That was cute. I really enjoy when authors portray Lucius and Narcissa in love. The flashbacks were really well done.
Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much, Domo. I'm thrilled to hear you enjoyed it.
Wonderful work, megan_lupin!
I must congratulate you on making me want to write a Lucius/Narcissa story myself – and only really, really good stories can make me want to write the ship.
I loved how you portrayed Lucius and Narcissa’s love as pure and true and it came about naturally, and it didn’t creep up on them from behind when they were forced together. It almost came about as it did for Lily and James – apart from the fact that Lily did loathe James in the first place. But let’s not get off topic.
I also loved how you showed Lucius’ love for Narcissa when Draco asks him to come with them to Diagon Alley – I don’t see Lucius as a man who would want to be seen with his eleven-year-old son and wife trudging around Diagon Alley for school supplies. However, I think that it was the fact that Narcissa would want him to go was what made that section so romantic even though there was no interaction between the two.
The only qualm I have about the story is the flashback which shows Lucius comforting Narcissa as she mourns the “loss” of Draco when he gets on the Hogwarts Express – I think that, in whatever circumstances, Lucius would have started exhibiting the coldness and cunning that he shows in the books. But that was the only thing.
Oh, and I must say that you really made me imagine the wealth of the Malfoys in the description of their house, their possessions, and their clothing! Bravo!
That was so sweet! I liked how you humanized Mr and Mrs. Malfoy on this one, it's very fitting for this setting and while Lucius seems to be a bit aloof (Love that word :P) from Draco he is a father figure so that's another thing that I liked about it... *tries to think of something constructive....*
The few slices of what could be called bread and a bowel of something that resembled a soup that sat next to a glass of darkly-coloured water, however, were hardly items worthy of being digested. Bowel should be bowl... Um, that's it! You can sort of see where each drabble stops which makes it a bit inconsistent, but all in all- an excellent piece of work!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review, dragonwings. I'm glad you liked it, especially your comment about Lucius and Narcissa's characters. Making these characters a bit more human is a lot of fun.
"Bowel" to "bowl" *smacks self on forehead* You're right, I didn't catch that in the editing.
This was wonderful. I love how you wrote them so connected to each other. The ending, where she wished for him to come back and he said he would, was perfect. It was amazing to watch their love like this.
I have always believed that they married out of obligation, which is common belief, but as you said it’s open for debate. However, I also believe that there is love between them. Not the fairy tale kind of love, but a love that was developed by surviving so many hardships together.
Your characterization of Lucius was excellent. I hate to see him written as through he has no feelings. You handled him wonderfully. I can really see him sitting inside his cell reminiscing about the past and wanting nothing more than to get back to his wife.
I also adored the parts with Draco. Really showed that his parents loved him, which I believe they do. It was cute when Draco asked his father to come with him to Diagon Alley, he was trying to be so mature and detached, but Lucius could see right through him.
Your portrayal of the Malfoys was wonderfully refreshing. It’s always nice to find another fan who doesn’t think they’re all evil. :D
The only thing I would consider changing is maybe some of the proposal part. It was very good, but I don’t know that it needed to be told from both POVs. It seemed a tad overdone, but that’s just my opinion.
I absolutely adored the story. I hope you continue to write about the Malfoys.
Author's Response: Oh, what a wonderful review! Thank you so much!
I'm glad you liked the characterisation of Lucius. One of the things that drives me mad is when he's portrayed in that one-sided caricature of a heartless Death Eater. I like thinking there's a bit more to his character than that, after all.
Draco was so cute, wasn't he? I like seeing the Malfoy family portrayed in a way that's a bit more human than they tend to get in mainstream fandom, so this piece was a lot of fun to write for me.
The proposal ... I remember writing that scene, as a matter of fact, and struggling with how to say it without really repeating myself. I definitely see what you mean, but the way the story was going had things told in both PoVs until later, so I just did it.
Thank you once again, though, for you kind comments.
This is a great story. I loved how you portrayed their feelings all through the story. I liked the change from Lucius being abusive to Narcissa. I thought their realationship was very cute and loving. Overall, a great story to read!
Author's Response: Thanks so much, james_fanatic. I'm glad you liked it, especially about the change from the common fanon portrayal of the Malfoy family.
I liked this! You're right; many people portray the Malfoy's marriage as unpleasant, abusive, and unloving, but this was nice to read to mix it up a little. Personally, I've always thought they loved each other very much, and I'm glad somebody else agrees with me. =]
You were very creative with this. Many Malfoy Moments are Missing Moments from the books, and I think you wrote them in excellent character. I liked how both were confident while looking at each other during their school years, and I especially loved his wink. That seemed so Lucius Malfoy-ish to me.
The transitions between past, present, Lucius, and Narcissa were also well-written. They flowed smoothly, and I didn't have to go back and reread to see where I was in time, and whose POV I was reading from.
So, overall, you did a fantastic job. Keep up the great work!!
Author's Response: Well, thank you so much for the wonderful review, greeneyes. I'm glad you liked my portrayal of the Malfoys, as I, too, became a bit tired with every fan fic I read with them showing their relationship in a negative way.
I'm also glad you felt they were both in character throughout the whole thing. Sometimes that's the hardest bit, especially when writing characters that one doesn't see very often.
Again, though, I'm glad you liked it, and thank you for such a great review.