Aaaah! Evil cliffie! But Really good!!! Love the focus on the friendship! Eagerly anticipating next chap!!!
Author's Response: Thankyou! Next bit is written and ready - i originally ahd this chapter HUGE but had to cut it into two smaller ones, so the next bit is done adn ready - just need to find my memory stick to get it up... :P
Heya, yey this is a fantastic chapter! I love the way that you have written the scene. All of the scene. This really is a fantastic fic and its such a shame they wouldnt let you submit all of it the same time. A fantastic chapter - cant wait untill the next chapter is up:) kepp up the good work hunni, Ell
Author's Response: Thanks babe! Next bit coming as soon as i find my memory stick :P luv ya xxx
I just found your story and I really like it. I loved the prologue too. I think your dialogue is great.
Author's Response: Thankyou! Glad you liked it :) more coming soon...
I clicked on this story thinking I just have to read this story but after I read it I thought I absolutely have to read the next chapter! I cant wait for Chapter 3, so Furry, please keep writing and KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!
Author's Response: :D thankyou! I am logging on atm to update, so there should be a new chapter soon! Sorry it's taken me so long to update guys, I updated chapter 3 but it was too long and then i split it into two chapters and submitted both - but they got rejected cos you're only allowed to submit one at at time! Opps :P b but there should be more on the way very soon.....
Ohh boy a cliffie, i can't wait!!!!!!!!!!! :)
Author's Response: thanks for reading and reviewing!!! :D I'm submitting the next chapter as we speak... :P
Author's Response: :D thankyou!!
Wow!!!!!!!! i like it already. The mom's POV is really interesting!!!!! Great prolouge!!!!!
Author's Response: :D Thanks! Am submitting a new chapter riiiight now :P
OMG i love this chapter! I know im lucky enough to have read this 2week ago but hey! I love the line 'All that time you've been a - well, you've had a furry little problem, as our ingenious James puts it -' Its fantastic!
I feel kind of mean cause i got to read it before anyone else but i cant help it if my friend is a pure and uter genious!
Honestly, i love your work and this is great! I cant wait to read the next chapter! Thanks again for letting me read this in advance! Your work is fantastic and so are you! **Hugs** 20 Padfoot |Points to you!!!!!!
Author's Response: Yay! Padfoot points! :) I have 170 now :D lol. Youo get 10 for leaving me lovely reviews, and you get another 10 for putting up with all the random chapter that I shove in your hands for you to read for me before I submit them! *hugs* Glad you liked it :) Yeah, that's a good Sirius line, isn't it? lol. Thanks again, hun xxx
Tonks! Wow that was just...Amazing...I don't know what you were on about it being weird...It was totally awesome! I love that way you wrote it, in second person, it gives you a whole different image when you read it! And you wrote the motherly feeling amazingly! it was Awesome! Yay Tonks!
Yellah Habibi *wink*
Author's Response: Farwa! Heya, thanks so much for reading and reviewing! Good luck with your fic, habbibi. Thanks xxx
This is an absolutely fantastic prolouge for a fic! The way that you have encorperated the second person and the way it makes the reader consider the situation in a different light is fantastic! It helps the reader to understand the emotions without long details. The style is fantastic and the way that it has been written grabs your attention and ensures that you dont get bored! This is the most creative and origional fic i have read for a while and i just love it!
Your dedicated fan! *hugs* Your writing is too good for words
Author's Response: Aaw, Elle! *hugs* Thanks so much! I'm glad you liked it :) Keep watching for the next chapter :) It'll be up soon... Thanks again for reviewing, you rock! xxxx P.S. Padfoot points and Wrackspurt cards!! Lol, we're insane...
Wow. Just… wow. Tonks, this is amazing. Like, drop-dead wonderful, thought-provoking, and profound. Wow.
*cough* Okay, I’ll try to be a little bit more coherent in my review. First of all, what amazed me was the point of view and tense. Present tense itself can be very difficult to write, and coupling it with something as unconventional as second person point of view makes the story all the more amazing. It is so personal and meaningful; it’s amazing. I know that it was just for this chapter, but... Wow.
Now, your writing itself is fantastic, as is the plot line. I love how you put an unconventional spin on Remus’ father—most people have him as being a kind person, but your portrayal of him is unique yet makes sense. What can I say? I love it!
The end of the chapter was absolutely brilliant, too. The last sentence is absolutely chilling—I may not be a mother, but I think you’ve conveyed her maternal feelings and internal struggle wonderfully. I’m sure that any parents out there reading this fic are really put in a turmoil; it’s that good. Might I ask if you’re a mother yourself?
Now, on to the nit-picking. There was very little, but here is what I picked up on.
“It isn't fair on him, to burden him with this curse.” [I think it would sound better if you said “It isn’t fair to him”]
“No matter how much you cry for him, hold him; love him…” [You should probably use either two commas or two colons, instead of a comma and a colon, in order to be more uniform.]
That said, this is an absolutely wonderful story that I’m definitely adding to my favorites—and recommending over at Fiction Junction. I’m literally on the edge of my seat, waiting for more. Keep up the brilliant work.
PS-Fellow werewolf lover, eh? =] *hugs* Me too, all the way! [Love your penname, by the way!]
Author's Response: Oh my.... *faints* wow! Thankyou so much, Fenn! That was - you're so - wow! *hugs* Love you! Thankyou so much for taking the time to review, and all your comments - wow. I really appreciate it, thankyou so much! Thanks for pointing out those two "nitpicks" - I've gone and edited them; you're right, it does sound better your way. You're - you - wow - you - Fiction Junction???? THANKYOU! You're awesome! I can't tell you how pleased this has made me - I can't stop grinning! lol. But no, I'm not a mother, actually, so I'm very pleased to hear that I portrayed the maternal feelings well :) Thankyou so much for you rewiew - it's made my day, week - month! Now I really ought to shut up before I permenantly damage my face from grinning.... Thankyou so much, it's people like you that make writing wort it :) Tonks PS - Yeah, werewolves rule don't they? We werewolves - *coughs awkwardly* - I mean, werewolves in general, lol, should rule the world!