Reviews For Thicker than Water
Reviewer: NoxSomnium
Date: 03/24/08 1:16
Chapter: Chapter 1

More? More? More? I think it has a lot of potential, but it really needs to continue to be expanded before it'll be really good.

Reviewer: kehribar
Date: 06/10/07 8:06
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wow. Once again I'm extremely impressed with your writing. Having met Auster in the Transfiguration class, he had really gripped my attention. It's not just his devotion to his father that makes him so real - you managed to use that one specific feature to build up a well-defined and tough character on the whole. I think that's the one point where most of us fail to build up our original characters: they fall short on reality and a single side of them is exposed like a single apple on a bare tree. *grimaces at anology* I'm sure you got the point ;) So bravo, for not being trapped, and having Auster so intriguing almost as much as Snape himself.

What I mostly like about your style is the somewhat bitter irony, the sharp-edged light tone that defines your writing. I love the incision of thoughts into the flow, used side by side with first-hand thoughts in italics. It balances the darkness of the theme nicely, also managing to keep the reader waiting eagerly for more.

I, for one, am waiting so eagerly for the next chapter :)

And, I'm so sorry it took me so long to review.

Author's Response: Wow Thank you. I'm glad you think Auster is realistic, I some times worry he's one demauainal. "What I mostly like about your style is the somewhat bitter irony, the sharp-edged light tone that defines your writing. " :) I hadn't really noticed I did that. Now that you point it out I think I do that a lot and not just in this piece. Thank you for telling me- because now I understand whey there are so many stiles I *can't* write. :) "I love the incision of thoughts into the flow, used side by side with first-hand thoughts in italics. It balances the darkness of the theme nicely, also managing to keep the reader waiting eagerly for more." Again thankyou, I never though I'd here I manged to archive balance.... I geuse I'm going to have to try to get chapter 2 validated.

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