Reviews For The Avenger
Reviewer: honeydukes_10
Date: 06/13/07 14:20
Chapter: Avenger

Great OC! I think the events are very real, from the hatred towards those killing the bull, to the amusement he gets when those murderers are murdered.

I would like to thank you for writing such a great story. I think it was a good idea to show how some people feel about this subject, and how some may solve it there own way.

~Andrea

Author's Response: Hmm, this review looks oddly familiar... Deja vu!

Reviewer: honeydukes_10
Date: 06/13/07 14:20
Chapter: Avenger

Great OC! I think the events are very real, from the hatred towards those killing the bull, to the amusement he gets when those murderers are murdered.

I would like to thank you for writing such a great story. I think it was a good idea to show how some people feel about this subject, and how some may solve it there own way.

~Andrea

Author's Response: *grins* Finally, someone likes my twisted OC! I'm pleasantly surprised that you thought it was realistic; I've never been to a bull fight (or been in any circumstances related to this) in my life!

Reviewer: _feather_
Date: 06/12/07 17:35
Chapter: Avenger

Hey Laila! I loved this story; it was very original and well written. I don't have any additional praise to give you-Euphrates was very thorough! But I'll just say what I thought of the fic anyways, even if she already told you....
um...

IT WAS SO AWESOME! YOU'RE ON MY FAVORITES!

Oh and I agree with Euphrates on the whole character description thing. It'd probably sound better if you said "his dark blue eyes scanned the arena". Like you said in your response. Yup. That's it. Now I'm going to review the rest of your lovely poems!

-----GINNY------

Author's Response: *stifles giggles* Hi, Feather. *laughs maniacally* Sorry, couldn't control myself. Thanks so much! Glad you enjoyed and *grumbles* FINALLY got down here to review. *brightens up* Ah well, you still reviewed. Ta!

Reviewer: siriusly_vic
Date: 05/30/07 21:13
Chapter: Avenger

Hey Lils!!!! that was really good though i got a bit confounded in the middle for some reason. Keep on Writing!!!! *wink wink* You're a wonderful writer, poet and awesome soccer player!! Gtg eat Ice-cream ~~~Vic~~~

Author's Response: LOL, thanks for the soccer bit. Have a nice ice cream eating ;D !

Reviewer: Euphrates
Date: 05/30/07 20:23
Chapter: Avenger

You, Laila, are an awesome writer, and for a lot of reasons. You're just...wow. *hug* I can't believe how well you do this.

I love how you weave the Harry Potter world with the Muggle world. But more so, I love how you weave the Harry Potter world with our world. You've taken a ton of aspects from our world (in all your stories, I'm talking about). The witch burnings. The song 'Ring Around the Rosies'. These bull fights. You’ve really connected my world with the Harry Potter world. I don’t know how you do it – it’s amazing.

I’m not as good at critiquing fics as I am poems (or think I am), but I’ll give it a go here. So, my nitpicks/random things I liked:

Pulling down his shocking lemon tie, he adjusted his microphone, ready to speak.

I love that lemon tie, Laila. I don’t know why. I’ll try to explain it. To me, shocking and bright ties seem to signify someone eccentric. In this case, it made me think of someone who wasn’t ‘quite right’ in the head, you know? It added to the aspect of the bullfights being ‘wrong’. (ONLY wrong to the boy – I, like Laila, mean no offense to anyone’s culture. I am just doing this in context of the fic. I’m sorry in advance if it offends anyone.)

…he had cut his hands with his own nails.

…Have you ever done that? I’m just wondering. I’m in no place to make assumptions as to whether or not it is possible to do that, as I have been biting my nails since I was three and therefore it would be impossible for me to do that; I was just wondering if it was possible for anyone to do that.

He looked about eleven, but in actuality was fourteen. His dark locks fell messily around his pale and slender face, with his dark blue eyes glinting.

I’m not one to nitpick the smallest things – there’s nothing wrong with this. I just want to comment. I, personally, do not like it when characters are just described like that, with no breaks, etc. It isn’t bad here, or anything, because it is short and to the point. I just wanted to point out that just blatant descriptions of the character can get tedious and, to the reader, annoying. *shrugs* But that is just me.

Other than that, however, this fic was simply amazing. I really love the viewpoint you took, and on what you decided to write about. I absolutely love your fics. You should definitely write more.

~Kate


Author's Response: *squishes* THANK YOU!!! *wipes tear from eye* You always make me feel so speshul with your luverly reviews. Extremely bright suits make me think that someone is either very tacky or very odd....I'm not too fond of bright colors on clothes (unless they're for swimming). i have also never cut my skin with my nails. I'm assuming it can be done. I'd try it but I value my skin ;D . *brightens up even more when she sees nitpick* Yay, I love concrit! *turns more sirius* Ok, I see what you're saying. So next time I think I'll describe his looks on context with the story (e.g. His dark blue eyes scanned the arena). Thank you for reviewing, Kate! You shall forever rock my socks *bows*.

Reviewer: JustLikeHermione77
Date: 05/30/07 16:05
Chapter: Avenger

is the guy supposed to be harry? i don't get it

Author's Response: No, this is an OC. This is a story about a boy who goes to a bull fight. Angered and offended by the deaths of the bulls, he murders all those who were involved. I understand that you didn't get the story, but, in the future, I would suggest elaborating more on what you specifically didn't understand and commenting on the fic.

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