Reviews For The Pursuit
Reviewer: firestar3590
Date: 09/03/07 2:09
Chapter: The Twist

Awesome story, very well written. Please update soon! =)

Author's Response: Thanks, I'll try!

Reviewer: erisal95
Date: 09/02/07 23:33
Chapter: The Twist

Awesome!!!
really!!
I Love it!!
Youre one of my favorite Authors!!!:):)
please update soon!!!
i cant wait!!:):)..

Author's Response: Thanks very much! I'll try and get the next chapter up soon!

Reviewer: lovely_witch
Date: 09/02/07 22:16
Chapter: The Note

Amazing. I could completely see the fight between Ron and Hermione, and it seems just like one they might actually have. I can't wait to find out what the note means.

Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad you think it's realistic.

Reviewer: wickedpotterdance
Date: 09/02/07 21:27
Chapter: The Twist

oh my gosh!!!! i love it!!! great suspense!!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: wickedpotterdance
Date: 09/02/07 21:26
Chapter: The Twist

oh my gosh!!!! i love it!!! great suspense!!!!!!!!!

Reviewer: Nevica5
Date: 09/02/07 20:33
Chapter: The Twist

The plot thickens! Glad to see you have finnally updated!

Author's Response: I know, it did take me a while -- but I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: sweetbee
Date: 09/02/07 19:18
Chapter: The Twist

oh good god, what now. i cant belive she still with that cheating bastard, she knew he was cheating on her too. what going on with her. And why did Ron and Hermione break up in the first place, hmm. i geuss ill just have to wait. luved the chapter, please hurry and update.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! There are good answers to those questions, and if you stick with the story, I promise -- it'll all be explained! :)

Reviewer: The Seeker
Date: 09/02/07 17:35
Chapter: The Twist

Yes, ma'am! I'm reviewing! Hey, Maggie, how you doing? It's so nice to see this new chapter. I don't want to say it was worth the wait (even though it is), because I really don't want you take this long again.

I don't really think Hermione is OOC. Sure, in the context of her being a Hogwarts student, she may be. But she's an adult now, and in this story, a lot has transpired between she and Ronald.

Instead, I think this is a rather brilliant depiction of a highly conflicted Hermione. My guess is she found herself without Ron and latched onto the first male who showed interest. Bernard, of course, is absolutely disgusting -- on the sleeze level of Dick in your wonderful Uncle Fred story. There's no way our Hermione would even consider Bernard under normal circumstances. So, now we just need to have Hermione work out her feelings, acknowledge she's still in love with Ron, and simultaneously find Harry and Ginny.

I think I know who took H and G, but I won't say or ask, 'cause I don't want to spoil it for myself. I love what you're doing and hope to see an update soon.

How many chapters do you anticipate for this? Oh, congrats on your DSTA nomination on that other site that I prefer! Best, Jim

Author's Response: I always love your reviews! I know it took me forever on this, but I plan on updating faster this time around! (I know I said that last time, but this time I really mean it :b) Hermione certainly is conflicted, and a few key things to her choices have yet to be revealed -- you'll see! Right now, I plan on the story being around seven or eight chapters. I often say that though, and then find that certain passages take longer to write than I anticipated and it ends up being a few chapters longer (as was the case with Uncle Fred) Well, we'll see. Thanks again!

Reviewer: KAG
Date: 09/02/07 16:34
Chapter: The Twist

Hi, I just starting to read your story and it is amazing!!! I really want to know what happened between Ron and Hermione to be so hostile to each other. I like you gave a us hint that Hermione turned down Ron's proposel, and now I wonder why she did though? I also I want to know what happened to Harry and Ginny also. So please update as soon as you can and keep up the good work!!!!!!!!!!!

Author's Response: I'm glad you decided to start reading the story -- and liked it! All those questions are good ones, and I promise not to keep you in suspense waiting for answers for too long! Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: junior_achievement
Date: 09/02/07 16:21
Chapter: The Twist

this chapter was great! i loved having it from hermione's POV. i was shocked to learn that she's marrying bernard even though she knows he's cheating on her! hmm... can't wait for that to be explained :D
good job!

Author's Response: That was a bit shocking, wasn't it? But it will all be explained before the end! Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: RupertsPheonix
Date: 09/02/07 16:17
Chapter: The Twist

I don't think Hermione is acting OOC. I think I'm slowly beginning to understand her... But we'll wait for the next few chapters to determine that, shall we?
Also, I think that this chapter was very, very nicely done. Extremely well crafted. I cannot wait for another chapter to be up!! =)
--RP/Kate

Author's Response: I'm glad you don't think she is! I don't either, but then again I know why she is doing the things she is doing, and I was afraid readers might not realize there are good explanations for everything. Thanks for the review, I'm glad you liked this chapter!

Reviewer: Hermione Clone
Date: 09/02/07 15:57
Chapter: The Twist

I was wondering what would turn Ron and Hermione against each other like that! I wonder why he popped the question, and why she said she didn't mean it? And why on earth is Hermione going to marry a guy who she knows is sleeping around? Well, she's Hermione, so she has to have some reasonable explanation, right?
I still think Harry and Ginny set this up. They could lead them on a wild goose chase long enough for Ron and Hermione to fix things between them, then turn up.
Update soon!

Author's Response: Something big certainly had to have turned them against each other! The answer to all those questions will be revealed before too long! Thanks for the review, I will try and update quickly.

Reviewer: A_Pink_lady
Date: 09/02/07 15:19
Chapter: The Twist

Why hermione? Why did you turn down ron and be with the cheater Bernard!? Why?! If hes doing what Dick done to Ginny in UFCD *mutters darkly*
I just loved this chapter, i love the whole interaction between Ron and Hermione...and these twists are confusin me just a bit...i think im going to re-read this story after ive written this review...i cant wait for more, but before i send this review, im gonna write my theorys:
*Either, Bernard has something to do with it...(coz i hate him)
*Someone else we dont knows got them...
*Or Harry and Ginny have made up this whole scheme up to try and get them together...
*Or another unknown way you, the most brilliant author, have created
I cant wait for an update, this is a brilliant story, really grippin and well written. Love it

Author's Response: Thanks very much! I always enjoy your reviews. Those are some interesting theories . . . and you'll find out how right or wrong there are before too long! Good luck trying to decipher something else out through a second read. . . . ;)

Reviewer: sudeshna2kool4u
Date: 09/02/07 14:36
Chapter: The Pansy

Ok, I have MANY things to tell u...
first of all... BRILLIANT PLOT!
Very captivating
Very enthralling
Lovely

On the bad side:
1. A bit randm at times
2. Ron should have been a BIT smarter
3. Hermione treats Ron like vermin which is NOT the case in your story... she should be indiffernet to him, not sardonical and sarcastic and riculous.
4. Bernard is the typical person who is usually the 'evil-one' in the eys of the hero...
so, what i mean is, your story is very 'extreme' in one sense. it isnt smoothe. it has edges...

rest all is fine!

Author's Response: Thanks for both sides of the spectrum!

Reviewer: sudeshna2kool4u
Date: 09/02/07 14:36
Chapter: The Pansy

Ok, I have MANY things to tell u...
first of all... BRILLIANT PLOT!
Very captivating
Very enthralling
Lovely

On the bad side:
1. A bit randm at times
2. Ron should have been a BIT smarter
3. Hermione treats Ron like vermin which is NOT the case in your story... she should be indiffernet to him, not sardonical and sarcastic and riculous.
4. Bernard is the typical person who is usually the 'evil-one' in the eys of the hero...
so, what i mean is, your story is very 'extreme' in one sense. it isnt smoothe. it has edges...

rest all is fine!

Reviewer: Nadia Malfoy
Date: 08/27/07 17:43
Chapter: The Pansy

Oh, yeah! I love it! And Benny *cough, cough* Bernard is good! I like the whole thing with the secretary's lipstick. 100% pure MagEd!

Author's Response: Haha, thanks very much! Hopefully the next chapter will be validated soon!

Reviewer: Nadia Malfoy
Date: 08/27/07 17:40
Chapter: The Pansy

Oh, yeah! I love it! And Benny *cough, cough* Bernard is good! I like the whole thing with the secretary's lipstick. 100% pure MagEd!

Reviewer: pandafan81
Date: 08/26/07 2:33
Chapter: The Pansy

“Whoever wrote it simply took famous lines and quotes and phrases from other things and mixed them up. Look,” and she offered him both the note and the parchment she had written on.
"offered" ought to read "offering"

“What, you had time to read really old Muggle poems about,” he glanced at the note, “craggy mountains, but not about pie? At least pie tastes good.”
I rather feel that this line is out of place. Ron and Hermione are dealing with a really serious situation, and Ron's cracking a joke. I could see how he might make this comment at a different time... after they've become more friendly, maybe while they're traveling somewhere or forced to wait for something. But this attempt at humor just doesn't sit well with me. Especially since it's so stereotypical for Ron to immediately start talking about food.

Ron looked down beneath the Creed and the poem and read aloud with widening eyes, “He cries, she dies, you’re late, and fate, won’t wait.” He met Hermione gaze again...
"Hermione" should be posessive: "Hermione's" gaze

“Simple, oh yes,” Ron retorted. “So then, what does it mean, Miss Simple?”
He received yet another glare.

Yes, this is more in-character for Ron and Hermione. Ron is frustrated, so he lashes out, Hermione repsonds with a glare. Much more fitting than the food argument.

“I was not complementing you! Like you need to inflate that ego of your any more...
"your" should be "yours"

I was beginning to get miffed at Ron and Hermione for bickering, and letting petty things, like Benny vs. Bernard, and whether or not Ron could come with Herrmione distract them when they needed to be focused on what's happened to Harry and Ginny. I was geting even more uncomfortable about their "almost kiss" for the same reason... until this paragraph:
Ron followed in her wake, his nose still smarting from the smell of her perfume. She still wore the same perfume. It smelt like . . . like late nights spent studying on and off with breaks for Horcrux searching, like lectures on responsibility that died off as she gave into his kisses, like Quidditch game victories cemented with lazy kisses and soft, bushy hair, like falling asleep spooned around her with her hair pressed against his chin, like . . . like Hermione.
The sentiments, the memories, were so perfect. I think this has been your best writing so far in this story. The images of Ron and Hermione's life together... so perfect. And then Ron's realization that he wished he could start the day again.

Again with the out-of-character for Hermione. Yes, I know you've said all will be explained for her outward changes... but I don't think Hermione would be exchangiing smiles with Bernard. Even if she's trying to make Ron mad. I honestly think Hermione's concern for her friends would be greater than a scoff with Ron.

Herrm... *gag* I'm glad Ron reacted the way I did!

I am very interested to see what you have next in store. Again, I'm a bit agnsty about Hermione's behavior... I really think she ought to show more concern for her friends. But Ron is very good. Although why he's obsessed with the smudge/lipstick on Bernard's coat is beyond me. Yes, I can see that Bernard is probably having an affair with Lynn (she did have the pink lipstick) and will be able to probably break Hermione and Bernard up with it, but why would he be so obsessed with it, when he too ought to be concentrating on Harry and Ginny.

Bernard is... well, a passive agressive jerk. Condecending to Ron, and not at all interested or concerned with Harry and Ginny's wellfair. Hermione should be pissed at him for that. I would be mad as hell if one of my friends was missing and my boyfriend was more concerned about his work. He's obviously cheating on her, and will be easily dispensable.

I'm glad that Ron was able to recognize part of the puzzle. Of course Hermione would know the Muggle refrences, but would be lacking in Wizarding pop culture from the time of her childhood. She wouldn't have had access to such comics, and probably wouldn't have read them if she did.

I do hope Harry and Ginny are all right, and aren't suffering because Ron and Hermione spend more time arguing than working together...

Author's Response: Thanks for pointing out the typos, as always. Hermione is acting very out of character, and honestly, I don't really like writing her. I have gone back and changed a few minor things in the chapter after this review, I do really appreciate your opinion! Thanks again.

Reviewer: pandafan81
Date: 08/24/07 2:41
Chapter: The Note

And of course, I find another amazing treasure in your little library here!

I was a little put off by Harry's overreacting and Ginny's goofiness, until this section:
“Why?” Ron asked, amused and confused, often his feelings when around his sister. As though she wasn’t confusing enough regularly, Harry had to go and knock her up and get her all hormonal. Ron shuddered at the thought.
I guess that sums it up perfectly, Harry knocking up Giny (LOL- so Ron) and Ginny being a typical pregnant woman... And Harry has no other choice than to comply and worry!

hmmmmm... I'm a bit concerned about Hermione. She's just... not the type to suddenly become glamerous. We have seen Ron and Hermione "break up" before, and she's never tried to drastically change herself. She burries herself in her work. Granted, she is out of school now and may need to look professional for a job, but I just don't see the pumps and the pimk.

She had certainly mastered hiding her feels well over the years.
"feels" should be "feelings"

This wasn’t his Hermione Granger.
I AGREE completely (you sneeky girl, you get me all upset about Hermione's characterization, and you immediately point out that she's out-of-character)

I want to know who this Bernard fellow is, and what he's done to my Hermione, Ron's Hermione?! And whatever happened between Ron and Hermione that they would split up so throughly?

Okay, so I might sound miffed, but this is good. You've created situation that has frustrated me (in the best way) and makes me want to find answers. To rage at Hermione, and probably at Ron too...

Of course there is the mystery of Harry and Ginny's kidnapping, the strange letter (with definate gospel-esque themes), and what Ron and Hermione will do to get them back. They will obviously have to work together, and probably (hopefully) work through their issues and come back together... But honestly, the biggest mystery to me is Hermione's about-face.

I will be very eager to see where this is going!

Author's Response: Hermione is acting very out of character -- she will be even more so in future chapters -- but it'll all be explained! I'm glad you like the story and it has you hooked; thanks very much for the review!

Reviewer: hpfan012
Date: 08/20/07 15:55
Chapter: The Pansy

"not the most exciting chapter in the world"?. what are you playing at?

and bernard reminds me of lockhart. no idea why. but maybe because you talked about his appearance a little bit. i dont know. lol. and i believe that he is a bastard. just telling you how i feel.

haha. looking forward to the next chapter.

Author's Response: I'll take that to mean you liked the chapter! Thanks for the review, and he might not be as stupid as Lockhart, but he's probably as arrogant ;)

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