Reviewer: aliauthor
Date: 07/16/07 18:56
Chapter: Chapter 1: Letters and Customers

Very good! There are a few typos (in Marmara's description, it says 'she wasn't unpopular with the boys either' shouldn't it be girls?) and needs a little sentence structure work, but great storyline so far.

can't wait for the rest, hope you get it in before the queue closes for the 7th book!

Author's Response: Thank you!! I need to re-edit it, and I'm on vacation right now and don't have the time. It will be up soon!

Reviewer: Pissenoffanis
Date: 07/14/07 22:34
Chapter: Chapter 1: Letters and Customers

Haha oh god Crabbe and Goyle actually fell for the gullible thing? Oh deary me :)))

Author's Response: Yup...what are we gonna do with those two?? :)

Reviewer: JustLikeHermione77
Date: 07/12/07 18:46
Chapter: Chapter 1: Letters and Customers


Author's Response: Keep your pants on, I'm working on it!! :)

Reviewer: hmsoctopus
Date: 07/11/07 23:32
Chapter: Chapter 1: Letters and Customers

That was good, but bit too much emphasis on how they were all 15, and that they had crushes on Cedric and george. Good fic, though! :)

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: abigail95
Date: 07/07/07 20:30
Chapter: Chapter 1: Letters and Customers

Awesome story! It was really good.

Author's Response: Why thank you!

Reviewer: lily_potter13
Date: 07/05/07 10:07
Chapter: Chapter 1: Letters and Customers

this is your first well welcome to writing fan fic i like this story so far so if u keep writing i can like it more no i havent done any writing of my own but its nice to welcome someone to thier first fan fic

Author's Response: Thank you!!!

Reviewer: Roy0Bean
Date: 06/27/07 4:37
Chapter: Chapter 1: Letters and Customers

I like it is there going to be more?

Reviewer: Roy0Bean
Date: 06/27/07 4:37
Chapter: Chapter 1: Letters and Customers

I like it is there going to be more?

Author's Response: Most definitely. I'm working on it, don't you fret!

Reviewer: potter_freak579
Date: 06/14/07 14:11
Chapter: Chapter 1: Letters and Customers

Its good but I think you should write more too it :]

Author's Response: There's more...I just have to edit it.

Reviewer: Marmara
Date: 06/13/07 17:07
Chapter: Chapter 1: Letters and Customers

I LOVE IT!! Hurry and edit the second chapter!! I LOVE THE MARMARA CHARACTER!! W0000000!!!


Author's Response: You are such a dork. OK, ok, I will, but I have SUPER computer restrictions now, so I can't spend a whole lot of time online. I'll do my best, though!

Reviewer: DrunkenBarWench
Date: 06/10/07 22:23
Chapter: Chapter 1: Letters and Customers

Actually, I really like most of the characters. I think it'll be interesting to see more of them in later chapters.

And for a first fic this is awesome!

Get to work on the rest of those chapters, yo!

Author's Response: Thank you so much!!!! I'm up to chapter 14--I've just spent the past 2 days rereading them, and I need to seriously edit them, but I'll get them up ASAP!!

Reviewer: finiiii
Date: 06/10/07 21:40
Chapter: Chapter 1: Letters and Customers

yeah, pretty good! But the girls seem like Mary-Sues to me, no offense. Hopefully this'll start getting funnier soon!! Good job!

Author's Response: They DO get better, I promise! Thank you!

Reviewer: pandora123
Date: 06/10/07 16:43
Chapter: Chapter 1: Letters and Customers

this was good! can't wait for more!
Best of Luck

Author's Response: Thank you so much!! I've got 14 chapters written, they just have to be edited!

Reviewer: CowGirlHPFan
Date: 06/10/07 15:27
Chapter: Chapter 1: Letters and Customers

Great!!! When Will it be funny? Good start!! *~*CowGirlHPFan*~*

Author's Response: Thank you! Well, it gets funnier as it goes along, but becomes REALLY funny around Chapter 7-ish. There's funny moments in between, though. I'm working on updating as fast as I can, so hopefully it won't be too long!

Reviewer: JustLikeHermione77
Date: 06/09/07 17:18
Chapter: Chapter 1: Letters and Customers

good start!! please update soon!!! but one question: why would ANYONE have a crush on NEVILLE LONGBOTTOM?!?! just wondering!!

Author's Response: THAT'S A GOOD QUESTION!! All of these people are based off of my friends, so it was HER decision, not mine :)

Author's Response: Oh, and thank you!

Reviewer: dumbledorefluertwins
Date: 06/09/07 14:16
Chapter: Chapter 1: Letters and Customers

I don't want to be mean, but I find all of the girls very Mary-Sue-ish. Especially scince the main character is called Serena **gags**.

I must say, though, for your first fic it's very good. Just... take the characters to the character clinic on the forums.


Author's Response: Thank you for your opinions. They get more developed as the story goes on (it is only the first chapter)

Author's Response: Also, I just think you ought to know, but Serena is named after me. Just FYI.

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