Ooh... This is absolutely fantastic. Your Bellatrix is marvelous, and it's really neat to see it all from Rodolphus' perspective. I also liked the way the cherry blossoms tied in.
That was really great. I loved how you moved Bellatrix into Ravenclaw, and yet showed how the House, in the end, didn't really matter: in essence she was still quite the same. I also enjoyed her interaction with Rodolphus; this is a really interesting idea of how they meet. Excellent job! :)
Your characters, Rodolphus and Bellatrix were extremely well written.
You gave us the opportunity to view another side of Rodolphus; his insecurities Plainly, he would willingly do anything for Bellatrix.
You captured Bellatrix's essence quite well.
Great job!
Lacey
Hey Laura! (I'm back) and I just has to check this out.
Great choice of subject. Usually people depict Rodolfus as a brainless goon that who follows Bellatrix's lead. You manage to made us readers see him as human - well fleshed out instead the usual two dimensional and shallow view.
In does make sense that Bella would feel more insecure and bitter than she would have had because here because she was different from a typical Black. I guess regardless of her house, her devotion to Voldemort would remain the same. Although I'm puzzled as to what made her a Ravenclaw in the first place? She showed great cunning and ambition here ....
Best of luck for the contest
~Miel
Hi Laura!
Nice job! I liked seeing this first meeting between Rodolphus and Bellatrix. You did a great job of bringing out both of their characters. Good idea to put Bellatrix into Ravenclaw; she seemed both bitter and pleased about it, which was very believable. I especially liked reading Rodolphus's thoughts and seeing him gain some confidence by the end of his encounter with Bellatrix. It is interesting to think he was seduced more by her than by the Dark Lord. So what happens next? How do they end up together??
Good luck in the challenge!
~Gina :)
