Reviews For A First Kiss
Reviewer: wickedpotterdance
Date: 06/21/07 13:55
Chapter: Chapter 1

wow tht was great!!! i luv the whole fact that they werent perfect, and messed up. it was really sweet!!!

Author's Response: Thanks!!! I never picture "perfect" when I think of a first kiss. I always think "akward and sweet", so that is what I aimed for!! :) Cara

Reviewer: Wileycat
Date: 06/18/07 12:09
Chapter: Chapter 1

I really enjoyed this story it was sweet

Author's Response: Thanks!! I am glad that you liked it!! ;)

Reviewer: Makelovenotwar112
Date: 06/14/07 23:13
Chapter: Chapter 1

Ughh. Drunken mistakes aha. *sigh* well it was one night i was w my friend who had picked me up from a party. He was all mad that he wasnt drunk w me. Haha. So he went for a beer run. He was dmb and we got caught. They cuffed us and threw us in the car. And i kissed him and he was all woah. And then i threw up on him and he kissed me anyway.. And then he got a yr in jail and i got 5 months of rehab! Whoot.

Author's Response: Well, I guess you can't be held responsible for that kind of drunken mistake...At least he was the one that got a year in jail and not you!!

Reviewer: Makelovenotwar112
Date: 06/14/07 2:44
Chapter: Chapter 1

Thats adorable! Are first kisses supposed to be like this? Becuzz if so i want a redo! My first kiss was in the back of a police car when i was 14. I threw up on the guy who kissed me. Pretty damn pathetic. Neways good job!

Author's Response: Thanks!! I don't know if all first kisses are like that but Ron and Hermione's first kiss is going to be like that!! =) Your first was not exactly ideal...I am a little curious as to why you were in the back of a police car with a guy.....Anyways, thanks again for your review and some entertainment!!

Reviewer: Aggieboy9
Date: 06/09/07 20:15
Chapter: Chapter 1

Very well done. I could very easily see this being the exact scene in the book.

Author's Response: Thank you!! I try!=) I read your bio, thanks for all that you do for our country!! =)

Reviewer: DracoLuva4684
Date: 06/08/07 22:28
Chapter: Chapter 1

Aww!
I agree, that was soooo much more believible than the average 'kiss' fic.
Well done!!


Author's Response: Thank you so much!! I really appreciate all the support you guys are giving me!! It is awesome!!

Reviewer: drarry
Date: 06/08/07 10:23
Chapter: Chapter 1

Hey Cara
it's David
My other review wasn't that long, but who was the person that wrote the same review for you like 5 times?
Keep up the amazing work and write one with harry and draco
Drarry

Author's Response: That person's computer probably wasn't sending the review so they pressed the button five times and it sent the review 5 times..You sent me 3 of the same reviews today, so they probably did the same thing!! See ya in a day!! Cara

Reviewer: drarry
Date: 06/08/07 10:19
Chapter: Chapter 1

Amazing story, Love it Love it
write another

Author's Response: Thank David!! OMG, I have the funniest story to tell you...I will try to write another..We should write one together!! that would be awesome!!

Reviewer: the2ndWeasleytwins
Date: 06/05/07 16:33
Chapter: Chapter 1

I liked it. It was a nice little, short fic to keep me in thinking that there are at least a few good first kiss Ron/Hermione fic writers out there. Good work!

Author's Response: Thanks!! I am glad you think I am a good first kiss fanfic writer!! Thanks again!!

Reviewer: Hermione Clone
Date: 06/05/07 16:10
Chapter: Chapter 1

This was great! It still had the fluff, but was still realistic. It's perfect for Ron and Hermione, who are always going at it. I reallly liked the part where Hermione says, “Do you want to... move closer?” I loved it!!!
Could you write a similar type of Fic for other ships, say Harry/Ginny? That would be fantastic. I think this is the first time I've reviewed a one shot, translation...GREAT JOB!

Author's Response: Thanks!! I will try my best to write one for another ship..I have all summer..but the Ron/Hermione ship just made this easy to write...Ron always comes agross as clumsy to me and it was easier for me to portray Ron than Harry (hope that makes sense)...anyway, I will try to get one out before the end of the summer, I just need a visit from my Harry/Ginny muse =) Thanks again for reviewing for me..I feel honored!!

Reviewer: FreshPrincess
Date: 06/03/07 20:24
Chapter: Chapter 1

THIS WAS OFF THE HEEZY, I LOVED IT ALOT!!!!!! best charcterization and all that. i like how they wernt moving crazy fast on first kiss like other fan fics. Also how ron was clumsy, more believable. THIS WAS FREAKIN SALT! (:

Reviewer: FreshPrincess
Date: 06/03/07 20:24
Chapter: Chapter 1

THIS WAS OFF THE HEEZY, I LOVED IT ALOT!!!!!! best charcterization and all that. i like how they wernt moving crazy fast on first kiss like other fan fics. Also how ron was clumsy, more believable. THIS WAS FREAKIN SALT! (:

Reviewer: FreshPrincess
Date: 06/03/07 20:24
Chapter: Chapter 1

THIS WAS OFF THE HEEZY, I LOVED IT ALOT!!!!!! best charcterization and all that. i like how they wernt moving crazy fast on first kiss like other fan fics. Also how ron was clumsy, more believable. THIS WAS FREAKIN SALT! (:

Reviewer: FreshPrincess
Date: 06/03/07 20:24
Chapter: Chapter 1

THIS WAS OFF THE HEEZY, I LOVED IT ALOT!!!!!! best charcterization and all that. i like how they wernt moving crazy fast on first kiss like other fan fics. Also how ron was clumsy, more believable. THIS WAS FREAKIN SALT! (:

Reviewer: FreshPrincess
Date: 06/03/07 20:23
Chapter: Chapter 1

THIS WAS OFF THE HEEZY, I LOVED IT ALOT!!!!!! best charcterization and all that. i like how they wernt moving crazy fast on first kiss like other fan fics. Also how ron was clumsy, more believable. THIS WAS FREAKIN SALT! (:

Author's Response: Thank you, thank you, thank you!! I am glad this suited your first kiss fanfic craving!!!

Reviewer: rowenaravenclaw1
Date: 06/03/07 14:48
Chapter: Chapter 1

I think it is cute, and I agree. I can't stand the "Romeo, oh romeo, where aret thou Romeo!" act. Nobody's perfect and I love how your fic said that.

Author's Response: Sorry I didn't respond sooner, I was at tennis camp for the past week....Thanks for your awesome review..nobody's perfect and we all have to remember that!!

Reviewer: sudeshna2kool4u
Date: 06/03/07 2:47
Chapter: Chapter 1

I guess this was a nice one. You described Ron's character perfectly. I can imagine Ron doing it exactly in the same way.
But Hermione?
I felt she was a bit too girly in the last phase. Not Hermione-ish. She sounded a bit like Lavender.
No offense...
It was, on the whole, quite good! cheers!

Author's Response: Thanks, I really appreciate your review! Hermione's character has always been really hard for me, so no offense taken. Thanks again!!

Reviewer: Hermione Jane
Date: 06/02/07 19:12
Chapter: Chapter 1

omg, that was so good! I agree with you, I hate when people put Ron and Hermione out of character for their romance fics, I find it loses the "magic" (for lack of a better word). This was perfect!

Author's Response: Thank you, thank you, thank you! I wrote this story one night after reading three of the same first kiss scenarios over and over again. The usual characters in first kiss fanfics are more like the ones we see in the movies and not at all like the ones that are in the books, and that tired me. I am glad that I made this perfect for you!!

Author's Response: Thank you, thank you, thank you! I wrote this story one night after reading three of the same first kiss scenarios over and over again. The usual characters in first kiss fanfics are more like the ones we see in the movies and not at all like the ones that are in the books, and that tired me. I am glad that I made this perfect for you!!

Reviewer: MistyLupin
Date: 06/02/07 2:03
Chapter: Chapter 1

Best Ron-and-Hermione first kiss I've read. Perfectly described the awkwardness that would happen in that situation. I wouldn't mind if this took place in the 7th book :)

Author's Response: Wow!! Thanks so much!! Too bad the whole 7th book isn't just Harry/Ginny and Ron/Hermione!! JK, Thanks again for your awesome review!! *hugs MistyLupin*

Reviewer: ronmione_luv
Date: 06/01/07 15:44
Chapter: Chapter 1

hey! it's Hannah! Amazing story! i love it sooooooo much. I love how it is akward and so realistic, not like those gay little Oh Ron I love you so much! let me fall into your arms so you can kiss me! Nice work, Cara!
P.S.: I really appreciate the Inches from Eden thing on your bio, and so does my cousin! Thanx a bunch for that!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your amazing review!!! I am glad you like the Inches From Eden thing...I found it on their Myspace and they are really talented so I figured, Why not? Thanx again for reading and reviewing Hannah!!!! See you in 2 days!!!

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