Oh dear, what a heart-wrenching backstory for Dumbledore, of all people! Sad as it is, I enjoyed this story very much. It's quite interesting, as it's rather difficult to guess who the man is until the reader comes halfway through the story. At the beginning I though about Remus, then I wondered if it might be Severus, and then came the bit about auburn hair... The way you've slowly revealed the identity of the protagonist and the revelation itself keeps the reader gripped from the first to the last line.
On the other hand, the way you've constructed the story overall already does it, anyway :) The switch between past and present tense works very well, without having to resort to flashbacks, it carries the sotry forward as one whole piece. Having Albus meet Fawkes that way was a lovely touch as well- but it left me wondering, why did he thought of that name immediately? I felt that a short line explaining what Fawkes means and why Dumbledore named the phoenix that could actually work.
Oh, last of all, I just wondered; have you read any other fics where Dumbledore has a wife named Catherine? I had read such a story before, I believe written by Gmariam (although I may be sorely mistaken). It's very well-written and quite inspiring, maybe you'd enjoy reading it.
Anyway, I loved the story, the idea, the characters, the way you've written it... and the feel of having just read a really good story :) I do hope you start writing again soon!
I loved this mainly because of the last line because it fits the phrase with a tear behind the smile soooo much!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing. :)
that was good, but a little confusing sometimes i didnt understand it, but i reread it and i was like -'o duh!' so sometimes how it wasnt past tense, but present was a little confusing. but overall it was marvelous.
Author's Response: Well there are a lot of shifts from present to past, so the tense changes were deliberate. In the present, a grieving man kneels by the gravestones of his family members. In the past, he and his family were happy just being with each other. It is the combination of the both that allows him to walk away from the gravestones at the end.
Your story was heartwrenching, yet beautiful. I love the way you wrote Dumbledore and gave him a softer side that we have never seen before.
I thought your fic made sense as to why we continually saw Dumbledore display an aloof demeanor throughout all of the books, not including book 7.
aw! that was good! I really like the banner too!
LAUR! This story is so touching, and so beautiful. I used it for D/A First Years class, if you'd like to see more comments that I have made on it. It is so beautiful and well written.
I rarely ever read a Dumbledore centered fic, rarely ever see him in such a light. It was so well done, and lovely to read. It made me very sad, yes, but somehow at the end, I felt a gleam of hope (with the pheonix and new beginings).
I love how you characterized DD, with his family. It was so cute, and yet so realistic. I haven't ever seen him done as a younger man, and this was very good. Overall fantastic story.
oh ... that really made me cry. nobody ever considers poor dumbledore!
Author's Response: I'm sorry I made you cry!! Thanks for reviewing though!!
(This will not be SPEW quality, by the way as I am still recovering from the shock.)
Holy Salazar, Laur... that was awesome! I did good - I didn't cry (which is a feat, considering) and I must say that you had be in the dark until the very end.
Dumbledore... Whodathunk?!? Once you revealed who they were, I thought back through the story and let out a general, "Oooohhhhhhh... I get it now."
You are so lucky to have a beta so close at hand, hehe. Anywhoo, great job my dear and I look forward to conspiring with you in the future. *winks*
Author's Response: NIKKI! *tacklehugs* I'm glad you liked it, and I'm glad I didn't make the pregnant woman cry :) & speaking of pregnant women, I am very lucky to have a beta so close, even if she is a pain in the buttocks. <3!
Oh Laur, that was amazing! I truly could not tell you were writing about Dumbledore until the Grindewald line. What an interesting back-story you developed for the man, it seemed like a very plausable history. Wonderful job! :D
Author's Response: Thanks Anna! I'm glad you liked it; I thought it was plausible as well, especially considering DD's pleading lines in the cave when they go after the locket. I always imagined that came from bad dreams he must've had with his daughter, son, and wife being tortured. ANYWAY... Thanks for reviewing!
Really really good. I'm totally proud of myself for guessing too! At glasses and long nose I knew and blue eyes clinched it, especially when I looked back on auburn hair. You have a great talent for throwing in small subtle clues like that. Keep writing!
Author's Response: Thank you for following my work, and for leaving reviews! I'm glad you didn't think it was COMPLETELY obvious-- I kept scrapping different ideas in order to get it nice and subtle (: Did you notice the hint to one of his scars in there as well?
That was so sad, and really good. Your writing is amazing.
Author's Response: Thank you very much!