me! Thank you! ^_^ I'll email you.
I love TLLA and im fairly sad that I've been waiting awhile to get a forth chapter out of such a good story.When are you planning to continue? If that sounds like criticism It's not.I adore the way you write.And yes the DH made me cry so so hard and in TLLA when chrookshanks (thats not how you spell it is it?)died i was crying.I've grown really attached to that smart,pesky,ginger cat.***sniff sniff***
Anyway please try and find the time in your ever-so-busy schedule to E-mail me,
Jenna
awwww.how sweet.ahhh i can't wait for the next one. :]
Author's Response: hey, salamat! Thank you! I'm heartened to know a fellow Pinoy is reading my story! *hugs*
Awww! I love this story. Draco is actually a decent human being. I hope they find his sister.
Author's Response: They will, Laura! And thanks for reading and dropping a line!
Fantastic new chapter; I loved the small tender Dramione scenes! It was very cute, and yet IC. Great work! *waits hopefully for next chapter*
Author's Response: I just might update with all these nice promptings! Thanks, Sarakime! And coming from you, that really heartened me, that I have Draco and Hermione IC. ^_^ Thank you!
Aww--I love it when Draco lets his mushy, sweet side out of the box.
And Hermione, the one girl who seems to fear nothing, is afraid of flying? How perfect. :D
Author's Response: That's her endearing trait, isn't it, Mel? I just couldn't resist using it here. I hope I don't make Draco too mushy, but I'm glad I seem to have gotten the right level...Thanks, dear!
I read TLLA and I've really enjoyed this too! So update ASAP I'm dying to know what happens
Author's Response: Thank you, Krysal! ^_^
Looking forward to your next post -- I'm sure all of us will be tired of crying our eyes out by then!
Author's Response: oh won't we just, jen! Thanks for reading!
Loved it! Can't wait for the rest! Great way to start the sequel.
Author's Response: thank you, jill. ^_^
This is good. Very good actually. I anxiously await for the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you, Krystal.
