First of all I want to say congrats on getting it on Mugglenet! We all know how much you wanted it to be validated!
Now onto the story Review! :
I like the whole Ball theme. With the masks and all that. I like it, it shows that even with a mask Draco can recognize her – hence the reason for the sentence: He could recognize her anywhere — like right now, when she was disguising herself by donning a magnificently designed white mask which only covered her eyes.
The minute I read that sentence… I just knew they had been together before you explained it all (which is defiantly a good start when it’s only the 3rd sentence!!)
Then you go and explain everything – which I found was very clear and the few paragraphs explaining everything where well written. And I liked it a good bit.
-Hermione swirled the contents of her champagne glass, silently watching the golden substance whirl around – I just have to say I love this sentence … and I don’t quite know why! I think its because it creates an wonderful mood, but then how can champagne create a mood?
The only thing I didn’t understand was the reason Draco left her. He got a promotion and had to leave for a while? I just don’t get it, it probably because I’m used to real romantic reasons for departure! But then the reason you gave does explain why Draco is SO guilty.
- She closed her eyes, trying to rid herself from these thoughts. If he doesn’t show up today, she thought to herself, then I’ll let go of him.
Hermione prayed with all her might that he would come; hoping that she wouldn’t have to give up on him.- I found this kind of depressing.
“we have a lot to catch up on, don’t we?”
Hermione noted the mischievous glint in his eyes and blushed. “Yeah, we do,” she said, smiling coyly. She looked at him fondly; gazing at his features as if to engrave them in her memory forever. “I love you,” she said once again, emphasizing how much she had missed him and how glad she was that he came back.
Draco brushed his lips against hers and whispered against her mouth, “I love you too.”
- I LOVED this ending!!
All in all this is defiantly a GREAT story
-So anyone out there reading this review, READ IT!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you!! like you said, I've been trying to post this fic for a long time, so it feels awesome so know that its finally up *sighs in delight* It feels like i've really accomplished something (thank heavens I didn't give up on posting the fic here!)
I really wanted to write a story based on a masquerade theme. I've read so many stories like that, and fel in love with each and every one of them. Since I just adore the song 'Far Away', I just had to put them together and create a one-shot =D The main reason the story kept getting rejected was because there was not enough description about how they got together in the first place. See, what I wanted to do was to just write a fic about their reactions after meeting up after so long while BRIEFLY explaining why and how they got together. I didn't really want to focus on how exactly they started to fall in love - that would be like writing a whole story! Anyhoo, I hope you get my point lol. But you saying that it was clear, makes me feel good - atleast someone understands how and why they got together by reading a few, brief sentences! lol...
haha...I really wonder why you liked the champagne part =D Its true though..it does create a somewhat sophisticated, a more romantic kind of mood lol...
About Draco's departure. Well the main reason why is because of his promotion. Have you read 'Daddy'? Well in that story, Ron has to go away and leave Hermione because he got some kind of promotion...well its something like that for Draco as well. He doesn't come back to her after a long time and so feels guilty. He realised that she was more importand than his job...=D
teehee! Oh, i'm soo happy you liked the ending! I was stuck on writing that part. I needed to somehow portray how much they loved each other even after staying apart for a year. But seeing that you liked it so much, I can assume that I came up with a good ending eh? *smiles happily* Thank you so so much for the long and lovely review - it means SO much to me!
I loved it. It was so sweet and touching, and the characterization was perfect. "Far Away" is one of my all time favorite songs, and I think you really did it justice with this fic. Great work, as always!
Author's Response: Hello, hello! Oh, thank you so so much! My first ever one-shot and i've got all positive feedback *does a silly dance*
'Far Away' is absolutely my favourite song! I was listening to it over and over again and I decided I just HAD to write a dramione fic based on it! =D Thanks so much for the review - glad you enjoyed it!
OMGAWD! omg omg omg omg! The descriiptions and everything were brilliiant! I felt like i was really there! my heart was freakin thudding too! haha
Cant wait for next Journey On Water update =) =)
Author's Response: Thanks, GreenFairy! This one-shot was actually supposed to be up AGES ago, but it had some problems...anyhoo! It's here now and boy, it's got me all hyped up lol..! *sighs in relief* The descriptions..! I really wanted the whole scene to be magical and romantic...hopefully I portrayed that? =D
Journey On Water won't be updated until after the 7th June - one word: exams! But my 20th chapter is up, if you haven't read it yet =D
OOH! That was really neat! :7)
Author's Response: You think so??? *smiles* Thank you so much!
OMG i read it and i loved it! this story was so cute and amazing! you should expect your review 2morrow. cuz my internet is bout to turn off! but i will be leaving one! a long one! cuz this was amazing! you have done it again SK witch! Fan-tabulous!
Author's Response: Ooo really?! Aw, thanks a ton! I know it ain't that long and stuff, but hey...my first one-shot! *squeals* I'm a very happy person today...lol! Can't wait to read your review *winks*
OMG IT'S HERE!!!!! WOW I HAVEN'T READ IT YET BUT I'M JUST SO HAPPY THE MODS FINALLY LET IT THROUGH! YAYAYAYAYAYAY! SORRY..I'M GONNA GO READ IT NOW THEN WRITE ANOTHER REVIEW! ^_^
Author's Response: *dances around the house* It's here, It's here, It's here!! woohoo...! I really can't believe it! Thankfully I didn't give up hope on this one-shot...I was so fed up of it not being approved, but it's here now!
I was just here, reading the reviews for the new chapter of J.O.W when it popped in the 'most recent' section... I got so excited for you! you've been trying for so long. Congratulations! !!
Author's Response: *shrieks in delight* OMG!! It's HERE!! I was just checking the 'vew reviews' section on my account and saw that I had recieved 6 of them for this story - I mean I didn't even get a letter saying it got approved!! YAY!! I know...I've been trying to put this story up for such a long time and it's finally here! Thanks so much!