All I can say is "Wow!" In this story, Charlie seems so amazing! He really seems like the perfect match for Hermione. I can't blame Hermione for feeling in the middle of both Ron and Charlie. It's the same situation that Cho Chang was in after Cedric's death. Hermione wanted to be with Charlie, but she felt that it would be an insult to Ron's name if she was involved in a romantic relationship with anyone. Excellent story, by the way!
Oh, Fennnnnn!! What an emotional story! Just from the very beginning, my heart went out to Hermione. I could feel her dilemma from believing she should move on after two years, but this paragraph you wrote was so telling and insightful - it really nailed Ron's character, in my mind:
"No, it isn’t. Hermione felt guilty for even thinking this, but she knew deep in her heart that it was true. Ron, no matter how much she had loved him — how much he had loved her — had his flaws. And one of those was his deep jealousy of others, whether it be his brothers or his best friend or any male who happened to catch Hermione’s attention. Ron would have wanted her to be happy … but even more importantly, he would have wanted her to mourn him."
I was nodding the entire time I read that. It's just so exactly right.
I thought the letter from Mrs. Weasley asking Hermione to perhaps spend time with Charlie, even though she knew Hermione had gone to the cottage for solitude was such typical "Mrs. Weasley". *laughs* Oh, that woman!
But the best part was Charlie. So like Ron in his obsessive talk of dragons, rather than Qidditch, but the same single-mindedness. My favorite part was when he kneeled down next to Hermione and told her "I loved him, too", and let her cry on his chest. *happy sigh* It was just such a chivalrous, caring reaction on his part!
I'm glad Charlie was able to bring some fun back into her life, but I really liked that you wrote the ending the way you did - both of them feeling rather awkward, but realizing there was something there that could be explored and developed at a slow pace. I think it would have felt rushed and out of place if they had actually kissed.
Fennn, this is such a sensitive, warm and funny story about two characters that I've never really "seen" together in my mind, but you made it so very possible and plausible to me, that I want to read more about them!!
Well done, Fenn! This was marvelous! I know Julie must have lurrrved it!
*hugs and squishes*
Author's Response: *hugs tightly*
ohh, that was beautiful. i want them to have their kiss. this is really good. it's going in my favorites.
Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much! =]] It means a lot to me. I'm actually considering a sequel, so keep your eyes peeled--they may just have that kiss! =] Thanks again, and I'm glad you enjoyed it!
awwwwwww!!!!! that was soooooo cute.
Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed it. =] Thank you so much for your review!
You have no idea how long I've been meaning to review this fiction! *shakes head*
Hermione/Charlie...hmmm...not my kind of bowl of soup, however, the way that you have the story set up is amazing.
I love how you describe everything-especially the dragon pendant. I loved that part. I hope that you will do a sequel to this. It's way good! ~MJ
Author's Response: Hey MJ! Before I say anything, I just had to say this--I never heard that phrase before (bowl of soup) but I like it! =P I'm used to "cup of tea", but that's pretty original... *wonders how she got so sidetracked*
*cough* Thank you very much! I never gave Hermione/Charlie much thought, but I had to write it for the Ravenclaw Spring Fic Exchange (*wishes you were in Ravenclaw*), and I grew rather fond of it. =] And I wasn't sure if the dragon pendant would come out corny, but so far everone seems to like it. =] Thanks so much!
I love the level of detail you write in. Sometimes I find detail heavy and inhibiting to flow, but you have great balance. The story is both vivid and touching. You should be very proud of this.
Author's Response: Hi, Bridget! Thanks so much for your review--I'm absolutely thrilled that you like it. =) Thanks again! ~Fenn
Ooh, very good!
Hehe, I'm glad you write so many stories, because they're all amazing. The best part about this one was that you took things SLOWLY instead of having them randomly snog as soon as they met. It made the ship, which I would never have expected before reading this, seem more believable.
Another great thing was the setting. I mean it was unbelievably well described. I felt like I was actually there. I've sad it before, but I'll said it again: You definitely have a talent for describing places.
Let's see, what can I do in the way of actually helpful concrit? Um... well at the beginning Charlie seemed just the tiniest bit out of character to me. I know he loves dragons, but when we saw him in GoF he didn't seem like the kind of person who would tell stories ll day long. But then that's sort of just my opinion...
What can I say? It was wonderful. Keep writing (and update Fenrir soon, I'm dying of anticipation).
Author's Response: Hey Melodie!
Thanks so much for your wonderful, thoughtful review! *warm fuzziness* I'm so glad that you like my story (and don't mind the slow pace!) and that you think that the ship was believable. =) And you flatter me too much--but I'm thrilled you like the description!
Thanks for the concrit--I see what you mean. =) However, I'll try to cover for myself and say that... erm, never mind, I don't have any excuses! *giggles* But thank you, I'll keep that in mind!
Thanks again! ~Fenn
PS-Ahh, Fenrir... It'll probably be a while until the next update due to the Spring Challenge and the Gauntlet, but I'll do my best!
Fenn! This is absolutely lovely - knowing Julie, this is a perfect story for her. :) You did a great job with Hermione's character in particular, capturing her mood changes from peaceful to purposeful - I really liked that. I loved the pendant, that was a wonderful touch, and the end was perfect! They didn't kiss, but the last line leaves the reader with so much hope. You set up the beginning of their relationship really well here - are you planning to continue? I think you could. Great job, I'm glad I read your story!
Author's Response: Hey Gina!
Thanks so much for your sweet review! I'm so glad to hear that youl liked my story--the ending, too. =) I'm not planning to continue it, but who knows? Maybe in the distant future when I'm short on plot bunnies I'll come back to it.
Thanks so much! ~Fenn