Reviewer: Great Beirniny
Date: 07/08/07 7:56
Chapter: Part One- The Sorcerer's Stone

It was different, but very good. I liked it.

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: Euphrates
Date: 06/04/07 14:46
Chapter: Part One- The Sorcerer's Stone

These are very good, Alanna. Short and to the point, and simple, but they're very well written and follow the story amazingly well - this must have taken a lot of work to write!

Nitpicks:

Quidditch
It is wonderful
Wind in your hair, catch the Snitch
Game over, we won


I think 'we won' should be 'you won', as in the line before it you said the wind in 'your' hair, meaning Harry, and the rest of these haikus are about him, and you haven't indicated anywhere that you (the person speaking/writing in this poem) is on the Gryffindor Quidditch team.

Nicolas Flamel
He’s an old person
He made a Sorcerer’s Stone
‘Twas sent to Hogwarts


I think the last line should be changed. I don't really like the word ''twas' in a poem. Maybe you could try sent it to Hogwarts instead?

But nitpicks aside, these are all really good. I've been looking forward to them since I saw the title thread on the forums. ;-)

Kate

Author's Response: Thanksies for the wonderful review! I think I'l try to change those today, but I can't right now due to lack of time. The end of school is murderous, and I have exams. Oh dear. Well, I have to scram, so toodles from Alanna!

Reviewer: _Ivy_
Date: 06/04/07 6:29
Chapter: Part One- The Sorcerer's Stone

Finally, something for those who have short attention spans! *grins* Love the haikus., especially The Vanishing Glass, The Sorting Hat, and Through The Trapdoor. *loves* You should definitely write more. These were so fun to read!

-Laila

Author's Response: Oh, I have a feeling that I like you. :) I do plan to write more, hopefully within the next two weeks, so watch for it! Toodles, Alanna

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