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Reviewer: hannahabbot2007
Date: 07/15/07 18:18
Chapter: Chapter 3: Summer After Third Year

Ah I love Sevvy..
~ Hannah Abbot

Reviewer: hannahabbot2007
Date: 07/15/07 17:14
Chapter: Chapter 2: Summer After Second Year

Love it!
~ Hannah Abbot

Reviewer: hannahabbot2007
Date: 07/15/07 16:35
Chapter: Chapter 1: Summer After First Year

Love it!
~ Hannah Abbot

Reviewer: Madeira
Date: 07/15/07 16:26
Chapter: Chapter 6: Summer After Sixth Year, Part 2

I love your point of view...it makes much sense to me
congrats!

Reviewer: AntigoneScorned
Date: 07/12/07 0:22
Chapter: Chapter Five: Summer After Fifth Year

Just started reading your fic, but I'm really enjoying it. Can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: wishingforthehallows
Date: 07/07/07 22:17
Chapter: Chapter Five: Summer After Fifth Year

I've never had such terrible feelings toward Lily Evans in my life!!!

Author's Response: I know! Isn't it terrible? It's been so hard to give Lily a Fatal Flaw, but SubHub keeps reminding me: Lily isn't Subversa! She chose James over Severus! Make her real! Thank you for the lovely note.

Reviewer: midwife_witch
Date: 07/07/07 17:12
Chapter: Chapter Five: Summer After Fifth Year

Hi Subversa! Is the happy future for Severus the fact that his Amortentia scents apply better to Hermione than to Lily? (Who could imagine straight-haired Lily needing Sleekeazy's?) If not, I apologize - too much time on Ashwinder. Anyway, this chapter was painful because it was all so darn avoidable. Why in the world didn't Severus just take her to the darn Halloween Ball? (I know, I know, but _still_...) Then again, I guess it wouldn't have mattered. Your Lily is discovering her power as an attractive woman and wants to play the field. She's not ready to commit to anything. Sigh. Petunia's reaction to the ring is strangely moving - even she, with all of her blinkers, must see the grief that will come from this mess. Brava as always, Subversa - I look forward to the next chapter.

Author's Response: Yes! You got it! Twenty Points to your House! Which one is it, by the way? You're so right - he could have owned up to their relationship and taken being ostracized by the Slytherins. But would even that have made Lily stay with him? In her popularity, is she not seeing that the world has more to offer her than Severus Snape? I am so glad you see Petunia's response to the ring as I have done. It's sadness for Severus, sadness for Lily - tinged with amazement, but Pepper can't imagine rejecting such a gift - and sadness for herself, as well. As always, my dear, a lovely and insightful review!

Reviewer: spedoodle
Date: 07/07/07 14:54
Chapter: Chapter Five: Summer After Fifth Year

great story keep them comming

Author's Response: Thanks, Spedoodle.

Reviewer: FinallyWork
Date: 07/07/07 11:23
Chapter: Chapter Five: Summer After Fifth Year

I love this story; it breaks my heart to read it knowing everything's going to fall apart, but it's so addictive. Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: I'm glad it's addictive - and I know it's heartbreaking. Thank you for reading.

Reviewer: Love_Sirius55
Date: 06/27/07 19:39
Chapter: Chapter 4: Summer After Fourth Year

Very good, you brought out the soft side in Snape, why still letting his more....aggressive side show as well. Brilliant.

Author's Response: I'm so glad you saw both his soft and aggressive sides, my dear. Thank you!

Reviewer: midwife_witch
Date: 06/27/07 6:55
Chapter: Chapter 4: Summer After Fourth Year

Hi Subversa! I don't come over here very often anymore, but when I found out that you posted a new story, I had to check it out. As usual, it's great, if heartbreaking. The gradual deepening of the friendship and love you create between Lily and Severus makes their impending split devastating in advance. I love the imagery you use for Lily's feelings here (fireworks in her heart, indeed) and how you convey her sense of wonder at them. She's pulled along almost against her will by them, but she wants to plunge ahead anyway. Excellent. The Severus-Tobias interaction was crushing as well; it's easy to see how Severus might be turned in the future if he's experienced this level of hurt and betrayal. And you even render Petunia understandable: She cares about her sister enough that as a reader, you can't hate her, yet she's so emotionally stunted and skittish that you can see how she's going to run like hell from all of this and turn her back on everyone when it all blows up in her face, as it inevitably will. Anyway, enough babbling. I enjoy the story very much, look forward to reading the rest of it, and hope to see it (and you) on Ashwinder sometime soon.

Author's Response: This one is posting at Occlumency as well, if you like to read at Sycophant Hex. It is a devastation waiting to happen, isn't it? - but I've been seeing this story in my mind since halfway through His Draught of Delicate Poison, and I can't *not* writie it. I'll be posting again at Ashwinder as soon as the reveal on the Summer SSHG Exchange on Live Journal is through. Thank you!

Reviewer: wishingforthehallows
Date: 06/27/07 0:28
Chapter: Chapter 4: Summer After Fourth Year

Oh, I love Lilly and Snape together! If only JK Rowling had had a desire to write love stories...
That was wonderful!

Author's Response: I love them together, too - but we know it doesn't last. Thank you for your kind words!

Reviewer: Wicked Wench
Date: 06/26/07 8:42
Chapter: Chapter 4: Summer After Fourth Year

What a jerk Tobias is! Poor Sev! I loved the scene at the Kingdom.

Author's Response: Thanks, Wicked Wench. Tobias is a very poor father, and I adored the sweetness at the Kingdom as well.

Reviewer: Faekitty
Date: 06/26/07 7:20
Chapter: Chapter 4: Summer After Fourth Year

I insist you write moooorree!!.. Update baby! This is going to be soo big, what if James or Pepper catches them at it? Or James goes balastic when he catches them and Pepper realizes that he HAD been using her??..
Severe nuttiness, more more please!

Author's Response: More to come - right up until the end. I'm glad you like it, my dear.

Reviewer: Faekitty
Date: 06/26/07 7:17
Chapter: Chapter 4: Summer After Fourth Year

I insist you write moooorree!!.. Update baby! This is going to be soo big, what if James or Pepper catches them at it? Or James goes balastic when he catches them and realizes that he HAD been using her??..
Severe nuttiness, more more please!

Reviewer: neypus
Date: 06/17/07 5:37
Chapter: Chapter 3: Summer After Third Year

GREAT!!! PLEASE WRITE SOME MORE!!!

Author's Response: Thank you, neypus. I am writing Chapter 4, now. I plan to have the story finished and posted before 7/21.

Reviewer: StunnaBaby
Date: 06/12/07 17:58
Chapter: Chapter 2: Summer After Second Year

whens the next chapter???

Author's Response: The next chapter is up now, my dear.

Reviewer: StunnaBaby
Date: 06/09/07 19:38
Chapter: Chapter 1: Summer After First Year

omggg i love it. :]
this is my new fav fic!

Author's Response: Thanks! I hope you continue to enjoy it!

Reviewer: MaraudersAffair
Date: 06/08/07 8:35
Chapter: Chapter 1: Summer After First Year

Hmm, I must say that this is one of the better snevans fics I have read. See -- I'm planning on writing my own fic about Lily/Snape and I have been reading all the stories that center around the pairing.

I very much liked how you wrote Snape -- in such an early teenage awkwardness. :D But I did have trouble following the fic whenever you used Pepper of Salty -- I found myself having to stop and wondering why the narrator would use their nicknames.

And Snape riding a broom to Lily's house! So great -- loved how you described it, too. :]

Author's Response: The narrator uses their nicknames because she cannot bear to have a character called Petunia! I'm glad you enjoyed it ;)

Reviewer: toonmili
Date: 06/04/07 0:16
Chapter: Chapter 1: Summer After First Year

This was really well written

Author's Response: Thank you - I'm pleased you liked it. :)

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