Excellent, excellent story. I really like the way how you put so much emotion into it. It was good that you picked a topic that everyone could relate to- a lost love. The ending was a bit shaky, though. I enjoy your writing style and WILL add this story to my favorites. A gazillion thumbs up for this one!
Author's Response: Well, thank you! I'm not overly fond of this story myself, but I'm glad you enjoyed it anyhow. =]
Very good! And so said! *cries*
Author's Response: Thank you so much! *hands tissue* :)
First off, I would like to say that the brewing of the potion was wonderful. I loved how you did it step by step.
My only crit (and it really is tiny) is that I would have liked to have seen her struggle with it a little more, as I assume that it is quite a difficult potion to make.
Nevertheless, I loved how she was constantly worrying about her father coming back, and what he would say if he knew what she was doing.
I also liked the whole banana bread thing - most would take Dumbledore's suggestion of a glass of water and use that, but you came up with your own idea.
I loved how she was forgetting Mrs Cole's name as well - that was a nice touch! Also, Merope laughing as she was dying was oddly fitting. I didn't think it would work, but, strangely, it does. I can't quite put my finger on it.
All in all, a really nice, well written fic!
Author's Response: Thanks for the nice review! Yes, Merope probably should have struggled a little more with the potion . . . I suppose it was her natural witch instincts kicking in, even before she knew she had them? ;) And the banana bread -- honestly, that was the first thing that popped into my head, and I only remembered that Dumbledore suggested water after sending this fic to my beta. :P
As to Merope laughing as she died, I wasn't sure if it would work either. I'm glad you thought it did! After all, Riddle Jr.'s must have gotten his insanity from someone, yeah? ;) Anywho, thanks again!
This is for MQ's Potions class, NEWT level.
On the whole, I think that the making of the Love Potion was very well done. I loved the ingredients - they were unusual, without being too unrealistic. (Eg, no blood taken from the lover at full moon while he is eating a blood red apple, or something. >.
Author's Response: Thanks so much, Evie! I had a really hard time with figuring out the potion ingredients, actually, and really just ended up picking things that sounded interesting. >.> Hee. Anyhow, thanks for reading!
now this is a really good read! you choose unique stories to write about, i really like it! and merope getting the name of ms cole (frick i cnt even remember!) wrong and then giving up and saying Miss Whoever-The-Hell-She-Was was genius. its a really good fic, i think im guna go hav a looksie at some more of your fics! they really are fantastic! :D
Author's Response: Aw, thanks so much! I did have fun with Miss Cole's name, teehee. Thanks for the review. :)
This is a very fine story, written in wonderful style.... I absolutely love it.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! :D
I really enjoyed reading this. This part of Voldemort's past isn't explored much, so it was very interesting to read about.
Author's Response: I'm pleased you enjoyed! Thanks for the review! :)