Reviewer: FlyingPheonix
Date: 09/13/07 21:50
Chapter: Chapter 9-Unlikely Prince Charming

So Sad..My heart like sank so much.

Reviewer: Idiot of ravenclaw
Date: 08/02/07 15:02
Chapter: Chapter 8-Dreams of Darkness

wow this is a really good story

Reviewer: Lalalalatina
Date: 07/18/07 17:28
Chapter: Chapter 7-In the Shadow of a Death Eater

Wow, this is excellent. Although I'm not a Dramione shipper (sorry, I ship only canon), I admit you wrote it in a way that makes it seem as if he really was crushing on 'Mione. My only critique is that every line ends with a period when several lines are not quite finished and continue. I'd say to use some commas and dashes is some of those places. Other than that though, great job (again). Keep writing!

Reviewer: perfect_angel
Date: 07/18/07 16:19
Chapter: Chapter 5-Frozen Frame

awww...its so sad. this is my favorite poem so far

Reviewer: Ave
Date: 07/18/07 13:34
Chapter: Chapter 7-In the Shadow of a Death Eater

I LOVED IT! I am a huge Hermione/Draco shipper. Aw, it was so cute and pretty, good job on that one. Write more entries, you're really good!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I used to be fairly adamant against them as a couple, but am pretty open to it now. So glad you loved it! There will be more coming. :D

Reviewer: Ave
Date: 07/18/07 13:31
Chapter: Chapter 5-Frozen Frame

I loved how you depicted a picture in the poem. I really liked this one.

Reviewer: Ave
Date: 07/18/07 13:26
Chapter: Chapter 3-What I Like About You

Ahhh, cuuuuuteee.

Reviewer: Ave
Date: 07/18/07 13:25
Chapter: Chapter 2-Pretending

Didn't like the ending much, but I loved the 6th line.

Reviewer: Ave
Date: 07/18/07 13:23
Chapter: Chapter 1-Through the Rain

I thought it was very well written, and heart-filled. Good job :)

Reviewer: Lalalalatina
Date: 06/14/07 13:13
Chapter: Chapter 6-Fate of My Future

Great poem, I liked how you used the paths. They are symbolic of the choices he has and will continue to make. His determination was made clear. I believe in the third stanza a comma should separate the lines, not a period. And in the fifth stanza the first line may flow better if it were just one line. But those are just my thoughts. As always, great job. Keep up the amazing work! ^^

Author's Response: Glad you like it. Yeah, I had made some last second changes before submitting it so I didn't really proofread it all that well. But I'll take a look at it! I truly appreciate the (kind) honesty. There's more coming still!!

Author's Response: ---I went back and changed the third stanza, However, I'm leaving the fifth stanza. I understand what you're saying, but I had it there for the speaker's effect of how he was thinking. It seems right to me that he would pause after saying "I made my choice," as if it were final. But I appreciate the input!! Thanks a bunch.----

Reviewer: Idiot of ravenclaw
Date: 06/13/07 20:25
Chapter: Chapter 6-Fate of My Future

yes this is so awesome

Reviewer: Idiot of ravenclaw
Date: 05/29/07 20:00
Chapter: Chapter 5-Frozen Frame

this is so sad you write way better than me this chapters my favorite

Author's Response: Thanks! I think this one is my fav so far too.

Reviewer: Lalalalatina
Date: 05/29/07 11:29
Chapter: Chapter 5-Frozen Frame

Oh wow, Ithis poem is amazing. The idea was wonderful, and you did a great job of using the frozen picture as a symbol of their relationship. And I like that you are now writing about different characters. I can't wait until you update. ^_^

Author's Response: update coming soon, hopefully! :P i'm glad you like it.

Reviewer: Ritter
Date: 05/28/07 16:50
Chapter: Chapter 5-Frozen Frame

hahaha, very cute. Nice job!

Reviewer: Renabena
Date: 05/16/07 21:25
Chapter: Chapter 4-This Place

So sad but nice rhymes! Good job!!! I would like to read more of ur poems or stories!!

Author's Response: thank you! more poems coming to Diary of a Thousand Heartaches, but the only other story I have going is Beginning and End of the Marauders. Glad you like it so far!!

Reviewer: JustLikeHermione77
Date: 05/16/07 18:34
Chapter: Chapter 4-This Place

this is really creative!! i don't think that i've ever seen a story like this. is this the end?

Author's Response: nope, more coming! and from more characters too. thanks a bunch!

Reviewer: Lalalalatina
Date: 05/16/07 15:38
Chapter: Chapter 4-This Place

Ooo very nice. And I'm sure Severus did feel at least a teensy bitty bit bad.

I want this vacant feeling gone and peace again Iíll find.

I don't know about the second half of the line- I think you could word it a little better...but that's just me...

I want this place away from me leaving not a trace.

This line is nice but again I think you could word it differently, cuz you personify the place by saying it will leave. Maybe "I want to leave this place without leaving a single trace." or something would make more sense.

I don't want to sound mean or overly critical, these are just things that jumped out at me when I was reading this. Feel free to ignore the suggestions if you wish.

Anyways, I did like the poem, and I hope that you update soon. These are always short and enjoyable to read. ^_^


Reviewer: Lalalalatina
Date: 05/15/07 15:32
Chapter: Chapter 3-What I Like About You

Awww, how very sweet. My fave line:

I like how you make me feel secure
When youíre by my side


Very sweet and romantic. I'm not sure whether James would be able to write something as fluffy as this, but it is still a good poem. Are you planning on posting any more? Will there be different characters or are these poems centered on characters from the "marauder era"?


Author's Response: There's over 10 poems so far, from different characters from Marauder era all the way to the Trio's time at Hogwarts. And yeah, I don't really think James would actually WRITE something that fluffy, but you know it's obvious he was head-over-heels for Lily. So it seemed appropriate. Thanks a bunch!! There's more coming soon.

Reviewer: Lalalalatina
Date: 05/12/07 18:43
Chapter: Chapter 2-Pretending

This one was really nice. Very sweet too, just like the last one. I think I may like this one better than the last one though because it's J/L. My fave line:

I pretend I write this not for you, but for some other guy

With what we've seen of James and Lily's relationship in the book, that seems to be a perfect *Lilyline*, if that makes sense. Will the next one be from James?


Author's Response: Yes, the next one is actually from James. I think there are over 10 poems total so far. My favorite ones are still to come though.

Reviewer: Lalalalatina
Date: 05/12/07 18:39
Chapter: Chapter 1-Through the Rain

Hmm, very nice and sweet, but I'm not into shipping S/L. Its still a very nice poem though.

Here's just one suggestion:
But I see the hope. I see the light

Maybe you should just make it one line, I think it would look better that way, and put a dash or comma where the period is. Just a suggestion, feel free to ignore.
Anyways, like I said before, very sweet.

*off to read the rest*

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