Reviews For Memories Fading
Reviewer: twirlergirl583
Date: 07/14/07 22:16
Chapter: Chapter 1

Is this about Ginny missing Harry or Hermione missing Ron...or maybe even Molly missing Aurthor...hmmm.

Anyway, this was more than beautiful. And I loved it very much. I think this is how Hermione (not the other 2) would react to her love's death. this poem made me shiver when I was reading it. It is one of my favs.

-Emily-

Author's Response: I'm glad you thought it was how Hermione would react- it is supposed to be from Hermione's POV. Thanks for the review. ^^

Reviewer: MissyQuill
Date: 06/05/07 0:31
Chapter: Chapter 1

Her breaths become more shallow
And she lays a hand over her heart.
She sighs and feels tears falling
As the beats get farther apart.

That was th€ b€st part and that is saying som€thing as th€ whol€ thing is bloody fantastic. I am h€r€by officialy j€lous€ of you.=Sammy



Author's Response: I canged that stanza like 2-3 times before I came up with that. ^_~ Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX
Date: 05/21/07 11:20
Chapter: Chapter 1

I can't find a word to describe how I feel at this moment so WOW!!! will have to work. WOW, I loved this poem. It was so incredibly beautiful and powerful, and sad. My favorite lines were: Everyone should have a happy ending,
She thinks it should be a rule.

To me that is one of the most powerful lines of the poem. I aggre it should be a rule. Again amazing job, I completely utterly loved this peom.

Author's Response: I like that line as well. 'Tis so sad that some people must suffer so much. Everyone should have a happy ending, the world would be so great, but sadly, reality is not. ^_^ Thanks for reviewing and liking it. ;)

Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX
Date: 05/21/07 11:16
Chapter: Chapter 1

I can't find a word to describe how I feel at this moment so WOW!!! will have to work. WOW, I loved this poem. It was so incredibly beautiful and powerful, and sad. My favorite lines were: Everyone should have a happy ending,
She thinks it should be a rule.

To me that is one of the most powerful lines of the poem. I aggre it should be a rule. Again amazing job, I completely utterly loved this peom.

Author's Response: ...

Reviewer: Euphrates
Date: 05/05/07 9:35
Chapter: Chapter 1

*is back to her normal self* This is really awesome, you know. This poem. Sorry about the not exactly nice review before - I just reread it. >.< I am sorry, because I made this poem sound bad when it truly was not. I just tend to be nitpicky, and I'm sorry.

But in reality, this was an amazing poem, and you can rhyme really well. You really show a lot of Hermione's emotions and feelings without going into too much boring detail, so kudos to you. The last stanza is really powerful, btw. Left me shocked. I really didn't know she was going to die! That's so sad. But really well done and well written.

~Kate

Author's Response: Don't be sorry. I accept criticism and I could see that the poem needs work. I'm just to busy right now to work on it. *sigh* I don't even have the time to write more poetry, nor the patience. Anyways, I'm glad you liked it. ^_^

Reviewer: Euphrates
Date: 05/02/07 15:24
Chapter: Chapter 1

Hello! I shall commence to review. :D Sorry for my shortness and lack of rambling, but...*shrugs* Not up to it today.

Nitpicks:

If only she could see him,
Embrace him one last time.
All her tears would disappear,
Is happiness a crime?


To me, the 'Is happiness a crime?' part, while sounding very poetic and sweet, does not really make much sense. To me, remember. Might make perfect sense to you. To me, however, it seems too much, as if you were forcing out something 'pretty' for this poem. Why would she think happiness is a crime? Just because she can't have it? What if she couldn't have, say, her dinner? Would that be a crime too?

I'm sorry. I'm being awfully cruel now. I digress. I just don't think that that line makes much sense. Does it to you? I'd love an explanation. (Watch, the explanation of yours will be well thought out and make perfect sense. *sigh* I'm sorry. It just struck me as odd. I may not be thinking straight.)

Her breaths become more shallow,
She can barely see her hands.


'She can barely see her hands.' ...does this mean she is crying? I dunno. It says she is in the next line, but I think the 'hand' line isn't right for this poem. I mean, I can't see my hands when it is dark out, but it doesn't mean I'm sad. I think you were trying to get a rhyme for the word 'lands' two lines later. I understand, as I do that all the time, but I would reconsider the 'hands' rhyme. Just me.

...I'm sorry, this sounds mean, doesn't it. *sad* I'm sorry. I am.

I do love this poem, Lalalalatina. My nitpicks must take up less than 1/100 of the poem, anyway. Just ignore me. Sorry I couldn't be all happy and loving and stuff - I just don't feel up to it, today. /excuses

~Kate


Author's Response: K... about the crime part. Well, I guess I was just showing how she doesn’t understand why her life is so terrible and she can’t be happy. You know, cuz her and Ron always fought and then her best friend had such a terrible life and her and Ron haven’t OFFICIALLYgotten together (yet) and then there’s the war and she lost everyone and she’s all alone and now I’m just rambling... So now, about the hands part.... eh.... I guess I need to make it clearer. So I wanted to get the point across that she is experiencing a very slow and lonely death and I guess I was showing that her vision is blurring or something but I guess I didn’t make it clearer. I’ll probably go back and fix the poem l8r. *shrugs* Thanks for reviewing. ^^

Reviewer: radcliffe4eva
Date: 04/30/07 18:06
Chapter: Chapter 1

Oh, that was beautiful! Poor Hermione...

Author's Response: Thanks to you for the review! I agree- poor, poor, poor Hermione...

Reviewer: Secret shadows
Date: 04/30/07 15:02
Chapter: Chapter 1

Oh my gosh, that is amazing. It's beautifully written, but so sad. Poor Hermione. It holds a powerful message. LIve for today, because tomorrow may never come. Please, keep on writing. I love getting those emails saying 'lalalalatina has written a new story.' Day after day. How do you do it? Amazing, simply..amazing.

Author's Response: It makes my day when I get reviews... Especially really nice ones like this one! I don't know, but I just can't seem to stop writing and submiting. And I am always checking for new reviews. So, thank you for reviewing and for liking my work. It makes me so happy when I see that my poem has been favorited. ^_^

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