Reviews For On the Last Day
Reviewer: Maximum Potter
Date: 05/24/08 23:59
Chapter: Chapter 1

Loved it. It's really intense and seems to fit perfectly with the real final battle. I really hope that you keep writing!
Brava!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Reviewer: Ravensgryff
Date: 09/01/07 4:52
Chapter: Chapter 1

I'm very glad I read this! Your use of language is lovely and you've got a great sense of imagery. My favorite line is, "War lengthens the marble white rows." Just beautiful and gave me the slightest stab of sadness for Dumbledore (nice allusion, by the way). My only qualm is that I wish there were more - the poem feels like it could be epic. Well done!

Author's Response: Wow, I'm glad you liked it! And to be compared to an epic, is unbelieveable. Thanks Andrea!

Reviewer: KenTuck
Date: 07/12/07 18:11
Chapter: Chapter 1

I adored this poem. Although I do not know much about poetry it was deep and dark and beautiful. I cannot wait to start on the banner and I am honored you asked me to make the banner for this great poem. Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Wow thanks! And thank you for the banner as well! It's amazing!

Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 06/30/07 19:20
Chapter: Chapter 1

Nice job! I really like the refrain and how you tied everything to it. Your word choices really lent the poem a tense feeling as well. Good luck in the challenge!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thanks so much, I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Reviewer: hpluver365
Date: 06/23/07 15:39
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wow! Sophie that was amazing! I wrote a rondeau myself, so I know how difficult it is, and you did an excellent job with it! I liked the turn at the end...the light shining it the darkness.

Overall, really great job. There's not much to comment on seeing as its fifteen lines, but great rhyming and making the whole thing work.

*hugs*
CJ

Author's Response: Thanks I'm glad you liked it! I wasn't sure how clear the turn was, I'm glad that it was apparent to you.

Reviewer: laurskii
Date: 06/21/07 20:16
Chapter: Chapter 1

Meryal,

This is great. I came to this category to check out the competition, and yours definitely seems a strong contender-- I'll admit I had to look up the word insensate :)

"Through butchery, a hero gleams,
promising wizards, he redeems.
Filling prophecies he never chose,"

This was my favorite part. I thought it a brilliantly concise way to describe the situation. You're really quite fantastic.

Good Luck!
(: Laurena

Author's Response: Hey thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'll have to check out your story too.

Reviewer: Euphrates
Date: 06/18/07 9:39
Chapter: Chapter 1

This is your first shot at a Rondeau? Then what will your next be like? How can you top this? It was very well done. This is basically going to be a review of praise, as I have found nothing to critique. ;-) I love this. A lot. It's just very well written and makes sense and flows...your word choice is just amazing. I really love the turn at the end, too. Great job, and good luck in the challenge!

~Kate

Author's Response: Wow. Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it so much! :)

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