Oh. Em. Gee.

(Lindsey!)

I really liked this story! I think that you captured Pasny and Draco very well. I think that Pansy would have wanted to go with her [boyfriend?] and to be with him, while Draco would have wanted to protect her. But wouldn't Draco want to fight the urge to be possessed by Voldemort if he knew that Pansy could die in the process, or at least be like Snape and want to ask Voldemort to spare her? Or ... maybe I'm getting a soft spot for Draco/Pansy. *shiver*

“Draco . . . Draco, fight it! Please, fight them! For me!”

For a reason that I can't explain, I feel like this line has tons of passion in it. I can't really explain (I'm weird like that) but I think this is one of the best lines in this story, because we see a soft side of Pansy.

Hmm ... what else to say. I think Draco and Pansy are mostly OC, execpt for this little part between them makes them SLIGHTLY OC:

“Pansy, please don’t.” He choked on a sob despite his love for her. He had to interrupt her. It would just make this that much harder.

She reached up that same soft hand and put it to his face, leaning in closer and closer until their lips met.

After a brief kiss, Draco pushed her away and a silent tear rolled down his cheek.

I know we saw Draco cry and all that in HBP, but ... that part is slightly OOC to me.

Other then that, I thought your story was terrific!

~Michelle :)




Author's Response: Thanks so much for this great review, Michelle! ~Lindsey :)