Reviews For Changing the Stars
Reviewer: MithrilQuill
Date: 06/09/07 16:10
Chapter: One-shot

Finally, I can review this fic. first of all, I loved your characterizations and the way you wrote the Centaurs, that was really well-done.


The theme of changing the stars was also great, and you managed to bring Firenze into the Department of Mysteries in a believable and interesting story! I never would have imagined it would be possible to go through with that character, but you've proved me wrong!

The ending was sad, with Firenze dying and the others knowing that they've sent him on a Death Mission, that really makes you think about whether anything is worth it. I guess it was to the Centaurs. Poor Firenze.


The line: No, a few hours ago Venus grew dim and now she flickers with faint light. She flickers with faint hope of victory....was really cool, I liked that and I almost wished you would have just ended it there, it felt like a good ending.


Thanks for an awesome read! :D

Author's Response: Thanks. I picked Firenze because I wanted a challenge and I admitt when got a couple of the prompts my first thoughts were there was no way I could Firenze through this. I have a thing with with making my stories dark, and I felt felt having Firenze die worked better for the story than some of my hairbrained scenes to get him out of of the DoM. I see your point on that one line, and I added the last line to make the plot clear to the reader, maybe it wasn't needed. I had blast writing this so thanks to you for putting together this wonderful competion.

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