Wow. This was a great little story which explored Molly's connection to both of her brother's and just how their death affected her and her family. Along with that, you did a great job with characterizing both Gideon and Fabian through their own words and Molly's description of them.
I really enjoyed the way you gave both Gideon and Fabian their own parts in this story. Their words help really bring them into the story instead of making it just about Molly and her reaction to their loss. You do a good job of choosing just the right words to really illuminate their characters in such a short space. What they say really explains a lot about them and Molly's explanations of who they were.
What I also liked about the story is just how much Fabian and Gideon appear to be a pre-cursor to Fred and George. I can definitely see how the twins could've taken a lot of inspiration from their uncles, especially if they heard the stories about them and visited their grave every year.
My favorite part of the story, though, was the way you included other characters from the books. Molly's reaction to Fudge, calling it 'rubbish', is a great way of setting up her distaste for him early on, before he ever became the Minister was fabulous. It set up her lack of respect for him once he was given that position.
Though this story was really good, I think the bit about Amos seemed a little out of place. I liked having him there because it only fits since they are neighbors at the time of the Quidditch World Cup and probably were at the time of the deaths. But, I don't think someone who only liked a person because they felt superior to them would try to commiserate with that person at a funeral. Of course, that's probably me projecting my own feelings on others, but it just felt weird when I read that.
Other than that, the canon word Muggle needs to be capitalized.
Those two small things aside, I thoroughly enjoyed this story. You did a wonderful job with Molly and Arthur and the way she described her brothers. It was a completely touching story and the ending definitely warmed my heart. Very well done.
Author's Response: Wow, thank you for the review. It's... possibly the most thorough I've received in this fandom and I really appreciate that. :) Now, let's see here... On the two criticisms-- Firstly, my beta and I realized in the story I wrote AFTER this one that Muggle is meant to be capitalized. (He hasn't read the HP books and I haven't read the last one since it first came out.) So, our bads. But I have fixed it now. Secondly, I don't really think Amos is like that. I mean, I think he's a bit pompous and probably does fancy himself better than Arthur in some ways, but I also think he respects Arthur and that is really just Molly's opinion of the man. I think that, by the time we see Amos in the HP books, she'll have warmed up to him considerably more and be far more willing to, like, feed him toast through the fire and things. I just think she's protective. Protective of her husband and family and anyone who might not be on the level is suspect. That kind of thing. On Gideon and Fabian-- I'm so glad you enjoyed their parts. I wanted to give them distinct personalities from each other and within the HP cannon given. (Was Fabian part of the Order? Hard to say... but he died with his brother all the same.) I also really like the Fred and George parallels you drew. I honestly didn't plan that, but I like it. :) Other comments-- Yes! Fudge is a loser! :D No, but seriously, I think that was one of my favorite things. Just to rag on him a little and sort of show the seeds of why his turn as Minister was so... not respect. So glad you enjoyed the story and brothers and everything. Thanks again for this wonderful review. It really means a lot to me. Really.
wow... that's good!
Author's Response: Thanks! :) Glad you liked it.
Two brothers. Together to the end. Molly really shouldn't blame herself. They did what they thought was right.
Really good. Mirrors what some soldiers think later on after battle.
Author's Response: No, she shouldn't. But she's Molly. She always blames herself. Thank you for the thoughtful review. :) I really tried. Brothers and soldiers. It's gotta be hard. Hard to go. Hard to be left behind...
that is so moving, im touched. it is a really special story, one of those ones that pop up every now and then and touch you, so thanks very much for sharing that with us, your a very talented writer, i espesh love the line,
'Fudge might be an idiot but even a broken clock told the right time twice a day.'
Author's Response: Wow, I'm really honored you think so. And that it touched you... cool. :) Thank you for the very flattering review. Really. Heh, a lot of people like that line! So true for Fudge... Thanks again!
Beautiful piece, and it's refreshing to see someone write about someone other than the main set of characters. Your portrayals of each of these characters is fabulous. I'm particularly fond of the line about Fudge, "even a broken clock told the right time twice a day." It was perfect. Great job, I'm glad I read this.
Author's Response: Wow, thank you for the great review. :) I really wanted to showcase the whole war thing because I feel like it's too often brushed off in the books. These characters are still human (emotionally, at least), y'know? I'm so pleased you enjoyed it and that everyone was in character. I'm really glad you read it, too. :)