Reviewer: Cheshlin
Date: 07/05/07 16:58
Chapter: Chapter 1

Chris, you have really brought justice to the Arthurian legend and bringing it into the Piotterverse. It would be fun to see you bring more depth into this world. You write it wonderfully! :)
Cyns

Author's Response: You know my love of the Arthurian legends...it was just too easy to bring it into the Potterverse!

Reviewer: Marauder by Midnight
Date: 06/24/07 17:04
Chapter: Chapter 1

Haha, I was wondering why this story seemed so familiar.

I thoroughly enjoyed the creativity that you incorporated in this story. The resemblance between Merlin and Dumbledore didn't escape me, but it never really occurred to me to include Merlin into a story with Harry Potter words. Odd, I know.

The relationship you developed between Arthur and Merlin is touching and in-depth. Such a relationship between such legends really would prove it possible for Muggles and wizards to live side-by-side, not having to hide anything. It is a shame that those like Nimue and Morgan do exist and make such harmony difficult for others. Do I detect a similarity with something much closer to Harry Potter?

The prophecy is very well-written. And it even rhymes! It truly is a prophecy to rival the powerful prophecy Trelawney had come up with. Arthur was a terrible fool to have ignored it, and the price he paid wasn't unexpected.

I do, however, think that it would've been better for your story if you had shown the battle between Arthur and Mordred instead of just telling it. The greatest battle of the age and we have no idea how it happened. I would've liked to see the confrontation between Arthur and Mordred and when exactly Arthur began suspecting that the prophecy will indeed come true.

Your comment on the Camelot experiment reminded me of a technique I had learned in creative problem solving. One method of seeing the problem is to create a perfect situation, called the Camelot, then compare it to the present situation. Camelot would've indeed been perfect and harmonious had it not been for the greedy deeds of those witches.

I loved the way you ended the story by showing Merlin's uncontrollable grief not only for his son but also for the world. He knew that magic and Muggles could never work safely together though that had been his lifelong goal and dream. This is a story that deserves applause and attention. I hope to see another Historical fiction from you. You have a knack for incorporating legends into your stories.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! This was supposed to be a drabble, which is why I limited the content, maybe I'll write out the entire battle scene between Arthur and Mordred some day and also fill in some of the content between the prophecy...perhaps even tell of some of the good days between Arthur and Merlin. I love the Arthurian legend, which made this even more fun to write!

Reviewer: HarperLee
Date: 06/24/07 8:58
Chapter: Chapter 1

Simply reading it makes myself feel old,
splendid description!


Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Glad you enjoyed my story! 8)

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