Reviewer: Cwiddy
Date: 10/15/07 1:58
Chapter: The Blood-Splattered Bathroom

Well written story! You portrayed Draco, Snape, and Harry well! I would wonder that Harry didn't say something about Draco stealing the potion recipe out of his book...although I also know that Harry wouldn't have wanted to bring attention to himself.

This was very imaginative and adds your plotline well into what happened in HBP!

Author's Response: Thank you very much - yes, I decided that Harry probably wouldn't say anything because that would mean someone had to see his book with all the extra notes, and they would know he really wasn't that brilliant at potions. I'm really glad you enjoyed the story, thanks again!

Reviewer: Cwiddy
Date: 10/15/07 1:56
Chapter: The Blood-Splattered Bathroom

Well written story! You portrayed Draco, Snape, and Harry well! I would wonder that Harry didn't say something about Draco stealing the potion recipe out of his book...although I also know that Harry wouldn't have wanted to bring attention to himself.

This was very imaginative and adds your plotline well into what happened in HBP!

Reviewer: black_ink
Date: 08/06/07 10:45
Chapter: The Blood-Splattered Bathroom

Great story!! It's exactly as I pictured Draco's side of the story to be in Half-Blood Prince!! ~Sara

Author's Response: Excellent, thank you ;o)

Reviewer: LOTRandHPnut
Date: 07/04/07 23:11
Chapter: The Blood-Splattered Bathroom

That was great! I found myself loosing track of time as I read it! I loved the psycological (I think I've spelt that right) battle between Draco's immature side and the responsible part of himself.

Author's Response: Thank you - that's what I was going for. I hoped the story would lay out a grounding for Draco's inability to kill Dumbledore in HBP.

Reviewer: lilly sara black
Date: 06/11/07 13:26
Chapter: The Blood-Splattered Bathroom

This is a great story and so exciting.I can't wait for the next part.

Author's Response: Thanks very much. Unfortuantely this is a one-shot, so I won't be continuing it, but I like your enthusiasm.

Reviewer: ReinNightshade
Date: 06/06/07 11:10
Chapter: The Blood-Splattered Bathroom

Awesome!

Author's Response: Thank you ;o)

Reviewer: Phia Phoenix
Date: 06/06/07 2:17
Chapter: The Blood-Splattered Bathroom

This. Is. So. Good! Are you really 13-15? (I'm assuming that's what the 3rd-5th year thing means???) I love some of your descriptive words, the spirals of smoke in the potions room, and unusual word usage such as slather. Just the kind of thing you don't hear all that often. You've really explored Malfoy's character and there's some great depth to him. You can almost believe that he's the good guy and Potter's the antagonist. Also, very exact linkage to the real story- the only thing is you made his encounter with Myrtle sound like a one-off, whereas she explains later to Harry that he regularly confided in her. But with the understanding of the story that you've conveyed, I'm sure you already knew that.
And even though your portrayal of Malfoy was perfect down to the words used, I don't think Harry was all that true to the books. This bit-
"No." Potter at Malfoy with a stony look. "Besides everything else that I suspect of you, Malfoy, you know school rules. What do you think Slughorn would say if I told him you'd been drinking something you made in class?"
Was quite unlike the dialogue Harry has in the books. It was too measured and I doubt Harry would be quite so civil, so polite or use such intelligent wording. He's a much more simple, angry and outright character in the sixth book. But he wasn't the main character, Malfoy was, and as I said before, he was perfect, so that's a very minor point!
All in all, a rave review! I am wondering how long it took you to write this and I am hoping that it took awhile, otherwise I might have to lower my opinion of my own writing! Well done! If I acn figure out how, I'm gonna add you to my favourite authors list...
Sophia

Author's Response: Thank you so much for such an excellent and critical review!! I am so glad that you liked my portrayal of Malfoy because I was incredibly worried about whether he would seem too pathetic. And thank you very much for criticising my writing of Harry - I find him very difficult to write and so avoid including him in my stories; consequently, I am always grateful for critique, and yours was very helpful indeed. I understand he seemed a little OC, and I suppose it was just that I was so focused on Malfoy that I saw Harry through his eyes - if that makes sense! I also needed the encounter to be brief, so everything was a bit rushed. But thank you very much for pointing it out, I'll watch out for that next time. The 3rd-5th year rating is more for who the story is aimed at, I am actually a bit older than that. And it did take me a while to write - about two weeks, in fact, so don't feel too bad about your own writing! Once again, thank you so much ;o)

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