I loved the part of her eyes. This was clearly Severus to Lily.

thats such a sweet poem. i really loved the part when he said he'd give her the sun. its so cute.

So romatic and sweet. I'm sure James felt this way, but I don't think he could have ever expressed his feelings in such a fluffy way. My fave lines:

I could watch you forever,
Until the stars turned to dust,

So beautiful...

I would give you the sun,
But then what could so beautifully reflect gold on your crimson hair?
Or perhaps the stars,
But your brilliant emerald orbs so desperately put them to shame...

Such a heart-touching and lovely poem! Amazing job!




Author's Response: Thank you very much! I'm glad you liked it. And I agree, I'm not sure James would have been able to write a poem like this (maybe not at all...) but I thought it would be a nice idea anyway.. ^^;