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Name: Binka Fudge (Signed) · Date: 12/10/07 16:45 · For: A Thirst To Prove Her Worth
I feel like I've read this fic about five times before. I'm wondering what the point is? I'm getting a little bored of people walking into the same rooms, having the same experiences so next time I come across such a fic I'll leave it.

Author's Response: Well, now I'm wondering too what the point is to leave such a review in such circumstances. If you don't enjoy Gauntlet fics, then why are you reading them? And the most important question here is, why didn't you just leave it like you said instead of waisting your time by leaving a review? Really, sometimes, we should ask ourselves more of these important questions; that would save a lot of time to a lot of people, including mine.

Name: FeatherTrader (Signed) · Date: 06/26/07 14:00 · For: A Thirst To Prove Her Worth
Usually, I try to stay away from Gauntlet entries, simply because their length frightens me(I have attention problems). Although, if your entry is anything to compare the others to, I think I might have to give them a shot. This entry was no only captivating, but you also managed to make the 'drabbles' fit together wonderfully.

ďCome on Ginny, Iíll show you a way out.Ē

There should be a comma before Ginny. A few lines later, you also did this to Harry. Although, then you did it correctly on another line little later. So, I'm guessing you just got caught up in what you were typing?

She wasnít feeling too patient tonight and the thought of losing time in this carrousel wasnít pleasing at all.

I really adore this line. I'm not sure how else to put it. It adds anxiety to the readers mind, since we don't know exactly why she was in the Department of Mysteries, but nonetheless she's there and she's stuck. I really like the use of the word carousel, although it only has one 'r'. It makes me laugh, for some odd reason.

That same curtain had killed Sirius many years ago and she didnít want to end up like him.

You're missing a comma between ago and and.

But she knew for sure that the whole situation was totally ridiculous, especially with her hair dangling down like that.

Your characterization of Ginny was wonderful. Even while she was facing the more difficult tasks in the Department of Mysteries, you kept her in character, which I'm sure was no easy task. She really seems rather concerned with her hair though, doesn't she? Periodically through-out the fanfic, she's messing with it, combing it, and commenting about it.

Even if it was an evil creature, she didnít want to hurt it with some jinxes.

She wasnít feeling sorry at all for it. After all, it had attacked her. It had got what it deserved.

These are two quotes spaced a bit while she was facing the lion with misty eyes in one of the rooms. They seem a bit contradictory to me or at least in some need of further explaining. Basically, from what I'm understanding is that Ginny didn't want to jinx it, but she didn't feel bad about it being nearly killed by her Patronus.

The only other thing that I was curious about is the ending. So, was the whole mission in the Department of Mysteries a test? Or when she got to the room with the mirror just half-way through? Overall, though, I thought this was a well written one-shot. Wonderful job!

Name: Cheshlin (Signed) · Date: 06/04/07 22:44 · For: A Thirst To Prove Her Worth
Ah! That ending was perfect. I'm glad that Ginny had the will to continue with what she was doing and go against even Harry. I don't see her as the type to listen to others when she knows what they are saying is wrong! I think you did a great job with the prompts! Good luck with the challenge! :) Cyns GO SLYTHS!

Author's Response: Oh Cyns, thank you for your review! I'm happy that you liked the ending. I don't think either that Ginny would just sit there and listen to others when she already knows what she has to do. She's too independent for that! And to confront Harry isn't a problem. She told him in HBP that she didn't care that her life was in danger if she was staying with him. So I had to make her continue her mission no matter what he thought! ;)

Name: Sly Severus (Signed) · Date: 06/03/07 18:52 · For: A Thirst To Prove Her Worth
Sorry, it took me so long to read this, Viv. However, now that I have finally managed to get that done, I can say that it was really good. You always manage to write Ginny in a way that doesnít make me want to pull my hair out. As I have said before, that is a huge accomplishment. ;)

And as always, itís fun to see how people handle all the prompts. I liked your Dementor prompt. I didnít even realize it was suppose to be a Dementor when I wrote mine. Sometimes I can be so dense. However, you handled that well. I liked how it took Ginny so long to think of a happy memory because the Dementor was sucking them from her.

My favorite prompt was your last one. I loved how you made the mirror similar to the one in Harryís first year. Having Ginny see her entire family, including her future children must have been a shock for her. It must have been really hard for her to walk away from that, but she had the strength to do it, which, of course, was the point. I loved the way you handled that scene.

She wasnít feeling too patient tonight and the thought of loosing time in this carrousel wasnít pleasing at all.

I found this line particularly amusing. My question is: just when is Ginny patient? Anyway, good line.

However, I do have one little nitpick about it. It should be losing instead loosing.

Ginny closed her eyes for a few moments, trying to get rid of the sudden panic she was experiencing. She shivered; the air in the room was far colder than it had been in the corridor. It was like she couldnít control herself anymore. Even breathing was getting harder; her chest was moving up and down rapidly. She had no idea what to do next. Her mind was completely blank.

I love this paragraph. It is absolutely perfect. It leaves the reader with a wonderful eerie feeling, almost as though they are having the experience themselves. That is the mark of a wonderful writer.

ďItís a reflection of what is in your heart. Itís love, Ginny. Now, you must go.Ē

Another wonderful line. It just sounded right. I loved it.

And the ending of this was lovely. I loved how Ginny walked away from the illusion of her family to search for the real thing. She really did show a lot of strength in this story. For once, I was very impressed with her character.

I do have a few nitpicks for you, though:

With a deep breath to steady her nerves, she reached for the handle and entered in the famous Department of Mysteries.

You donít need the word in.

And then, she remembered. There was something.

This really should be one sentence. And then she remembered that there was something.

Ginny hold her breath

This should be: Ginny held her breath.

Anyway, just a few minor things that I noticed. Overall, this story was really done. Good luck in the Gauntlet.

Author's Response: Now I'm happy! Do you know that you just made my day? This is an incredible review, wow! I'm glad that you liked my story! It is really an accomplishment for me if you found my Ginny bearable. We should write this down somewhere... The last prompt was my favorite, with the veil one too. They actually complete each other and I didn't really plan this at the beginning. It just felt right to make her see her family in the mirror, I knew it was an important value for her because of her mother, so... I must say that I'm blushing right now because you said I was a wonderful writter... :P I'll go fix the little mistakes you pointed out. Thank you for your review, it means a lot to me. :)

Name: Ginny663 (Signed) · Date: 05/28/07 12:01 · For: A Thirst To Prove Her Worth
Kinda confusing.... but still good. so did everyone die??? i didnt really get that part

Author's Response: You found it confusing? Harry and Ginny explained why those people had all appeared in the mirror, because it was a reflection of Ginny's deepest desires and wishes. She wants a happy marriage and kids with Harry, and she also wishes that one day her family will be whole again, with Percy included. So they're not dead, they didn't have to be and I thought it was less morbid that way. I hope everything is clear now. Thanks for your review!

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