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Name: FireboltFlyer10 (Signed) · Date: 06/23/12 0:12 · For: Professor R.J. Lupin ... Previously Known As Moony
You are, honestly, my favorite author!!! Your stories always make me laugh, then my family stares at me strangely, because, to them, I am just laughing randomly. Heehee. :) My favorite quote from this story is, "Sorry, Mum, I missed." I don't know why that was so funny to me but I couldn't stop laughing. You are a brilliant writer!

Name: Phoenixis (Signed) · Date: 08/02/09 22:20 · For: Professor R.J. Lupin ... Previously Known As Moony
Brilliance yet again...

I liked it a lot. Though I was fuming a bit at the parts were Remus was thinking of Sirius as evil, and thinking of the rat in a good way, I enjoyed it. Very well written.

I have no idea how I went so long before finding your fics. They are one of the best on the site. And you can write from everyone's POV equally well. Be it James, Lily, Remus, even Dumbledore. And Hermione too at the end of Hogwarts Survival Guide. Oh, and I almost forgot, Janey Weasley (even though that's your own character).

And Sirius too. I'm going to read the Black Knight next. It's the first chaptered fic of yours that I'll be reading and I'm positive that it's going to be just as good, if not better. And I found your Sirius in the other fics highly entertaining (the flirting with the house elf in Conundrum), so I'm eager to start with The Black Knight.

There's one more thing I wanted to mention. Since the third book, I've always associated the Marauders with the last carriage, probably because thats where Remus was. I'm not sure, but does JKR mention this somewhere in the books?

Once again, excellent writing. Off to read the Black Knight.

Author's Response: Oh cod, I really hope Black Knight doesn't disappoint you, I really hate it now! It's so old ... But thank you so much for the positive comments, they're fabulous! As for the stuff about the last carriage ... I'm really not sure if JK ever mentioned it specifically. I always just kind of thought there would be something cool about being on the end (like the back seat of a bus, maybe?) and therefore the Marauders would love it. Also, I always had an idea of them liking to claim cetain places as "theirs" which no one else is allowed to use - seats by the fire in the Common Room, trees to sit under in the grounds and the like. And so the last carriage would be very easily indentifiable for everyone else to avoid. =)

Name: captburke (Signed) · Date: 02/14/09 23:59 · For: Professor R.J. Lupin ... Previously Known As Moony
Okay it was really good. I can picure Remus going through all those memories/thoughts and coming out the other side.

Author's Response: Thank you. I'm very pleased you think so. Poor Remus was given such an awful lot in life ...

Name: delirioustk (Signed) · Date: 01/04/09 2:09 · For: Professor R.J. Lupin ... Previously Known As Moony
that made me sad... :p i always did feel sorry for him too, being the only marauder around for such a long time..they were separated so soon after leaving hogwarts too..

Author's Response: I know, poor Remus ... *wipes away tear* Thanks for reviewing though!

Name: Binka Fudge (Signed) · Date: 05/23/08 20:15 · For: Professor R.J. Lupin ... Previously Known As Moony
You've had my emotions up and down like a yoyo just by reading this one shot. I love Remus and was so upset when he was pushed off this mortal coil, but I really think you did him justice here. I loved all the little flashbacks as he retraced his steps. And I think my favourite part was Sirius insisting that they could stay seventeen forever. Oh if that were the case.

Author's Response: I know! I'm holding similar hopes myself, only I'm not seventeen yet. Who needs the big bad world, anyways? I'm glad you think I did him justice, because I really like Remus, so thanks.

Name: Kcharles (Signed) · Date: 03/30/08 15:55 · For: Professor R.J. Lupin ... Previously Known As Moony
That was so sad! But it was wonderful! It sounded like J.K herself!

Author's Response: Wow, thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Name: Siriusly Mr Black (Signed) · Date: 09/06/07 13:34 · For: Professor R.J. Lupin ... Previously Known As Moony
This made me cry, kinda happy but sad tears. Definantly going on my favourites, cos i love stuff that makes me cry- not that i'm the sobby type- but i really need to read something funny now. Great story!

Author's Response: Oh, sorry, I hate making people cry! I have plenty funny fics if you need them, though. I'm really glad you enjoyed it!

Name: Starmaiden (Signed) · Date: 06/17/07 11:44 · For: Professor R.J. Lupin ... Previously Known As Moony
Hello! I don’t often venture into this category, but I wandered in and saw "Professor R. J. Lupin" -- and so I'm here! :P

The opening depressed me a little – I wasn’t expecting Remus to be so sad already – but then I saw this part and laughed:
The thought occurred that he should sleep on the train — that way, any students could have their catching up chat without worrying about a teacher listening in.
It’s got such a small bit of subtle humour, but you’ve established Remus already: whatever the students say, he doesn’t want to embarrass them by hearing.

Wonderful characterisation on the Marauders!
Sirius: When I grow up—” he tossed his hair, and gave his stern looking parents a daring glance, asking them to reprimand him “—I want to be a Muggle, too!”
James: “But, you know, sometimes these things happen, I just can’t help it if there’s a key in the door.”
And Peter: “Oh, Peter, I told you not to make a run for it! Come on, I’ll walk you through this time, it’s really not so bad ...”
I especially love Sirius’s young, defiant attitude. He’s perfect.

Remus smiled a little, and looked the other side
I think you’re missing a word or two in this phrase.

The person pushing the trolley yelled in fright, as they had to rear to the left to avoid a small child.
This bit is worded a bit awkwardly. I think it might work better if you took out the “they”. Also, I’m not sure if “rear” is quite the word you’re looking for – for me, it suggests being sort of pulled upwards, and I think the trolley is actually going sideways – maybe “careen” or something like that would fit better. Like this: The person pushing the trolley yelling fright, careening to the left….

I have a difficult time writing humour, even if it’s part of the character, so I applaud (and greatly enjoy!) lines like these:
“Oh, James!” Remus cried, feigning surprise. “I didn’t hear you, some Neanderthal was busting his lungs bellowing across the platform.”

“Wow!” the boy cried. as his family came into view around him, smiling proudly at his excitement.
You have an extra period in here (between “cried. as”).

I should probably stop quoting – I’m filling the whole page here! – but there are so many great lines in this story!
The smile slowly turned into a grin as he looked towards the end carriages.

He knew which one to take.

Remus, whose reflexes were unusually advanced because he was a werewolf, said “Snap,” before Peter even opened his mouth. The cards exploded, and Peter toppled off his seat. Sirius laughed heartily, and the momentary silence ended.
The bit about advanced werewolf reflexes seems a little clumsy, put in there, but I like the way you invented Exploding Snap. And it’s a scenario I can envision and smile about – it’s so very Marauder.

Dumbledore did make me Prefect for a reason, you know.”

“Yeah, but it was probably by process of elimination.

I’ve thought that before….

“All right. I’ll go off just now, planning to kill Snape, you restrain me with your manly authority, and then you can tell Dumbledore the truth — that you stopped me before I crossed the line between loveably mischievous and downright off the rails. You savvy?”
Nice bit of foreshadowing! And I love the jellybean fight.

“You know, my money was on Remus for Head Boy,” Lily’s friend, Kirsty said.
You’re missing a comma after “Kirsty”, but it might be better if you just put her name on the end instead: “You know, my money was on Remus for Head Boy,” said Lily’s friend, Kirsty.

Peter noticed this, and (being the good friend he was) changed the subject.
I’m always glad to see Peter get some sort of credit. He may not have been as smart or as noticeable, but he had to have something going for him.

“You’re all idiots,” she told them, plainly. And then she smiled.
Aww! She really is a lot like Ginny, with a temper and a quick tongue, and real humanity.

No point living in the past.
Wonderful ending! Remus is often portrayed as having a lot of guilt and memories as his only sustenance (sort of like the beginning), so it’s great to see him be really alive and ready to move on.

Great story. I’m glad I ventured over here! Keep writing!

Author's Response: Wow, a LOT to comment on! Thanks! I love these in depth reviews, I really do ... okay, let's ignore all the valid grammar mistakes, and agree that I'll change them later ... if you aren't a beta alreay, you definitely should be. As for the lovely compliments and things ... thanks so much! I'm really glad you anjoyed it! I liked that you picked up on a lot of the things I had tried to include, like Peter being okay-ish, and Lily not being an insane Marauder-hater ALL of the time, and Remus being very nostalgic and dependant on his memories ... I have lots more fics up if you ever want to come and nit-pick a while! ;-D

Name: i_am_ria_black (Signed) · Date: 06/15/07 7:52 · For: Professor R.J. Lupin ... Previously Known As Moony
.........“Personally,” James began, taking a swig of pumpkin juice. “I hope the year does last forever. The more time I spend with Evans dearest, the happier I will be. A minute, and I’m contented. An hour, I’ll crack a smile. A day, I’m having a nice time. A week, and I’ll give a titter of joy. A month, things are pretty dandy. But a year ... I might as well be in heaven.” The group laughed, save for Lily, who merely rolled her eyes.

“You’re all idiots,” she told them, plainly. And then she smiled.

ha ha ha (sniff)
good no great no awesome!

Author's Response: Lol, thanks, I'm glad you liked this one ... and that there weren't pleas for sequels, lol. Thanks for all your reviews though!!

Name: goddess of light (Signed) · Date: 06/10/07 17:21 · For: Professor R.J. Lupin ... Previously Known As Moony
How epic. Poor, poor Moony. =( You are an awesome one-shot writer. Although, you left out the "e" in "Bye" (said by Peter, second flashback)...lol, sorry, I am just a total perfectionist and it was buggng me. Anywho, ignoring that. Great story, 10/10!

Author's Response: Oooh, thanks so much! I'm a perfectionist too, don't feel bad ... I'm just not a very good perfectionist, lol. I'll go change it once I've replied to this. Glad you enjoyed this, thanks so much!

Author's Response: Fixed, thanks again!

Name: Noel Weasley (Signed) · Date: 06/10/07 9:21 · For: Professor R.J. Lupin ... Previously Known As Moony
i really liked it a whole lot! Poor remmy! oh, how i love him so! lol!

Author's Response: Lol, thanks. Poor Remmy indeed ... I'm glad you liked it.

Name: emLILY EVANS (Signed) · Date: 06/09/07 18:54 · For: Professor R.J. Lupin ... Previously Known As Moony

Author's Response: Thanks very much!

Name: oceanianow (Signed) · Date: 06/08/07 0:33 · For: Professor R.J. Lupin ... Previously Known As Moony
Aww, this was really sweet. I always feel bad for Remus, having lost all of his friends, one way or another. At least he now has Tonks, right?

Author's Response: =D Exactly. Yay for Tonks! I always liked her. Thanks for reviewing, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Name: red haired mom (Signed) · Date: 06/03/07 19:40 · For: Professor R.J. Lupin ... Previously Known As Moony
I happen to love Remus, not quite as much as I love Sirius, but he is a great character.
This was really good. I like how you showed different times in the memories.
Remus, really did go to help protect Harry, and you showed his compassionate, and loving heart very well in this fic.

Author's Response: =) Thanks. I've always liked Remus too, he's a really nice guy. Thanks for all the great reviews you've left, I've enjoyed hearing your thoughts, and I'm so happy you like my writing!

Name: quiggler (Signed) · Date: 06/03/07 18:55 · For: Professor R.J. Lupin ... Previously Known As Moony
Aww! That was awesome!

Author's Response: Thanks very much!

Name: ForbiddenLove (Signed) · Date: 06/02/07 10:57 · For: Professor R.J. Lupin ... Previously Known As Moony
That was terrribly sad. Again, I must complement you on your portrayl of Sirius. Its terribly funny and original. He's definately a character you write well, you should consider writing a Sirius-centric fic. It think that would be a great piece from you, not that all your pieces aren't. They are! You are wonderfully talented. I loved the last line a lot. It was that desired bang at the end, and I do love bangy last lines. I thought it was terribly heartwrenching how he thought Sirius was evil, but of course eveybody did at that time. Wonderful fic, going on my favorites fic, depressing yet funny fic, lovely, lovely fic. I'll come back when i look up more adjectives ;-). Love and hugs~ LaLa P.S. Nice title, it was very very inspired

Author's Response: Thank you, that was a lovely, lovely review! Glad you liked the title, last line and Sirius ... incidentally, a Sirius-central fic you say? So what exactly would you call Sirius: The Black Knight? Lol, I know what you mean, that was pre-L.O.V.E Sirius, which is when I think I found the guy I write now ... Thanks again.

Name: echo123 (Anonymous) · Date: 06/01/07 22:10 · For: Professor R.J. Lupin ... Previously Known As Moony
I just meant that I miss reading your fics. You have others, but I only like some. I mean, I like the other ones I just never got into them,ya know?
All the fic by you that I read are either one shots,over or about to end.
So I really liked this one :D

Author's Response: Oh, okay. Thanks, that's really nice of you. But don't worry, I have a couple of things in the works at the minute, oncve L.O.V.E is over, that doesn't mean I will be! =D Hang in there. ;-)

Name: Chomione (Signed) · Date: 06/01/07 6:23 · For: Professor R.J. Lupin ... Previously Known As Moony
What a nice fic! I love it!

Author's Response: Yaaaaay! Thanks. =D

Name: Idiot of ravenclaw (Signed) · Date: 05/31/07 21:26 · For: Professor R.J. Lupin ... Previously Known As Moony
hahaha that has to be like the best reply I have ever gotten are you going to write another story like this? cus you should and I will write really crappy cus crappy writing is what I do best. that and not spell very well and I like your banners on live journel you should make a banner for this story and put it on mugglenet you should put all your banners on mugglenet

Author's Response: Ah, I would put my banners on MuggleNet, but I really don't know how. I've tried, believe me. Glad you like the LJ! I encourage you wholeheartedly to write crappy. Writing crappy eventually leads to writing not-quite-as-crappy. And from there, who knows what could happen? =D

Name: jenny b (Signed) · Date: 05/31/07 19:33 · For: Professor R.J. Lupin ... Previously Known As Moony
Another great story! You must get sick of all my reviews being like this, but I don't have any criticisms to make about your fics. Sirius was hilarious in this story, and I love how you portrayed Peter as being a good friend and a Marauder, instead of an outsider like some people do. Because he was a marauder before he killed Lily and James, the little rat. *growls*
Anyway, I think this is probably one of the best fics you've written! Keep it up!

Author's Response: Aw, thanks, that's so nice of you! Really! I'm glad you liked it, and Sirius too, who is always a lot of fun. And thanks about the Peter thing, too, I'm glad I finally seem to be able to pull him off. That took a LOT of practise ...

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