Reviewer: Gonz
Date: 09/23/07 21:00
Chapter: Chapter 1

Very nice interpretation of the challenge, and interesting story too.

What I liked most was how at first Lavís love toward Red was innocent and kind of giggling girlish, more of a crush than anything. And the cases in Joís books were one tried to use Love Potions fell under the girlish crush category, so you had me thinking heís going to cheat on her and in despair of her crush come up with a love potion. I couldnít have been further from the truth. I thought the revenge motive worked really well, and makes sense. People want fairy-tale love, but a Love Potion could really be seen as cheating, so by making the potion come up of revenge and a desire to hurt Red and men makes a lot of sense. I really enjoyed it. I thought the ending with the card and Redís thoughts worked really well especially were he acknowledged that he said he hated Lav, but not really. All in all a very enjoyable read. Keep up the good work!


Author's Response: Thank you so much, glad I could surprise you! =)

Reviewer: FenrirG
Date: 04/12/07 23:58
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wow, I really did like this fic! It was a very interesting plot idea, and you managed to pull it off very well.


I'll admit that in the middle of the story, I was doubtful--love doesn't come that easy. So it was a pleasant surprise to see that you agreed with me, and showed this through Red's unfaithful actions.


I find it very intriguing that you chose the names "Ron" and "Lavender for your characters. Could it perhaps symbolize Ron Weasley and Lavender Brown's relationship--that Ron was just using Lavender to get his way? Interesting but clever choice!


Also, I love how you worked in the Wizard Card just at the very end; instead of showing her invent a potion, you instead chose to showcase the event(s) that lead her to pursue her dream. It was very well done and rather empowering too; her decision to become a Potioneer may have partly been for revenge, but it was something she had to prove to both Red andherself.


Like I said, this was a very well-written fic and I enjoyed it immensely. I'm amazed that this is your first story on Muggle Net Fan Fiction, and I can't wait to read more from you. Great job.

Author's Response: Thank you very much! While the names weren't complete coicidences I really didn't think of the paralell until it was pointed out to me by someone else and I love that it works that way. The choice to show the Wizard Card at the end seemed the natural thing to do. I figured it isn't the event that makes the interesting story it's what leads to it. I'm very glad you liked it and yes I love to write but this is my first fanfiction here on any site really unless you count FF.net ages ago. But I've just sumbitted the prologue to a chapter fic so that's coming up! Also, may I say I loved your review also, yay for long reviews!

Reviewer: cAughtonFire
Date: 04/10/07 17:31
Chapter: Chapter 1

Yay, I'm so happy to see this up!! Good luck, I hope you win!!

-Ashley (belezza)

Author's Response: Thank you and thanks so much for the beta help, much appreciated!

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