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05/26/07 11:43 · For:
Finally, I read the whole thing! I have to say that you handled all the obstacles very well. I particularly liked the dancing shoes part, as I didn't have this one to write in my Gauntlet. I think Bella had enough dancing for the rest of her life! :P Our brains seem somehow to work the same way, because I saw some things in there that were similar to what I've done in my own challenge. Not big parts, just little details, some thoughts Bella had that Ginny had too... I'm telling you, they're more alike than you think!
As always, you seem to know exactly what you're doing with Bella and it makes the whole thing even better. Except for one thing (and Anna mentionned it before me): the ending. I did like what you did with the last prompt, bringing back her father and cousins. *huggles Sirius* But -that's my but- I seriously doubt that Bella would just turn away from Voldemort like that. Maybe you don't think that she's crazy like that, which is being so devoted to her Lord, but in the books, she is an inconditional worshipper. You know that I'm an optimistic person, I tend to see the good side in everyone and I believe that Bella has some good left in her, but I think that it would take more than seeing her family again to make her change her mind completely about Voldy. Just a thought here though, we're in afree country and your story is still great! Nice actions scenes by the way, Bella really has some brain! :P Bravo!
Author's Response: :D I'm glad you liked it. The dancing prompt was really fun. I'm glad I got that one.
As for Bella and Ginny being alike. They have similar tempers and a similar lack of sense.
And, I know most people don't see Bella turning away from Voldie, but I just see her differently. She has always possessed a strong devotion. Before Voldie came along that must have been directed somewhere. I always believed it was at her family. That's why I believe they could be the ones to bring her back.
Anyway, thanks so much for the review.
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05/20/07 10:48 · For:
Oooh, what a great take on the Gauntlet! I really liked how you handled all these prompts. I especially liked the part with Sirius, although the action was written really well too.
Now, while it was a lovely ending, I still have a hard time seeing Bellatrix turn away from the Dark Lord. I think she is too devoted to do something like that. While she may not totally worship him, leaving him seems to contradict with what we know about her. But, you handled the ending very well regardless. :P Great job Elle, and good luck in the challenge!!
Author's Response: *huggles Anna* Thanks for the review. I'm glad the part with Sirius is going over so well. It's my favorite part of the story.
*giggles* As for Bella turning away from the Dark Lord, we've had this argument before. I know she seems insanely devoted in canon, I just can't believe it. She has to have more sense than that!
Anyway, thanks again for the review. *more huggles*
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05/20/07 6:55 · For:
OMSQUEEELLE! This is awesome! Your portrayal of Bella in this story is yet again fresh and unique and wonderful. I love how you’ve made use of each prompt, to give us a further and deeper insight into her relationships, her fears, her past and her character. Plus, I love all the little snarky comments she makes…I’ll probably end up commenting on those and laughing more than anything else. XD
She was going to die there and then she was going to be eaten by rats.
Oohla. What a lovely Pessimistic!Bella thing to say.
Any other solutions were foreign to her, with the exceptions of manipulation and intimidation, which would also not help her here.
I love the dryness of that, and yet there is a meaning/point in the undertone. Not many people would know how to act in the situation that Bella is in, and certainly all of her usual behaviour would not help.
They could certainly never afford to come to work with a hangover.
*cough* course not. :p
Briefly, she wished Wormtail had been sent with her so she could offer him as a sacrifice. While the cat was eating him, she could run through the door.
In contrast to one of the above statements, here’s Bella trying to use her manipulation ‘skills’ again. :D I love the random humour in this story, you’re such an awesome writer!
&& onto other things now…I really like how you’ve gotten past some of the prompts. I’d never though of summoning the door! Very clever, and you’ve written the action parts very well. :) The patronus thing too, is very clever – using a patronus to defeat a patronus in a way. Well, as it’s Bella she *would* have a unique way of thinking. *smirks*
I’ve said this in many a review for your Bella fics, but here it’s apparent again…you do such a fantastic human!Bella. You cannot imagine how many times I squeed and awwwed when I read that part behind the veil with Sirius. I really liked the way you handled it, it’s very realistic how she doesn’t trust him at first, then slowly begins to understand, lets her guard relax slightly, and yet when she progresses into the next room there’s still a tiny shadow of doubt. I love your characterisation of Sirius also – really just awesome. :D
My only nitpick for some things in this story is that you left some American spellings in – like “honor” (from what I can remember…) and a couple of other things that should have added ‘u’s. :)
Other than that, great job. Congrats on completing the gauntlet, finishing so early and getting it up so quick!!
&& one last thing…my favourite line.
If he found her and killed her, she would die an honorable death. There was nothing more she could ask for.
Wow. That is just incredible. There’s so much power and so much meaning behind this as well. You’ve let us understand the process of Bella’s decision by her actions in the DOM and the people that she encounters. And by this, we’re understanding how difficult it must be for her, but also why she must do it. Again, well done for creating such a fantastic Bella in this story.
*huggles Elle* Well done again, this is the awesomeness! :D
Author's Response: Wow Suzie! *waits for Suzie to join her in SPEW*
Thanks so much for all the compliments. I really enjoyed writing this and I'm glad to hear that Bella's personality shone through.
Thanks so much for the lovely review. *huggles*
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05/19/07 22:30 · For:
I loved the way that you worked Bella through the Ministry. It is funny to see some of the similar meetings she had in the DOM as I wrote for Tonks. hehe. Go figure. Family is family after all. I don't know if I can see Sirius so forgiving of her, but then who knows what happens to us after death. It isn't totally inconcievable to see him helping her like that. I really like how she managed to walk free at the end. It was cool to see her decide to walk her own path, even if it lead to death at Voldemort's hands. Great Job! :) Cyns
Author's Response: *huggles* Thanks for the review, Cyns.
I really do love writing about dear Bella. :D
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05/19/07 16:23 · For:
Oh Elle... You continue to keep me in awe of your writing abilities. Not to mention the fact that you *completed* the WHOLE THING and you did it in style. So many doors but you made each one a completely different adventure. I LOVED what you did with her conversation with Sirius. It was refreshing to hear him say he forgave her and then have him help her out. The mirror showing his family was great but the fact that she could hold each one and speak to them was heartwarming. (granted I don't know what all the prompts were as I didn't make it through)
It's nice to see a happy ending for Bella.
Author's Response: Poor Bella, I usually give her such a hard time. I need to give her a happy ending every once in awhile. I really do love her.
Anyway, thank you so much for the compliments and I'm thrilled that you enjoyed the story. Sirius was my favorite part of the story as well. I loved being able to throw him in there like that. :D
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05/19/07 14:49 · For:
aw, Sly! That was beautifull!! I love that whole Sirius thing, it's so sad! Good luck with the Gauntlet.
Come on Slytherin!!
Author's Response: Thanks, Evie. I really enjoyed slipping Sirius in there. He just fit in the prompt about the veil so well.
Anyway, thanks so much for the review and I'm glad you enjoyed it. Good luck to you, too!