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Name: Hermione2014 (Signed) · Date: 08/25/11 9:36 · For: Thin Lines
OH MY GOD!!! You killed Snape!!! I can't believe you. It was an awsome story but you killed him....shocker!!!!

Name: littlewarrior (Signed) · Date: 04/15/11 10:38 · For: Thin Lines
Must go barf...and cry. Er...liked???it???

Name: Jessa Ryan (Signed) · Date: 07/09/08 21:17 · For: Thin Lines
Very well written, but horribly depressing!!

Author's Response: Thanks!

Name: Lily the Second (Signed) · Date: 02/11/08 9:27 · For: Thin Lines
wow. this is really good, first time, man. lindsey...*thinks* lindsey s. ?
no, you can't be, my bad.

Author's Response: I'm sorry, what? *giggles* Thanks so much, I'm glad you liked it! ~Lindsey :)

Name: teresaschultz06 (Signed) · Date: 01/13/08 17:07 · For: Thin Lines
I did enjoy it, though, I should believe it to be longer, with more meaning,

But very, very well written.

Author's Response: Thanks!

Name: theinvisibilitycloak (Signed) · Date: 11/25/07 16:49 · For: Thin Lines
[theinvisibilitycloak greedily munched her chocolates in great anticipation, sitting at the edge of her seat while finishing the story]

this story is a real shocker. Incredible. Creepy. Surprise ending.

Good Job!!!!!

Author's Response: Thanks!

Name: harry_victoria (Signed) · Date: 10/19/07 19:43 · For: Thin Lines
*mouth drops to the floor* My, that was a surprise ending!

'There is a thin line between teacher and student. In Severus Snape’s case, this line is extremely thin. He had watched his students come and go through the various years of classes, but only one girl had been a light in the darkness toward him.' This was an awesome way to start of the story. It doesn't go write into character, but it illudes Snape into the story.

'For Merlin’s sake, Hermione. You do not want to be romantically involved with Severus Snape! a voice said blindly. For one thing, just think of what everyone will imagine of you!' I can definitley imagine Hermione saying this to herself in a circumstance like this.

I took a huge leap from reading R/Hr to reading a Hr/SS romance, and I knew that going for yours first was a good choice. Keep up the awesome work Lindsey, you are an amazing author. *hugs* xxvictoria

PS- Do you happen to read Jane Austen? I read her and she tends to come up with really good surprise endings, as this one-shot did.

Author's Response: Aw, thanks so much for your amazing review! I wrote this so long ago that I didn't think that anyone could like it, but I was proud of it when I finished it. And no, I don't read Jane Austen, but I do admit, I have heard of her surprise endings. Thanks so much! ~Lindsey :)

Name: NorthernPhoenix (Signed) · Date: 08/20/07 0:32 · For: Thin Lines
I really wish you ending was different because your story was so good it brought me in and I much prefer the happier endings!!

Author's Response: I'm sorry, but I'm glad you liked it. ~Lindsey :)

Name: mistude (Signed) · Date: 07/31/07 19:21 · For: Thin Lines
Very well done, I enjoyed this piece alot, I hope you continue to write more!

Author's Response: Thanks! And I have a whole library full, so yeah, I definitely have. *giggles* ~Lindsey :)

Name: luisa_lurves_potter (Signed) · Date: 07/25/07 22:45 · For: Thin Lines

Author's Response: Thanks! ~Lindsey :)

Name: osier (Signed) · Date: 07/04/07 0:55 · For: Thin Lines

Author's Response: Thanks! ~Lindsey :)

Name: osier (Signed) · Date: 07/04/07 0:54 · For: Thin Lines

Author's Response: Thanks! ~Lindsey :)

Name: Sly Severus (Signed) · Date: 06/30/07 0:53 · For: Thin Lines
*waves to SPEW buddy*

I really enjoyed this. It seemed to have a unique feel to it. I can’t really explain it, but it really stood out from the other Hermione/Snape fics that I’ve read. I think it might be because of the direct approach from Severus, which was interesting. I have to admit, it doesn’t really fit his character though. I don’t see him setting himself up for rejection without a better reason.

There is a thin line between teacher and student.

I don’t really get your opening statement. Saying there is a thin line between them, to me, means that there is nothing much separating the student from becoming the teacher. I don’t really think the line fits with the rest of your story.

But there was a point to this. She knew that Harry and Ron would be wrong. Dead wrong. She had always had a feeling that someone was watching her in Potions, and when she would turn around, she would lock eyes with Professor Snape for at least a minute, ultimately always getting back to her work. She had always known that he was watching; waiting to corner her to do this, but she had always thought it a sick fantasy that toyed with her emotions. She actually wanted him to do it.

I loved this paragraph. This is when I really started to get hooked into your story. It really showed that Severus’ feelings had been developing all along and that he wasn’t as good at hiding them as he thought. It makes us look at him in a slightly different way because the Severus we’re used to would be able to hide anything. I also think this is the perfect way to introduce Hermione’s true feelings. Well done, here.

And I loved the whole bit where Hermione realized that Severus threatened to leave. I could feel her panic as she searched for his room and pounded on the door. I knew how she was feeling when she finally accepted that he was gone and started to cry. This part of the story was handled amazingly well.

As I didn’t bother to check the warnings until after I read the fic, I was surprised about Severus. I didn’t expect him to kill himself. He was thinking about returning to the Death Eaters. To a certain extent, he even considered them his friends. I thought that was exactly what he was planning. When he still had that option what made him decide to take his own life?

And now, I have a few nitpicks for you:

“Professor, I . . . I don’t know what you’re wanting, but I really need to go to Charms.

This should be: Professor, I…I don’t know what you want…”

where there was at least a few students bustling by every few moments.

This should be: where there were at least…

As he opened his mouth to speak to her, to profess his true love and feelings for her,

This sentence uses the phrase for her twice. I would consider revising. I would just take the first for her out.

Anyway, I really enjoyed reading your story. Good work!

Author's Response: Aw, thanks so much, Elle! I'm so glad that someone has finally decided to do some nitpicking with this, because I was a bit hesitant on how it came out. With the 'there is a thin line between teacher and student' . . . I don't really know how to explain it, but that line just popped into my head for this. What I kind of meant was to reference the other student/teacher relationships going on in the world, and so I tried to make it, instead of a thick line, a thin line . . . lol. If that makes any sense at all. Well, the reason that I made him take his own life is a suicide bunny that popped itno my head about a month before I wrote this, and I thought that a good twist would be, instead of him actually leaving the school ('If you defy me, I will be gone by tonight'), is to actually leave the earth. I had a few reviews saying that they enjoyed it. I don't really think that this was my best story . . . by far. :) I just thought that it would be a change for me to switch Ron with Snape and be romantically involved with Hermione. More than 3/4 of my romance stories on here are Ron/Hermione, and I'm trying to challenge myself to write different things, nothing cliched. *cringes* This actually sat in my Word for about a month before it was actually submitted for all of the challenge things and submissions I had to get in, and my writing kind of changed a bit since then. Also, thanks for those punctuation nitpicks . . . I'll have to go back and change them. Thanks so much for this spectacular review, Elle! *hugs* I'll have to get to yours. *laughs manically* ~Lindsey :)

Name: Hermione_Rocks (Signed) · Date: 06/18/07 19:08 · For: Thin Lines
Woah, that was. . .depressing. >.> It was odd how Severus was ready to throw everything away for a teenage girl -- his entire life even, just because he couldn't have her. I think he puts a higher price on his own head than that, and even if he didn't he would want to continue fighting against (or for, if you think he's evil) Voldemort, and would not dispose of himself like that. . .I just can't see him commiting suicide, at least not like this.

However, it worked well for the story, which was very emotional and nice. So I would still say it was a great story, good job! :)

Author's Response: Thanks so much! Oh, and I'm so glad that you bring up that point, because right as soon as this was validated, I realised that I would have wanted to have added a bit more on the upcoming war, but I didn't. So, I think that another HG/SS fiction should be in order. :) Not anytime soon, though, because I have about five other things that need to get written yet. *sighs* Thansk so much for your review, and I'm glad you liked it! ~Lindsey :)

Name: CowGirlHPFan (Signed) · Date: 06/15/07 22:53 · For: Thin Lines
AWWWW!!! That was REALLY SAD!! It was kind of creepy how Snape just suddenly made out with her, and the whole suicide thing made me think it should be in the dark/angsty category,sorry for the critizing words,but i wanted to tellyou how i felt,sorry again,*~*CowGirlHPFan*~*

Author's Response: Oh, no! I completely appreciate your criticism! I know that this should have been in the D/A, but it was solely a Hermione/Snape romance, and so it had to go into the romance cat. I'm so glad you liked it! ~Lindsey :)

Name: Potter_Fan (Signed) · Date: 06/13/07 12:16 · For: Thin Lines
You left it there?! You let that happen? how could you?!!!!

Author's Response: Ha ha, i do hope that you meant by leaving the ending there. *blushes* Ah, I'm sorry about that . . . but I like crazy, cliffy endings, and so I'm going to have to leave you like that! I may have to write another Hermione/Snape story too. :) This is my first, and it was um . . . quite interesting, but I do hope you liked it! ~Lindsey :)

Name: mrsdan (Signed) · Date: 06/07/07 15:31 · For: Thin Lines
OMG!!!!!! Hope could you make him kill himself???????? I am sobbing!

Author's Response: Aw . . . I'm SO sorry! I hate that I made you cry! I hope you did like it though! ~Lindsey :)

Name: broken_window (Signed) · Date: 06/01/07 22:07 · For: Thin Lines
yea.... shocked. but happy. great story. about time someone wrote a good suicde romace.

Author's Response: Aw . . . Yeah, this story was really fun to write, and I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks! ~Lindsey :)

Name: Nohope118 (Signed) · Date: 05/31/07 11:41 · For: Thin Lines

Author's Response: Aw, I'm so sorry. But I hope you liked it. ~Lindsey :)

Name: Merlin the Weirdster (Signed) · Date: 05/29/07 10:59 · For: Thin Lines
WOW....... very strong and powerful. no offence to you, or anyone for that matter, but even if this is a good fic, isnt the snape-hermione pairing just gross? or weird? or strange? or even just odd?

anyway, i thought this was a good fic, despite the above. sorry if this was a bad review.

Author's Response: No, it's not a bad review! I understand that this story held non-canon pairings, but I had an idea, and a Hermione/Snape pairing just seemed to fit here. The ship itself is a bit odd, but it works. If you thought it was very strong and powerful, then tha makes me happy because you liked it! Eh? Thanks! ~Lindsey :)

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