RON DEAD?! Totally unexpected! :O
Ahh SO SAD! Brought tears to my eyes :(
Brilliant work! Keep it up!
Brilliant work! Keep it up!
Oh my goodness.... That was completely unexpected. Even after you said Ron died, I thought maybe the Order somehow... I didn't realise it was his spirit watching her. Holy crap. lol Very, very good.
Author's Response: Thank you my dear! That was just the response I was after. One of things I was annoyed with was being forced to admit in the title that someone was going to die thanks to the character death warnings. But thanks to reviews like yours, I now know I needn’t be worried.
Very well written and I must say the ending had me surprised. Ron's death could only be extremely sad and you wrote about it with grace!
ahh! poor ron *cries*
this was very well written, i loved it! wonderful job =]
Morbid maybe, but it was floating in my mind at the time. I kept reading a lot of fan fiction that had Hermione bitting the bullet and Ron living on, so it was interesting to write something from the flip side.
Author's Response: OK: Apologies for the blatant self appreciation review. Lets just say I tried to respond to another review, and I failed. Ended up posting the comments I meant to say in the review I posted above. And then the delete failed. So I intend on using this as a place to explain something, and I am surprised that this question hasn't come up. The question being: If Ron is a ghost, then why cannot Hermione see him, like all the other ghosts in the HP universe? Well, here is the answer I gave to my beta, via email. Ron isn't technically a ghost per se: rather he is his soul left behind in a sort of limbo before moving on to the next plane of existence. I get the feeling that in the books, a ghost is a rather undesirable state and no wizard would wish it upon themselves. Hence Nearly Headless Nick's comments to Harry about Sirius: he won't come back, despite Harry being the closest thing Sirius would have to a son, a likewise Harry to a father. In a similar vein, this is Ron moving on, and being allowed to say farewell to Hermione, something he was unable to do when alive. So Ron is not a ghost, and therefore invisible to Hermione. At the same time, this is the point where Hermione overcomes the first so called stage of grief: denial. Now, many of the problems arise from the fact that the majority of the story is from Ron's perspective. To him, Hermione is staring at him. In fact, she is staring at the empty space on the bed, where she expects him to be: hence the gaze of half love, half confusion. When her hand rests on Ron’s shoulder, it is rather the pillow on Ron's side of the bed. On the point about Hermione smiling: It is sort of a wistful, sorrowful smile: hence the eyes. I'm taking my inspiration from the last episode of a British TV series, called Cold feet. In this episode, one of the main characters has lost his wife to a car crash. Throughout the episode, he has conversations with his wife as if she was still there. In other words, he is in denial. He is in a rather overtly jovial mood during her funeral, and worries his friends with his behaviour. It is only when their son manages to make his first steps, and his wife's ghost makes a comment "I really wish I could have been there to see that" does he finally overcome his denial, and break down. I'm trying to describe that point in Hermione's grief in the present, as Ron's presence finally disappears from her life, and she realises now that Ron is actually gone.
Oh!! The endings was a bit unexpected, I wondered why she was ignoring him! It was amazing though, but it almost made me cry : ( I don't know why! Maybe it was because Ron was dead, and him and hermione will never get their perfect wedding day : ( But it was great!! And I'm ranbling so I'm gonna go now! Loved it!
Its so so very sad! i almost cried. it's really good. you should write more.
Author's Response: You think? Well, I thank you for your kind words and encouragement, but I have no idea what to write about. I am very tempted with another story in a similar vein but with a Harry/Ginny focus.
It was very good, so painfully sad. I'm an all or nothing R/Hr shipper. I hope you continue to write!
Well done, well done indeed. How sad that they were not able to enjoy each others company for longer. It brought a tear to my eye - sniff, sniff.
tell me why did they go to Paris? that was the perfect place for the proposal. good job!!
Author's Response: Why not? If you could teleport anywhere in the world for a romantic proposal, where would you choose? Seriously though, it was because the restaurant was there. Why was the restaurant there? Valentine's of course!
That was lovely - great writing. I felt the result dawn upon me as I finished your story (which I hope won't be your last!) I can't imagine anyone giving you feedback that's not entirely positive - but some are young and don't know that "there are worse things than death!" -which I think Dumbledore rightly said!
oh my gosh. that was amazing. and i didn't see it coming. so so so so sooo powerful and elegant and well-constructed.
But it turned out so lovely! (In repsonse to your 'writer's hubris') You are very talented. Keep going!
Great! R/Hr is one of my favourite ships and you certainly captured all their emotions well. I loved the just the little things which added to the story so much. But I did think Ron was a bit well-spoken (I'm not saying he's a moron, but he needs more slang and abbrieviations).
But all in all, BRILLIANT!!!!
Author's Response: I do agree, but so rarely does he speak in the fiction. Most of it is internal, and slag looses its effect when you don't actually say it. When he does open his mouth (be it a memory or otherwise), it is usually at an emotional moment, so relaxed slang wouldn't come into play. That was the choice I made anyway: and besides, slang has a habit of being misinterpreted. By keeping to plain english, my meaning is clear.
How sad! I loved your story
Amazing. I didn't see it coming. But rereading it showed what was really happening.
*sniff* nooooooooooooooo.............. RON CAN'T DIEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *sniff* great story though. you should definitely write more!
i dont get the end but everything else was amazing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!it was so good!