Reviews For Survival
Reviewer: Lily_rocks
Date: 08/09/07 1:34
Chapter: Survival

This one-shot was interesting. I again enjoyed reading this. It makes visualisation(please excuse my spelling) easy. It took my into a journey. Love reading your stories!

Author's Response: I love reading your reviews! Thanks a bunch!!

Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX
Date: 06/24/07 14:51
Chapter: Survival

This was very interesting. I liked that it was just a dream. In like the eighth paragrapgh you forgot to put Fantastic in italics. It was a thought so it should've been in italics. I loved this. It was wonderfully descriptive.

Author's Response: Ah! *slaps self for missing that* Thanks! And the reason it was a dream was because I had to find *some way* to pull it all together without just killing Draco, lol. Thanks!

Reviewer: crazy_purple_hp_freak
Date: 06/02/07 4:55
Chapter: Survival

Ooh Sarah I like this! Your Draco is always an awesome character to read – I love the way that you’ve portrayed his panic and uncertainly. Awesome.

Draco could’ve sworn that he heard the drumming of his heart repeating, “Don’t, don’t. Don’t, don’t.”
I love this idea – I don’t think we get so see as much of scared!Draco in canon as I’d like, and this is a great start to introduce us to his trepidations etc. :)

That was familiar, not this — the sneering darkness and unending walkway.
I love your use of ‘sneering’ in this part. Again it seems to be giving us an indication that Draco, unlike in most situations, is not in control here – he’s no longer the one who is sneering. Aww.

Two steps; he was on his way to greatness.
Love the sentence. It’s nice to see, given that this story is from Draco’s POV, that he hasn’t lost his sense of character/sarcastic nature completely. Well done – nice characterisation!

I like the idea of Draco’s patronus being a panther – it kind of suits. I also thought that it was a nice addition how Draco tries to pacify it by going ‘nice kitt, nice kitty’. A typical reaction of scaredpeople to big cats, but it works well here. I guess Draco should know better seeing as nobody could ever pacify HIM in that way. :p

My favourite part of this story is definitely the out-of-body experience though (lol that prompt was my idea haha…) Draco’s panic and thoughts are really well written here, I love your use of repetition. And the Spanish words idea was very clever, loved it!

And of course, the ending. Surprised me a bit but clever. I really liked this story! Good luck! *huggles*


Author's Response: Hehe, *huggles* Thanks so much for the great review, Suzie! I'm glad you picked up on the sarcasm; I was afraid some people wouldn't. Thanks so much for the great review!! =]

Reviewer: Schmerg_The_Impaler
Date: 05/30/07 16:19
Chapter: Survival

Ooh, wow! Short but sweet! I quite like your version of Draco... the fact that one of the first things he longed for was his mother was perfect. Oh, and you invented a new word! Chameleonly... have to remember that one.

You have a great use of description, keeping it interesting, and I love the way you show Draco's arrogance while showing him to be a bit of pansy. It was rather funny in parts, really. Interesting call, making his patronus form a panther.

The end was priceless.... 'el fin...'

Keep writing, because I really like your style!

Author's Response: lol, Thanks for the review! It made me smile. =] By the way, I don't know why I end with 'EL FIN,' it's just a habit..

Reviewer: Cheshlin
Date: 05/21/07 21:23
Chapter: Survival

I loved the way you worked Draco through the prompts you finished. Having it all be a dream was great also! :) Good luck on this challenge!! :) Cyns

Author's Response: Haha, thanks! I'm glad you didn't think it was too cliche. I had to find some sort of ending though, you know!? Thanks again!

Reviewer: dumbledorefluertwins
Date: 05/21/07 16:04
Chapter: Survival

YAY! It's up! This was so good - even if it was only four prompts. You made us Slyths proud!


Author's Response: Wow! Yay review!! Thank you so much, Evie! *huggles*

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