Reviewer: Nagini Riddle
Date: 06/22/12 14:54
Chapter: A Shell

War is horrible. But I still loved Snape! You captured the emotions very well! Great job!

Reviewer: KneazleWeazl
Date: 08/22/07 11:05
Chapter: A Shell

Aw, that was sad, but nice. I liked it good job.

Reviewer: lily_evans_13
Date: 07/06/07 7:08
Chapter: A Shell

thats good

Reviewer: Plebia
Date: 06/17/07 19:31
Chapter: A Shell

I really like all your stories, and this one is very poignant. I really want to know if they reconcile, and if so, how. Do you think you could write something? Pleeeease?

Reviewer: Rowena_Lewis
Date: 05/06/07 16:58
Chapter: A Shell

Another great one shot.

Reviewer: Ron x Hermione
Date: 02/13/07 17:47
Chapter: A Shell

Ooh, that was really deep. That was a really great fic. I think that you had Snape's character down greatly. It'd be great if this were a chaptered fic...

~Lindsey :)

Reviewer: Emmiebyrd
Date: 02/17/06 17:41
Chapter: A Shell

Enjoyed it. I've been a H/G fan but have recently gotten into HG/SS. I just have to picture him a bit less greasy and more Alan Rickman-like. I want him to be a good guy, you've given me that.

Reviewer: Insecurity
Date: 02/08/06 11:02
Chapter: A Shell

You have a very distinctive writing style. I have read another one of your one-shots and I have enjoyed both of them because they you don’t conform to the usual style of a Hermione/Snape story. They are certainly credible, and despite being short they contain within them the bare necessities to make the pairing acceptable. However, I do think you’re writing to ‘fully-converted’ Hermione/Snape lovers, all us addicts who already love the two of them, and may not give quite enough detail to convince the sceptics out there.

I liked this story because it condensed a lifetimes worth of events into a simple one-shot, showing us the development and decay of a relationship in approximately 1,000 words, yet at the same time it wasn’t overbearing. The plot you created would work for a long-chaptered story just as well as it has here. Using present tense also made it that bit more intriguing, and the idea of flashing back through Snape’s life to show how he got to the point that he did was effective.

Writing a one-shot from Snape’s POV is challenging and so I applaud you for doing it successfully. You shed a caring light on him, and I did ponder over that being slightly OOC for him, yet I do believe that he has the capability to love. You also reflected his faults as a man by how he left his depressed wife – the Snape that many could condemn – and so by showing the duel nature of him, you made him more realistic, more believable. He was developed enough for us to sympathise with him, even within such a short story.

One thing I did find was that the ending was a little rushed. The idea of the owl returning, and everything Hermione saying in the owl being positive and welcoming appeared just a tad bit rushed. You could have spread it out a bit longer, gone into more detail as to what her returning letter said, Snape’s feelings towards it, and perhaps have a longer gap between his letter and her corresponding one to heighten suspense. I understand your need to tie everything up nicely and perhaps to give a happy ending, but a little more elaboration would have been helpful. Also, don’t be scared of leaving us lingering at the end of one-shots – it can make for an even bigger impact!

Overall, I am very impressed by your style of writing and your gift for storytelling. I will certainly read more of your work!

Reviewer: MagicAlly
Date: 09/01/05 4:58
Chapter: A Shell

The feeling of hope in this story when all seems lost is almost palpable. Great writing.

Reviewer: Flame girl
Date: 05/22/05 11:56
Chapter: A Shell

It was sad, I really don't like angst, but the ending, the hope. A really good read:)

Reviewer: You Know Who
Date: 02/06/05 20:23
Chapter: A Shell

Very enthralling. You have a lot of talent mixed with a style of writing that keeps you totally absorbed in the story. You really can feel the emotion, and sadly that can be hard to find in fanfiction. Keep writing!

Reviewer: Looney13
Date: 01/17/05 21:16
Chapter: A Shell

awwwwww, that was good and sad. very touching...good work...scratch that. excellent work!

Reviewer: Beci
Date: 12/21/04 12:19
Chapter: A Shell

That was v well written; and it didn't gross me out like Snape Hermuione fics sometimes do. No, I actually really liked it. *10*

Reviewer: meandmysharpie
Date: 12/19/04 20:04
Chapter: A Shell

this is a really good read, i was getting all teary eyed.

Reviewer: Ashley Malfoy
Date: 12/19/04 16:29
Chapter: A Shell

Kinda sad, but it does give closure. A good read.

Reviewer: Jedida
Date: 12/18/04 14:41
Chapter: A Shell

I love this story. The way you capture Severus's thoughts and emotions is simply fantastic. Sad, but still fantastic :)

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