Reviewer: Vitamin Vicki
Date: 12/23/08 21:01
Chapter: Chapter 2 - A Letter and a Sneeze

[gets chills] nice cliffie at the end, Tiney. Again, your characterization was great- it seemed just the way Harry would react about houses. :) But also, again, consider getting some more people to look this over... :)

I want more!



Author's Response: BE MY BETA AND YOU SHALL RECEIVE MORE!!! pleasee?? :D

Reviewer: Vitamin Vicki
Date: 12/23/08 20:26
Chapter: Chapter One - Married, with Children

You've got a really good plot so far, Tine. And your characteration was so... spot-on. It was amazing! Especially when Draco came in. I thought Ron reacted a little spastically in the end, but otherwise - I applaud you. :)

You might want to consider getting, erm, another beta, my love. You've got some grammar errors, as well as some spellings. In your summary, too... :) I'll help you if you want.

Again, your characterisation was <3. I'm going to keep on reading... 



Author's Response: Fish... help PLEASE?!? i'd love it! i wouldn't trust no one but youuu m'love! and thanks.. i love characters! :D

Reviewer: weasleywannabe47
Date: 11/05/08 16:49
Chapter: Chapter One - Married, with Children

Oh,gosh...I have found someone with my writing style.....HOLY COW!!This is awesome!Update,my style twin!!!

Author's Response: lol!! Yay! that makes me happy!! :D I'm trying to update as soon as I can! :) Its ben slow goin' tho... :(

Reviewer: marauderteddylupin
Date: 05/09/08 15:38
Chapter: Chapter 2 - A Letter and a Sneeze

let me geuss, it's the malfoy's place, you siriously are a good writer i'll keep my eyes open for the next chapter

Author's Response: you're just gonna have to wait and see m'love!

Reviewer: Ironic Inspiration
Date: 01/24/08 17:38
Chapter: Chapter 2 - A Letter and a Sneeze

Oh, Cliffhanger! Well, i think it's really interesting how the twins act toward each other. i actually wonder what houses they will end up in. I'm starting to get the impression that they wont be in the same one. The ending is definitely a surprise. I wonder who on earth she ended up running into. Well, I guess I will have to see, won't I? I hope you update soon!

Author's Response: I'm trying! As soon as my beta replies (any one of them... *sigh*) I should be posting quickly!

Reviewer: Ironic Inspiration
Date: 01/24/08 17:31
Chapter: Chapter One - Married, with Children

This chapter was very sweet. I liked how you had the twins' appearence different. It makes it more interesting. Harry's personality was definitely right on target. I could see him freaking out that way! Good Job. Great first chapter.

Author's Response: Thanks Violet! It took a lot of work to get Harry's character right, so I'm grateful for the compliment!

Reviewer: PadfootnPeeves
Date: 12/24/07 9:34
Chapter: Chapter 2 - A Letter and a Sneeze

Dundundun! Cliffie!

It's a bit confoozling with the Rylie/Sam-ness. Other than that, it was a good chappie. Krystal sounds like a crapheadPercy-ish person.

Ohh, I bet she's in Malfoy's house!

I hope chapter three is up soon!
~Padfoot

Author's Response: Krystie can be a lot like percy sometimes... but she does, like Percy, have a good heart! The Rylie/Sam hing was explained below if you're still wondering!

Reviewer: PadfootnPeeves
Date: 12/24/07 9:31
Chapter: Chapter One - Married, with Children

Aww, sweet! I only have to nitpicks: One, you should space out some of the diologue more (ie, the Draco and Ron part), and why were there the two question marks randomly on the page? Other than that, it was a very cute chapter. On to the next!
~Padfoot

Author's Response: I have no idea about the question marks... it's really wierd... Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX
Date: 12/21/07 17:28
Chapter: Chapter 2 - A Letter and a Sneeze

Ooo, good cliffie. I liked this chap as well. The Rylie Sam thing is kinda confusing but not big. Good job!!!

Author's Response: I agree... Her name is Rylie-Samantha... and she likes Samantha better... so she's called Sam by her friends. I just got used to calling her Rylie though... she does go by Rylie... Sam is just a pet name. Thanks!

Reviewer: XhayleeXblackX
Date: 12/21/07 17:10
Chapter: Chapter One - Married, with Children

Aw, this was really sweet. I liked your dialogue alot, it was very interesting. I have a couple of nitpicks though, nothing big! The '??' parts were confusing and I wasn't sure what they were. Also, when using dialogue with each new speaker change paragraphs (just a tip!). And Krystie's name changed a couple times. Other than those I loved this! I must keep reading to find out what happens!!!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! it was great! The question marks confuse me too... I don't really know what happened there...?? Thanks Haylee!

Reviewer: Weasleyboyfreak
Date: 12/16/07 12:36
Chapter: Chapter 2 - A Letter and a Sneeze

Ah, the pleasures of parenthood. It is very well writen! Great job!

Author's Response: Oops! Double!

Reviewer: Weasleyboyfreak
Date: 12/16/07 12:31
Chapter: Chapter 2 - A Letter and a Sneeze

Ah, the pleasures of parenthood. It is very well writen! Great job!

Author's Response: Rylie and Krystie sure do get into a lot of trouble! thanks!

Reviewer: Weasleyboyfreak
Date: 12/16/07 12:28
Chapter: Chapter One - Married, with Children

Aww I love it! Sooo cute!

Author's Response: Thanks! I had fun writing it!

Reviewer: mispersonality
Date: 12/09/07 10:45
Chapter: Chapter 2 - A Letter and a Sneeze

Ello, love!! I just realized there was a second chappie!! Oooh, a cliffie!! Trying to torture us are you? lol! I can`t wait for the next chapter!!!
Love from, Mispersonality

Author's Response: Ello! I know.. we all hate cliffies... but they're so much fun to write! Just wait till chapter three!

Author's Response: Ello! I know.. we all hate cliffies... but they're so much fun to write! Just wait till chapter three!

Reviewer: mispersonality
Date: 12/08/07 22:26
Chapter: Chapter One - Married, with Children

Hey!! Thought i`d check out you`re story and, might I say, it is very good!! I like the names (original and cute) and the fact that Harry and Ron can still act like Hogwarts students even when they are adults!! A happy new year indeed!! Overall lovely story!!! Mispersonality

Author's Response: Aw Thanks Melissa! Keep reading! I will be posting more chapters soon, if they get accepted :P! Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: siriusly_insane
Date: 11/11/07 14:14
Chapter: Chapter One - Married, with Children

Awwww!! YAY someone actually gave the Potter kids original names! hehe...I really like this story so far. I'm from Ontario too! that was random..

Author's Response: WOOT! Go ontario! Thanks for revirwing! Ya... Lily James Sirius, Molly, Albus, Remus etc. Got too boring....

Reviewer: EllaBelle18
Date: 08/25/07 16:23
Chapter: Chapter 2 - A Letter and a Sneeze

Hello! Just wanted to say that I love your story and please update soon.

Author's Response: aw! Thanks so much! I've got a bizillion chappies waiting to be posted... so I'll keep ya (and the story) posted... hahaha

Reviewer: EllaBelle18
Date: 08/25/07 16:23
Chapter: Chapter 2 - A Letter and a Sneeze

Hello! Just wanted to say that I love your story and please update soon.

Author's Response: double!!

Reviewer: Ginny Potter101
Date: 08/22/07 12:45
Chapter: Chapter One - Married, with Children

There are a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes in this chapter. I also can't follow it too well. What was McGonagall doing at the ministry on New Years? I also don't know where you got the names. Like how did you get Krystal-Lee Amanda and Riley Samantha? Most Post-Hogwarts fics have at least one kid named after Lily, Sirius and/or James. I think it seems promising but it seems kinda like a cheap re-make to me, sort of like fake crocs, not the real thing, but a cheaper copy of it. Sorry for the negative feedback, I just call what I see.

Author's Response: Any feedback is welcome! Sorry if it sounds funny, but trust me, it gets better!

Reviewer: I_solemnly_swear
Date: 08/15/07 19:45
Chapter: Chapter 2 - A Letter and a Sneeze

Ohh, I wonder who it is! That would be interesting if it was someone she knew.

Author's Response: Oh I can't tell ya! You'll have to wait and see

Author's Response: Hey! *waves* NICOLE!!!! I didn't notice it was you until now! thanks for reviewing my story! P.S: Its Christine... ur beta!

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