WHAAATTT??!!! THAT'S ITT??!! *sob,sob,sob* This was such a sweet, sort of intense, loving, mysterious, and sorrowful story! And I can not beleive it's over!!! Write more stories-you rock at it!
Would it be possible to entice you to expand your story, you have such a vivid imagination and are extremely descriptive.
I wouldn't be surprised to see your works published, have you ever thought of becoming an author? I would most certainly read your works.
I love this story and would very much like it if you were to continue with its telling. I know it is a one shot but I could see this expanding into an amazing story.
If you do not wish to do so I would understand completely but I advise you to reread this breathtaking chapter and see if you would honestly like to give up on it.
You are truly gifted. I look foreward to reading any further work. Please be sure to let me know if you have any new work please contact me :)
Though I usually don't like anyone with Hermione but Ron, I liked this story. It was beautifully written.
great job on this fic. I wish there was more!
This is brilliant. The description of Draco Malfoy inside that room... that gave me goosebumps, it was amazing. Are Draco and Hermione going to fall in love, get married and have babies? What about Ron?
Either way, I love this, so update soon! Ta x
So, I'm definitely NOT a Hermione/Malfoy shipper, but ohmygod. What a beautiful fic. You totally deserve to have this as a 'Featured Story'. Well done!! :)
Wow! Definitely caught my attention. Can't wait to read more!
Very cute. I loved it! Definitely worthy of Kudos!!!
Good job!
~Cutiepoet
That was beautiful. I loved it :D
Author's Response: Thanks! :]
Another awsomely written story/one-shot written by the amazing Sarakime!
It is so awsome how you capture the character's character. I mean it's just incredible. You have great talent! Keep it up! You have a way with words that is just amazing. I don't think I'd be able to write as good as you. but hey, different people have different styles right? Keep up the amazing work you are doing and surely, you might become a very well known author.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for this amazing review and for reviewing all of my stories. It really means a lot. Thanks so much!! *huggles*
This is a really good story. Keep it up!
Author's Response: *salute* Will do! ;] Thanks!
Author's Response: *salute* Will do! ;] Thanks!
eurghhhhhhhhhh!! i myself am NOT really a fan of malfoy/hermione fics, sorry...
Author's Response: Umm, thanks? Why review, then? lol
Author's Response: Umm, thanks? Why review, then? lol
being one of the bigger draco hermione shippers out there, congratulations.
this was amazing. quite realistitc, too.
Author's Response: :D Thank you!
awwww.that was short and sweet.
Author's Response: Hehe, thanks!
*Says nothing about lateness and instead... features!*
Sarah, you know how much of a fan I am of you and your fictions. I'm so glad I gave you this prompt last term. You are a truly amazing writer and I hope you will write much more in the months and years to come.
~ Roxy
Author's Response: Wow; honestly, wow. That really means a lot to me and I'm so grateful to your kind comments. *huggles* Thank you so much! You're such a fantastic Professor. :D
Features? Huh? *confused*
Author's Response: Wow; honestly, wow. That really means a lot to me and I'm so grateful to your kind comments. *huggles* Thank you so much! You're such a fantastic Professor. :D
Features? Huh? *confused*
How cute! Usually I'm not that into Dramione, -solely because I tend to stick more so to the Marauder Era- but this was wonderfully written. The connection between the pair you formed was truly remarkable and realistic. Draco needed Hermione, so Hermione eventually needed Draco. Did that even make sense?
Hermione took a deep breath, turned on her heel and whispered, “Lumos!” In the one-shot, Lumos isn't italicized, even though it should be since it is a spell.
When the only thing that returned to her was her drumbeat of her heart, she shuddered out another breath and examined the room surrounding her. I love the metaphor here. It adds a lot to the fear and apprehension Hermione is feeling. It sort of sets the mood for what is to come. Although, personally, I think the first 'her' should be 'the' so it flows a little better, and it isn't quite as redundant.
“We’re going to Apparate to the Burrow, alright? I don’t believe you have enough strength to get there yourself, so we’ll have to do this together, okay?” All right. Small nit-pick that a lot of people overlook, since technically it's been a word for about a decade in America. Although, I'm pretty sure in Britain it's still all right.
“Draco,” she whispered, the name unfamiliar to her tongue. It rolled around in her mouth, considering it and reconsidering. I'm not sure why, but I absolutely adore how you went on to explain the way his first name felt to her. The rolling around in the awkward tension of the moment. This adds to the realistic nature of the one-shot, seeing as they never called each other Draco and Hermione before, the first occasion would be a tad awkward. Lovely.
Hermione’s came out in a shuddery fear of what was to come. She balled her fists and shook her head, telling herself to be brave. Again, I simply love the language in this sentence. I can practically feel the fear and see Hermione's actions. It's wonderful. Although, I'm wondering if Hermione is almost too afraid. After all, she is supposed to be a brave Gryffindor...
Hermione could’ve sworn she heard a gasp slither through the air and into her ears; the hiss of a cowardly snake, awakened by the intimidating life. First off, we snakes are not cowardly! (lol. =] Just had to say that) No, what I was going to say is the adjectives in this sentence just make my jaw drop. You're really good at accomplishing fear in your writing.
Overall, wonderful one-shot. Keep up the fantastic writing!
Author's Response: *huggles awesome review* Thank you so much, Danielle! Such a fantastic review. *slaps self for making all those mistakes* I'll get to them, I swear! Thanks again for all of your so nice compliments and I'm glad you liked the fic.
