Reviews For In Memory
Reviewer: Euphrates
Date: 05/02/07 15:28
Chapter: Chapter 1

allura - great job on this. With a few short phrases, you managed to convey Sirius's and Remus's feelings amazingly. Great job.

One nitpick:

I remember howling,
Howling for my friend,


The repetition of the word 'howling' here seems out of place and rather unneeded, as there is no other repetition like that here.

Kudos to you, though, for knowing exactly how Sirius and Remus felt, even though you have just read about them. You're a great poet and author. *bows*

~Kate

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Yeah, I see what you mean about that line--I'll change it. Thank you! Needless to say, you made my day with that review! : )

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