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Reviews For Crosses and Garlic

Name: Binka Fudge (Signed) · Date: 05/03/08 13:36 · For: Crosses and Garlic
I love James, he really did well putting Remus at ease, and that conversation was hilarious! Well done.

Name: red haired mom (Signed) · Date: 01/26/08 15:34 · For: Crosses and Garlic
Hello, I think your portrayal of the strain on Remus and his friends is very well done. The exhaustion is something we were given to believe from canon was excellently shown when Remus entered the room and collapsed onto the bed.

I did like that you had him trying to continue the cover-up until asked directly. Not being completely sure that James knew would be reason enough to continue the lies. But, he did come clean when it was guess correctly, so I was happy to see the truth finally out between friends.

I’m not so sure that James would confront him without at least Sirius with him, only because they are all so close. Or that Sirius wouldn’t have figured it out along with James. But since technically this story is about James, it makes sense that he would do it alone.

Remus shrinking back into himself when James drew a blank on supportive comments was typical of what I think he would do. But the reactions to James blatant mistakes was absolutely hilarious.

But this line: “Thanks,” he said. “A lot of people have some pretty terrible ideas about werewolves, you know. It’s nice to have someone who understands."

Really and truly touched me. I can’t imagine having the fear of a friendship as close as theirs reliant on the divulgence of a secret that huge, and for you to tackle it so humorously was wonderful.

I truly enjoyed your story, and will definitely be back to read more.

Name: Rhi for HP (Signed) · Date: 01/04/08 23:41 · For: Crosses and Garlic
:) :) :) :) :) Nice job. I especially like how well you did keeping everyone in-character. I've read quite a few Marauder fanfics recently that are so off-character; it's so annoying to read something, all the while be thinking to yourself, "nah, James would NEVER do that!" and so on. There were lots of other positive things about this story, but that's just one that stood out for me.

Name: DarkJoker (Signed) · Date: 08/01/07 13:44 · For: Crosses and Garlic
Crosses and garlic, no image in mirrors...dude that'd be Vampire, isn't Remus gonna say at some point that James is mixing things up?

Name: Fantasium (Signed) · Date: 06/24/07 12:31 · For: Crosses and Garlic
I bet you thought you’d never see this review. Well, *shifty eyes*, here it is at last!

*giggle* Where to begin? Well, I’ll skip the oh-so-amusing parts for now, and start with James. I think it’s wonderful that you’ve chosen to let him be the one who finally decides to confront Remus about his constant disappearances. Out of the four Marauders, I would have said that Remus is the one who would do something like that, but when he’s the one to be worried about, I’d agree with you and say that James would probably be the one to step forth. My own opinion disregarded, it’s a good way of you to show us what you think of James’ character – in canon we have only really been told by other characters, not shown, that James is a good person. But here, you prove it to us.

“No, why? Are you saying Dumbledore does let you feed on students?” James asked, putting on an incredulous voice. “Wow. Well, that’s… sporting of him, I guess.”

Oh, I like that. It’s funny, and this young James is really doing everything he can to assure Remus that he really doesn’t mind his “werewolf problem”. He really is an excellent friend, proving that he cares more about the person in question, than about prejudices.

BC, your flow and description and word choices are all excellent and flawless, so it’s really difficult to offer some kind of critique on this one-shot. The only thing I would question is the basic idea – would James, pure-blooded and raised in a wizard family, really not know about the different characteristics of werewolves and vampires? I am certainly not suggesting you should change this, since the whole story is based on his misunderstanding, but I thought I’d tell you that I reacted on it.

Hee. It’s a wonderful little tweak there, at the end. Remus’ reactions are priceless, and it’s easy to tell how relieved and grateful he is, and the undetected-by-James-sarcasm is perfect for Remus’ character. All in all, this is an amusing little piece about friendship, with lovely language and grammar. The sort of story that brightens every reader’s day. Yay!

Name: I_LUV_MOONY (Signed) · Date: 05/11/07 22:44 · For: Crosses and Garlic
Oh, James! So much to learn! Well, at least he had his friend's best interests at heart. A good story.

Name: ginny_w_rox (Signed) · Date: 05/08/07 14:14 · For: Crosses and Garlic
lol! this is really funny! i only wish there was a ending in wich james found out. otherwise its pretty gd.

Name: ginny_w_rox (Signed) · Date: 05/08/07 14:13 · For: Crosses and Garlic
lol! this is really funny! i only wish there was a ending in wich james found out. otherwise its pretty gd.

Name: ginny_w_rox (Signed) · Date: 05/08/07 14:13 · For: Crosses and Garlic
lol! this is really funny! i only wish there was a ending in wich james found out. otherwise its pretty gd.

Author's Response: Thanks! But if you look again, you'll see James already knows. ;)

Name: he he helupin (Signed) · Date: 05/07/07 16:24 · For: Crosses and Garlic
Okay... wow. That was very funny! I was just waiting for Remus to say, "um... James... Werewolves don't suck blood." But, it was very cool how you made Remus go along with it and I loved it when James tried to look at him in the mirror. Great story!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad you liked it. :)

Name: GreyLady (Signed) · Date: 05/07/07 15:57 · For: Crosses and Garlic
Aww, sweet. Another wonderful fic, BC. James and Remus are perfect, as ususal, and what a creative way to use the prompt. *giggles* I was sort of thrown off by this line, “So you drink people’s blood. So what?” because there are two "so's" in such close proximity, but as it's informal dialogue it's not a big deal. I think that it might have been more effective to have James reflect on the signs he had been seeing of Remus's lycanthropy before he asked about it, but very important either.

Great story. It's always a pleasure to read your work.

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the great feedback! You bring up good points; I think I will add a bit more reflection when I get the time to revise, and adjust the so-so line. Thanks for reviewing!

Name: Furry Little Problem (Signed) · Date: 05/07/07 13:56 · For: Crosses and Garlic
I liked this, it's a good take on the "confrontation". I've only ever written it as them all confronting him together, but I really like this idea. The awkward silence was good! I can just see James and Remus sat there, twiddling their thumbs, waiting for the other to speak!
Well done - nice fic!

Author's Response: Thank you! This is my first "confrontation" fic, so I'm glad you liked it! :)

Name: Morgainne (Signed) · Date: 05/07/07 13:46 · For: Crosses and Garlic

Author's Response: Thanks!

Name: Vindictus Viridian (Signed) · Date: 05/07/07 13:11 · For: Crosses and Garlic
I love this dear dotty gormless James of yours. He has it all figured out, and yet... Thanks for a good read!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I had fun with James, but you know he's not quite as gormless as he pretends... ;)

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