I read this as part of the Review Tag, I would have made it here eventually, I am systematically reading as many Ravenclaw stories as I can, but Phia tagged you, so here I am.
I enjoyed this very much. I did have a few problems with some of the ‘pack mannerisms’, but overall I think you did a great job. With Dumbledore handing out edicts for Remus to carry out, it’s a wonder he wasn’t killed as soon as he let himself be noticed.
Fenrir doesn’t seem to be the type to allow any ‘trespassing’ wolves into his pack, unless he knew he had made them. Romulus seems like something Dumbledore would think of, and think Fenrir was too stupid to put together with Remus. It amazes me that for such a smart man, Dumbledore can be very stupid.
I wish you hadn’t stopped it where you did, but that leaves it up to the reader to continue the scenario in their own mind the way they want it to end. Again, I enjoyed this, and I will be back to read more soon.
Wow. Fenners! You are amazing!
I loved how it was so descriptive, especially at the beginning. At first I was a bit confused, because I wasn't sure where he was. But I figured I'd soon find out; that's how most stories are!
I am so proud of you! *huggles* The ending is so perfect! One of the best endings I've ever read. Even in books I've read. Very rarely do endings come out so wonderfully, but here is one that is wonderful.
“The brother?” Feeling a surge of pride rush through him, Remus took a step forward so he was face to face with his enemy.
“His name was Remus.”
Beautiful, beautiful! I love reading about Remus, as he is sometimes my fictional cousin. (Fine, there are times when I glom over his handsomeness and awesomeness.
Such an amazing story, Fenn. *wipes tears from eyes* It's beautiful. Keep 'em coming! Happy writing!
Great fic, I love it! You portray the emotions realy well, and I love your style of writing. This was a beautiful peice, and I look forward to any future sequals!
Keep up the good work, this was brilliant :)
P.S. Blue moon on the 1st! Wow. Hope it doesn't worsen the transformation.... ;)
Author's Response: Hey Tonks! *tackles* Thanks so much for your great review! =] I'm so glad that you like the story--it means a lot, seeing that you're such a positively awesome writer yourself. *hugs* Thanks!
Ooooh, really? *gazes out the window* I certainly hope it doesn't... *has plot bunny*
ABSOLUTELY AMAZING!! i love all the tension and i love werewolves. this is great...too bad its a oneshot. can u make it have another chapter? preferably CHAPTERS? plz? its great, it should have more.
PLEASE HAVE MORE!!!
Author's Response: Hello! Thank you very much for your wonderful review--I'm flattered! =] I'm actually planning of writing a sequel to it, but it won't be up for a while--be sure to look for it when it is, though! *wink* Thank you so much, and I'm very glad that you liked my story!
Hi Fenn! Great story... oh my gosh, it was great! Your details were spectacular, and the general feeling of the poem was haunted, reminiscent, and all that it was supposed to be. I had been curious, since book six, about Remus's experiences in the wolf colony. I love your ending-- I am imagining Remus coming out on top, whether it is that way or not! :)
I loved the way you worded Remus's flashback-- at first it was carefree, then it grew frightening... it was brief and achieved what it needed to (if what it needed to do was to instill resentment for Fenrir and pity for Remus in the reader). I do have a question for you: Do you think Remus is Muggleborn, Half-Blood, or Pureblood? I'm thinking that his parents must of had some idea of the magical world to find out what was happening to Remus every month, but I was wondering what you thought.
Excellent job, as always! *hugs!*
Author's Response: Hey Loony! =]]] I haven't heard from you in a while. *hugs* How have you been?
Anyways, thank you sooo much for your sweet review. I'm so thrilled that you like it, and thanks so much for letting me know! Your review really did make my day--thank you!
As for your question.. I've always been under the opinion that both his parents are Wizards, but neither are pure-blooded... Perhaps one is a half-blood and one is a Muggle-born? (I'm not sure the term for that... =p) Good question, though! *ponders*
*Hugs* Thanks so much for the awesome review! Fennnnn
This is really good. I love the choice of Romulus, for his name, and the interaction between Remus and Fenrir is very well done. I also really like Fenrir's intelligence here. The last part is great -- reminds us why Remus was in Gryffindor. I can see him having precisely this type of courage.
Author's Response: Hey Vorona! =]]] Thank you so much for your sweet review; I'm so glad you like it! I really appreciate you letting me know--thanks so much! *warm fuzzies*
Wow, great story! l couldn't stop reading... I love the imagery, it really makes the fic great. I think the best part was when you described Fenrir walking through the crowd, that was an awesome comparison. and love the name! lol I keep thinking of that every time i see remus' name... great job on this!
Author's Response: Wow, thank you very much for your wonderful review. =] I'm so very thrilled that you like the story so much--and I really appreciate you taking the time to read and review. Thanks so much! =]]]
This one-shot is absolutely brilliant! I think its strength is in the vividness of the details; the strongest images for me were of Remus crouching in wait while re-illusioning, being pinned by Fenrir and licking his snout, the squalor of the shantytown, the crowd trapping him and pushing him forward... Pretty much everything, really. :) The whole story is gripping in its fear and darkness. I thought Remus's character was particularly well done; his emotions were raw, and not all of them were ideal. Sometimes his character can become a bit too perfect, but in this story, he showed weakness and anger and self-pity, while still ending in an amazing blaze of bravery. And oh, that ending! I can honestly say it's one of the best I've read. It's just... *sigh* I'm so glad you decided to go the dark route. :) Upon multiple readings, I think I've decided that I'd like to see a bit more expansion on his transformation, but that's not really fair of me to say now since I didn't think of it while betaing... so it's not that crucial, just a thought. Other than that, I really have no concrit. This is inspired work; well done!
Author's Response: *squishes beta* Thank you so much for your sweet review, and your wonderful help on the story! I'm so glad you think my imagery was up to par, and that you liked the ending. XD Thank you muchisimos!
Great fan-fic but I wish you would write more to the story... I'd like to hear about other characters from his pov and have more details. For example, why did the werewolves live together in a tiny lil village that did NOT look like it had wizards and witches in it. :D Hope you write more! Thanks
Author's Response: Thank you very much for your review! I'm very glad that you liked my story, and I'll definitely keep your suggestions in mind. As for the village... It's actually one of the werewolf villages, which explains why it looks very un-wizardly.
Thanks again, ~Fenn
interesting interesting. nice cliffie too.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. =)
Wonderful! Great description. Very accurate, which is always good. Seems it could just slip right into one of the actual HP books! Liked Remus's memory of being bitten, but wished there was even more just to provoke more sympathy for him. Very enjoyable. It's no wonder you're one of my favorite authors! (Actually, you're the only one right now). Another great story, FenrirG! Loved it, loved it, loved it...
Author's Response: Hey, you!
Thank you so much for your sweet review! =D I can't tell you how flattered I am that you think it's like the books. =) I'm so pleased you liked it, and thanks for taking the time to read and review!!